The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 120 "All that glitters"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from NicciFaye
Carylon -
The Golden rule of God's words starts with each individual and in there hearts. This is such a truthful and powerful message that many will understand and many wont.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Carylon -
The Golden rule of God's words starts with each individual and in there hearts. This is such a truthful and powerful message that many will understand and many wont.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2014
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Thank you NicciFaye and I believe you are right. Not all understand. I appreciate you, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Curly Girly
A thought provoking piece. Yes, if only we all did unto others as we would have them do unto us, then the world would be a better place. If I read Revelation, I begin to understand that world peace is never going to happen, well not before Armageddon; and after it, it's going to be a very different world.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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A thought provoking piece. Yes, if only we all did unto others as we would have them do unto us, then the world would be a better place. If I read Revelation, I begin to understand that world peace is never going to happen, well not before Armageddon; and after it, it's going to be a very different world.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Nicole for your thoughtful review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from gypsycaravan
I love the analogy of gold being indestructible that you've used. You are right. The Golden Rule is really a religion of and by itself and all that is really needed to make it through the Pearly gates. Yes, it would be a perfect world if world leaders and cults would practice the rule. Ever wonder why God gave us free will? Ha. Your piece was well-written and formulated. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I love the analogy of gold being indestructible that you've used. You are right. The Golden Rule is really a religion of and by itself and all that is really needed to make it through the Pearly gates. Yes, it would be a perfect world if world leaders and cults would practice the rule. Ever wonder why God gave us free will? Ha. Your piece was well-written and formulated. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I appreciate your fine review. Thank you so much, :-) Carolyn
Comment from 9999pool
A truly great message and story in the Golden Rule and how gold can be purified and retain its shine through the ages of mankind. We must hold dear to this golden rule and never forget that we are humans and not animals.
The meaning of gold had been explained well and befitting the message that the glitter in gold carried to all of us under God's design and grace. Smiles.
Excellent write and well expressed. Bravo! Well done!
Have a fantastic golden and memorable weekend, :)).
Cheerio, hugs and love, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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A truly great message and story in the Golden Rule and how gold can be purified and retain its shine through the ages of mankind. We must hold dear to this golden rule and never forget that we are humans and not animals.
The meaning of gold had been explained well and befitting the message that the glitter in gold carried to all of us under God's design and grace. Smiles.
Excellent write and well expressed. Bravo! Well done!
Have a fantastic golden and memorable weekend, :)).
Cheerio, hugs and love, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Ritchie for the fine review and the awesome sixer. I always am grateful for your encouragement. Hope you and the cats are doing well my friend. Love, Carolyn
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Hi Carolyn,
Thanks for the reply and about our cats. One has given birth to 4 kittens and 3 survived, smiles.
Have a great. I will be on/off from here to prepare my book for publishing, :)).
Cheerio, hugs and love, bro Ritchie.
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Good luck with your book Ritchie, I will pray for an abundant measure of success.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
What makes this a good read is the connection between the properties of gold and how it applies to the human race. I do think the first line could be expanded upon for a better transition into the meat of the essay.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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What makes this a good read is the connection between the properties of gold and how it applies to the human race. I do think the first line could be expanded upon for a better transition into the meat of the essay.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Thanks Shari for your fine comments. I'll revisit the post and see what I can do, Carolyn
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Let me know if you revise.
Comment from misscookie
I love the words to your write
It is so true. Yet man will sell his soul for gold. what happen to the golden rule?
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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I love the words to your write
It is so true. Yet man will sell his soul for gold. what happen to the golden rule?
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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I am glad you enjoyed this one misscookie. :-) Carolyn
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You're very welcome. Have a blessed day
Cookie
Comment from adewpearl
pink gold, however - I would make that a semicolon
A most thoughtful discussion on the Golden Rule
Sadly, many world leaders do not think in these terms, which is why peace remains so elusive
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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pink gold, however - I would make that a semicolon
A most thoughtful discussion on the Golden Rule
Sadly, many world leaders do not think in these terms, which is why peace remains so elusive
Brooke
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I agree, peace is so elusive, we have to do our part, one person at a time. Thank you Brooke for this fine review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from The Death
Hi, Carolyn.
This is an interesting write where you focus on how Golden Rule can be applied in our lives to attain individual as well as world peace.
