More than a shirt
A reason to fight - 300 words49 total reviews
Comment from Genya
This may be fiction but this could be something that happened a week ago, even yesterday. So brilliantly written, a great message about a boy who is proud to wear the flag of his country, proud to be the son of a war hero and courageous enough to speak his mind and have his voice heard. I am so glad you shared this. Some lovely meaningful phrases...I thought I was going to die just like my dad. Unlike him I would be killed by foreigners in my own country. Very powerful words. Loved it. Genya
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This may be fiction but this could be something that happened a week ago, even yesterday. So brilliantly written, a great message about a boy who is proud to wear the flag of his country, proud to be the son of a war hero and courageous enough to speak his mind and have his voice heard. I am so glad you shared this. Some lovely meaningful phrases...I thought I was going to die just like my dad. Unlike him I would be killed by foreigners in my own country. Very powerful words. Loved it. Genya
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
Comment from Writingfundimension
You use both imagery and dialogue to superb effect in this well-deserved winning piece. Some very creative similes add to the overall effect of super-nationalism. Congratulations on your win.
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You use both imagery and dialogue to superb effect in this well-deserved winning piece. Some very creative similes add to the overall effect of super-nationalism. Congratulations on your win.
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Congratulations on the contest win - I missed the vote but this may well have been my choice as well.
The theme of filial and national pride emerges strongly in this fairly gritty piece.
Steve
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Congratulations on the contest win - I missed the vote but this may well have been my choice as well.
The theme of filial and national pride emerges strongly in this fairly gritty piece.
Steve
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
Comment from Winslow
Dear Lancelott,
Quite a violent but satisfying story. For me need to stand up for our country even though it may bring us pain.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Lancelott,
Quite a violent but satisfying story. For me need to stand up for our country even though it may bring us pain.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from GeorgieBoy
I liked the line, came back for a second kiss. Very original.
The very evident love of his country and his dad was very heart warming.
You held me captive. The dialogue was believable and current. Loved it. Good job.
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I liked the line, came back for a second kiss. Very original.
The very evident love of his country and his dad was very heart warming.
You held me captive. The dialogue was believable and current. Loved it. Good job.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Karen B.
I see this is fiction, but all too much a possibility for reality these days. Those who demand tolerance are the least tolerant, it seems. Congrats on winning the contest, it is a very well written and timely story.
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I see this is fiction, but all too much a possibility for reality these days. Those who demand tolerance are the least tolerant, it seems. Congrats on winning the contest, it is a very well written and timely story.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Muffins
Well done on your win. The topic is touchy and each side is as passionate as the other. This story is expertly written with emotions displayed in a complex and gripping matter. It's the type of situation that makes a boy a man and gives him a memory he'll remember for life.
It deserves a six, but I'm fresh out.
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Well done on your win. The topic is touchy and each side is as passionate as the other. This story is expertly written with emotions displayed in a complex and gripping matter. It's the type of situation that makes a boy a man and gives him a memory he'll remember for life.
It deserves a six, but I'm fresh out.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Congrats on your win. A really moving poem, Well written about one brave boy standing up for his country.All cultures should be respected and recognized
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Congrats on your win. A really moving poem, Well written about one brave boy standing up for his country.All cultures should be respected and recognized
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Eric1
This is a wonderful and very clever story covering a very touchy subject, I am English, and here too we are strangers in our own country, I am not prejudiced, but things have just swung too far the other way, we as british are now the minority in our own beloved England, Well done for writing this my friend.
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This is a wonderful and very clever story covering a very touchy subject, I am English, and here too we are strangers in our own country, I am not prejudiced, but things have just swung too far the other way, we as british are now the minority in our own beloved England, Well done for writing this my friend.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Lancellot,
This is such a good story to bring forth during these times. We should be allowed to wear our countries colors without harassment. This is America, and if others don't like it, Good Bye!
Great Story! Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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Hi Lancellot,
This is such a good story to bring forth during these times. We should be allowed to wear our countries colors without harassment. This is America, and if others don't like it, Good Bye!
Great Story! Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
