Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

I can see why you won this contest! First of all, great artwork. Simply beautiful. Loved the very clever play on words . . . "striking omission". Well done and congrats.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014

Thank you for the great review.

Comment from Debbie7

Exceptional

Hello.,
A striking omission indeed! Haha. Great entry for this writing prompt.
Very well put together reptilian Haiku. Good luck in the contest.
Debbie

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

Thanks for reviewing and the bonus star.

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

Great use if descriptive words in your haiku to create great imagery. Good job with the syllable count, and great picture. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

thank you for reviewing.

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

eight foot diamondbacks
elude vacation brochures
striking omission

Good concrete imagery in diamondbacks and brochures. Easy to see why they would not be advertised! Good use of "striking" in the last line.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014

Thanks for the great review and picking up on (striking)

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Wow. this is SO good; really clever, and the double entendre satori is sizzling! I really enjoyed this haiku, author - best of luck in the contest with it!

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Fortunately, we saw no snakes in Costa Rica--we do observe them in Malibu periodically, however! Your 5-7-5 haiku is "striking" and the presentation did not "elude" along with the echoing "b's"! Cheers and happy weekend- Joan

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014

Thanks for the great review. Same to you.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is excellent, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this haiku. I hate snakes. my mother was on a bus tour one time and wanted to go to the bathroom, but was sidetracked by something she saw in the giftshop. a woman on the tour with her was bitten by a pygmy rattlesnack in the bathroom about five minutes later. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from TOMORAL

Excellent

Those vacation brochures never tell you about such creatures lurking in wood piles and tall grasses. This is a perfectly done reptile haiku and me thinks it might do well. Best of luck!

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014

Thanks or the great review.