I do follow the rule in my life, and it does work. However, some people can't be changed and their attitude remains as such.
The lower rating is due to issues related to punctuation, and tightening of a few sentences.
Notes:
# Sometimes(,) the world uses the beautiful 'Golden Rule' of Matthew 7:12 in ways that the Lord did not intend.
# He said, "whatsoever you want men to do to you, do also to them"..
Drop a period. You've used two, which isn't meaningful.
# I find it so very interesting, that we have used a precious metal, to represent that particular passage. And fittingly so.
You don't need to have those commas. I would suggest using only one, before 'and', to make it optimal.
# Gold can be beaten into any shape, it can be ran over by a train, it can go through fire, be melted and poured into a mold , it can withstand ocean depths and salt water, yet will not tarnish,it will always retain its shine.
The above sentence is a run-on, which disturbs the pacing of the write. You should break it into two or more sentences.
Consider:
Gold can be beaten into any shape. It can be ran over by a train, it can go through fire, be melted and poured into a mold. It can also withstand ocean depths and salt water, yet will not tarnish--it will always retain its shine.
# When alloys and other metals are added, we may have white gold, green gold, even pink gold, however, once again, if it goes through fire all those 'additives' are burned away (refined) if you will, and pure gold is left. As pure as when it started.
Same problem as above. You'be unnecessarily dragged the sentence, when it could have been more impacting using distinct sentences and use of dash.
Suggestion:
When alloys and other metals are added, we may have white gold, green gold, even pink gold. However, once again, if it goes through fire, all those 'additives' are burned away (refined) if you will, and pure gold is left--as pure as when it started.
I like the concluding thoughts. Will be happy to upgrade once you edit this.
Love n Light,
Death
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Hi, Carolyn.
This is an interesting write where you focus on how Golden Rule can be applied in our lives to attain individual as well as world peace.
I do follow the rule in my life, and it does work. However, some people can't be changed and their attitude remains as such.
The lower rating is due to issues related to punctuation, and tightening of a few sentences.
Notes:
# Sometimes(,) the world uses the beautiful 'Golden Rule' of Matthew 7:12 in ways that the Lord did not intend.
# He said, "whatsoever you want men to do to you, do also to them"..
Drop a period. You've used two, which isn't meaningful.
# I find it so very interesting, that we have used a precious metal, to represent that particular passage. And fittingly so.
You don't need to have those commas. I would suggest using only one, before 'and', to make it optimal.
# Gold can be beaten into any shape, it can be ran over by a train, it can go through fire, be melted and poured into a mold , it can withstand ocean depths and salt water, yet will not tarnish,it will always retain its shine.
The above sentence is a run-on, which disturbs the pacing of the write. You should break it into two or more sentences.
Consider:
Gold can be beaten into any shape. It can be ran over by a train, it can go through fire, be melted and poured into a mold. It can also withstand ocean depths and salt water, yet will not tarnish--it will always retain its shine.
# When alloys and other metals are added, we may have white gold, green gold, even pink gold, however, once again, if it goes through fire all those 'additives' are burned away (refined) if you will, and pure gold is left. As pure as when it started.
Same problem as above. You'be unnecessarily dragged the sentence, when it could have been more impacting using distinct sentences and use of dash.
Suggestion:
When alloys and other metals are added, we may have white gold, green gold, even pink gold. However, once again, if it goes through fire, all those 'additives' are burned away (refined) if you will, and pure gold is left--as pure as when it started.
I like the concluding thoughts. Will be happy to upgrade once you edit this.
Love n Light,
Death
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thanks Anupam for taking the time to read and review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from lakeport
All that glitters, indeed gold is he most precious metal on earth, that's a wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Hugs!lakeport.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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All that glitters, indeed gold is he most precious metal on earth, that's a wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Hugs!lakeport.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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Thanks lakeport, :-) Carolyn
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your welcome,Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from jmdg1954
How rightfully do as you stated in your notes for flight M17. Shameful, cowardly act and someone will never pay.
You story, essay was well written and well stated Carolyn.
Words befitting today's culture. John
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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How rightfully do as you stated in your notes for flight M17. Shameful, cowardly act and someone will never pay.
You story, essay was well written and well stated Carolyn.
Words befitting today's culture. John
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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Thanks John, I always appreciate your comments. I like what you said, and someone will never pay. How sad and true.
Love, Carolyn