Is Your Life like Mine?
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Hell's yeah, that little Asian beauty could cook breakfast for me anytime, if I were a single man, of course. Heck, for that matter, she could hang out and cook lunch, and supper, too, if she wanted to. I am quite sure we could find something to do to pass the time.
I do love Asian women, so exotically beautiful.
Good story, and I've been there, done that, heh-heh... Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Hell's yeah, that little Asian beauty could cook breakfast for me anytime, if I were a single man, of course. Heck, for that matter, she could hang out and cook lunch, and supper, too, if she wanted to. I am quite sure we could find something to do to pass the time.
I do love Asian women, so exotically beautiful.
Good story, and I've been there, done that, heh-heh... Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Thank you. Yes, I would never say this to the wife, but I love them too. I have fond memories of my college days.
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My pleasure, Lance. It's okay to admire a menu, just don't eat anything off of it, LOL.
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The young man got himself drunk. He had a lovely dream. Or was he still dreaming? He had a naked lady cooking him breakfast at ten in the morning . Let us leave it up to the imagination of the readers. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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I love the story. The young man got himself drunk. He had a lovely dream. Or was he still dreaming? He had a naked lady cooking him breakfast at ten in the morning . Let us leave it up to the imagination of the readers. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from dennis0530
Ha, ha! I see a double meaning in " Are you ready to eat... again? Did he have a "meal" before sleeping?
To the question "Is your life like mine?" not too many can respond with a "yes." But if this is the character's daily fare, I guess it is becoming boring.
The moral of the story is - don't drink on weekdays.
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Ha, ha! I see a double meaning in " Are you ready to eat... again? Did he have a "meal" before sleeping?
To the question "Is your life like mine?" not too many can respond with a "yes." But if this is the character's daily fare, I guess it is becoming boring.
The moral of the story is - don't drink on weekdays.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
Comment from Supe
Cute! Good use of the limited word count and a fun read. Wasn't expecting an ending like that, though the picture you chose is perfect. Good luck in the contest.
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Cute! Good use of the limited word count and a fun read. Wasn't expecting an ending like that, though the picture you chose is perfect. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
Comment from Kaila Mari
A very well written short story with sexual innuendo undertones. This entry adheres completely to the prompt's instructions. A good entry competitor; good luck!
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A very well written short story with sexual innuendo undertones. This entry adheres completely to the prompt's instructions. A good entry competitor; good luck!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
Comment from livelylinda
Author: yawn! Typical man story. You can lose your job but it doesn't matter because you had wild sex with some mindless boob job the night before. Old theme, over it. livelylinda
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Author: yawn! Typical man story. You can lose your job but it doesn't matter because you had wild sex with some mindless boob job the night before. Old theme, over it. livelylinda
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
Comment from adewpearl
You have incorporated the contest's required words well, no forcing
You've stayed in the required word limits
you get inside the narrator's thoughts well and depict effectively what can happen when a man drinks too much
Brooke
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You have incorporated the contest's required words well, no forcing
You've stayed in the required word limits
you get inside the narrator's thoughts well and depict effectively what can happen when a man drinks too much
Brooke
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
You used all the required words and stayed within the word limit. I'm not sure I follow the story line , I'm afraid. Good luck in the contest, though.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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You used all the required words and stayed within the word limit. I'm not sure I follow the story line , I'm afraid. Good luck in the contest, though.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Really? Did you enter this contest?
Comment from Bill Schott
Your story has all the required words and is of the appropriate length. I was surprised to see the nude woman as your art piece. I'm wondering if she has a tat or a bruise on her butt cheek.
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Your story has all the required words and is of the appropriate length. I was surprised to see the nude woman as your art piece. I'm wondering if she has a tat or a bruise on her butt cheek.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about the cook that stood in the kitchen after a night on the town. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about the cook that stood in the kitchen after a night on the town. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2014