Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "Hide And Seek"The clue is in the title!
14 total reviews
Comment from JennaG
I loved this! My son still does the exact same thing...and he's 7! He's getting a little better at hiding quietly, but if I talk enough while searching for him he usually still gives himself away with giggles. You've captured this sweet childhood experience so perfectly with your words. This is really well done! A true pleasure to read! :)
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I loved this! My son still does the exact same thing...and he's 7! He's getting a little better at hiding quietly, but if I talk enough while searching for him he usually still gives himself away with giggles. You've captured this sweet childhood experience so perfectly with your words. This is really well done! A true pleasure to read! :)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Hi Jenna :) thank you for your great comments, glad you enjoyed this one... Rebecca has started hiding in the place she last found me! Kids are funny! Kindest regards as always, Debra x
Comment from Imogen JH
Having read all the entries for this competition so far. I think this is certainly in the top three. It is in my top three. A close call indeed.
It has a charming childish feel to it. It fits the subject and flows so wonderfully. You can visualize the scene without effort.
Best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Having read all the entries for this competition so far. I think this is certainly in the top three. It is in my top three. A close call indeed.
It has a charming childish feel to it. It fits the subject and flows so wonderfully. You can visualize the scene without effort.
Best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Ah thanks,Imogen :) I went to bed last night with only 1 vote and awoke to 3 more... more than 2 votes in a contest is satisfying! Thanks for your great feedback (I'm intrigued as to which other 2 are in your top 3 LOL!) Kindest regards...:)
Comment from Louise Michelle
Aww, this is so sweet. Boy, I better have another sip of coffee because at first I read 'excitement' as 'excrement,' lol. You've written a charming little poem. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Aww, this is so sweet. Boy, I better have another sip of coffee because at first I read 'excitement' as 'excrement,' lol. You've written a charming little poem. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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LOL! She's toilet trained now haha! Thanks for your great feedback :) Kindest regards as always...x
Comment from Leineco
This is such a delicious concept! The childish little girl's giggles
of anticipation and excitement giving away her hiding spot.
It is the epitome of cuteness!
It wins my vote :-)
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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This is such a delicious concept! The childish little girl's giggles
of anticipation and excitement giving away her hiding spot.
It is the epitome of cuteness!
It wins my vote :-)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Hello lorraine :) Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and of course for your vote, which is very much appreciated! Kindest regards...
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
I so love things written about kids. Innocence at its best. Love your presentation - great photo!
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Hi,
I so love things written about kids. Innocence at its best. Love your presentation - great photo!
Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you Jax for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from RodG
This septolet captures the fun and joy of Hide & Seek in only 14 words. We also get a wonderful glimpse of the father playing along with his giggly daughter. The rhyme at the end of each stanza also adds to the joyful tone of the poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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This septolet captures the fun and joy of Hide & Seek in only 14 words. We also get a wonderful glimpse of the father playing along with his giggly daughter. The rhyme at the end of each stanza also adds to the joyful tone of the poem.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Rod for your wonderful feedback! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from seaglass
This Septolet describes a fun scene of playing a game with a child. The delightful rhyme and ending line paint a picture of those moments very clearly.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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This Septolet describes a fun scene of playing a game with a child. The delightful rhyme and ending line paint a picture of those moments very clearly.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you, seaglass, for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards...:)
Comment from Judy Couch
This is really a cute poem. Anyone who has ever played hide and seek with a child can identify with it. The picture enhances it perfectly.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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This is really a cute poem. Anyone who has ever played hide and seek with a child can identify with it. The picture enhances it perfectly.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you Judy, for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards :)
Comment from acerisestory
I love this! Although I am unfamiliar with the septolet, it appears you've done it just right. Your use of alliteration - close/count; giggles/give, is well done. I also like that you have rhymed your poem.
The picture is a perfect complement. Good luck in the contest. Alana
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I love this! Although I am unfamiliar with the septolet, it appears you've done it just right. Your use of alliteration - close/count; giggles/give, is well done. I also like that you have rhymed your poem.
The picture is a perfect complement. Good luck in the contest. Alana
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Hello Alana :) Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback! This was my first attempt at a septolet so I'm really happy that you enjoyed it :D Thank you also for the good luck wishes! Kindest regards...
Comment from l.raven
this is so precious....my daughter was the same way...I just follow the little giggles...and there she was...of course I would pretend I didn't see her...LOL...so sweet and so very nicely told...and I love your picture...truly precious...
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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this is so precious....my daughter was the same way...I just follow the little giggles...and there she was...of course I would pretend I didn't see her...LOL...so sweet and so very nicely told...and I love your picture...truly precious...
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Hi Linda :) thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I pretend I can't find her and she leaps out shouting "I'm here, I'm here!" Just can't beat that innocent excitement :) kindest regards...
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LOL...times you will never forget...forever smiles...you are so welcome...xxoo