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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom - I feel the same way...watching a plane land on the lake here is always a mystifying and graceful experience. Those water planes just seem to glide all on their own. Loved this post, great images, nicely pulls me in to ponder each line. I enjoyed reading this one - well done.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Dear Tom - I feel the same way...watching a plane land on the lake here is always a mystifying and graceful experience. Those water planes just seem to glide all on their own. Loved this post, great images, nicely pulls me in to ponder each line. I enjoyed reading this one - well done.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Maureen.
Comment from risktaker
I like the photo, message, and imagery. It is amazing that we can fly for fun and entertainment today. We all have amazing creative talents within us, and when we choose to use them, the people of the world benefit from our inventions. I love the image of freedom when soaring in the sky. Thanks
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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I like the photo, message, and imagery. It is amazing that we can fly for fun and entertainment today. We all have amazing creative talents within us, and when we choose to use them, the people of the world benefit from our inventions. I love the image of freedom when soaring in the sky. Thanks
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you risktaker.
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Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Dreams of Flight" is an excellent poem with a unconventional visually pleasing patterned structure for which I guess we can thank GarthL. It has good rhyme and rhyme scheme consistently followed. It has good figurative language and imagery (silver clouded sky). I cannot say that I agree with the premise that our ancestors did not dream or imagine flight. While I guess mechanically assisted flight dreams may have only been around since the Renaissance the Ancient Greeks the guy who flew too close to the sun and the Persians had their flying carpets. I believe that man has dreamed of flight since he first realized it was possible by observing birds.
Preston
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Dreams of Flight" is an excellent poem with a unconventional visually pleasing patterned structure for which I guess we can thank GarthL. It has good rhyme and rhyme scheme consistently followed. It has good figurative language and imagery (silver clouded sky). I cannot say that I agree with the premise that our ancestors did not dream or imagine flight. While I guess mechanically assisted flight dreams may have only been around since the Renaissance the Ancient Greeks the guy who flew too close to the sun and the Persians had their flying carpets. I believe that man has dreamed of flight since he first realized it was possible by observing birds.
Preston
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you Preston. You are literally correct. So i changed it. Hooe you like that better.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Great picture and great amazement to speak of with a plane.
My father build smal RC Planes and that amazes me how they can fly but they do!
Great write. Thank You for sharing and the memory of my Dad.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Great picture and great amazement to speak of with a plane.
My father build smal RC Planes and that amazes me how they can fly but they do!
Great write. Thank You for sharing and the memory of my Dad.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you Angel. I am so pleased this struck a cord with you about your dad.
Comment from rod007
This is a very creative poetic structure which I like. As always you mastered it well with a very poignant poem about the miracle of the flight of these metalic dragons. Is that a fair way to look at them? Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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This is a very creative poetic structure which I like. As always you mastered it well with a very poignant poem about the miracle of the flight of these metalic dragons. Is that a fair way to look at them? Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you rod. Yes, that is.
Comment from Johnny-artist
Treischel- "Dreams of flight" brought about an amazement of such for Johnnykid as well where "Our ancestors never imagined such things." A nicely penned work that flowed with connections of the stanzas throughout~ keeping to an interesting and everyday theme (for some)... capturing a wonder for this reviewer to appreciate the makings for an exceptional piece.
Recommendation- Today we soar In the clouds for joy It brings This approach of mine just might strengthen what you have written down already. Good luck and all the best to a poet who puts out and is treasured by those like myself that work towards ultimate goals such as publication.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Treischel- "Dreams of flight" brought about an amazement of such for Johnnykid as well where "Our ancestors never imagined such things." A nicely penned work that flowed with connections of the stanzas throughout~ keeping to an interesting and everyday theme (for some)... capturing a wonder for this reviewer to appreciate the makings for an exceptional piece.
Recommendation- Today we soar In the clouds for joy It brings This approach of mine just might strengthen what you have written down already. Good luck and all the best to a poet who puts out and is treasured by those like myself that work towards ultimate goals such as publication.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you JohnnyKid. I like the suggestion and took it.
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Comment from Pyrrho
I was about to criticize the poem when i spotted your notes. The description of this form, eleven77, strikes me as impossible re the last requirement unless all last words are the same rhyme.
I give up and just click a faiver.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I was about to criticize the poem when i spotted your notes. The description of this form, eleven77, strikes me as impossible re the last requirement unless all last words are the same rhyme.
I give up and just click a faiver.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you Pyrrho.
Comment from Victoria K
Up until now, I had never heard of an Eleven77, so it's nice to be exposed to something new :)
I am impressed that you manage to convey so much, under the prescribed format of this poem. Despite these restrictions, your words are authentic and unforced.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Up until now, I had never heard of an Eleven77, so it's nice to be exposed to something new :)
I am impressed that you manage to convey so much, under the prescribed format of this poem. Despite these restrictions, your words are authentic and unforced.
Very well done.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you Victoria for that wonderful affirmation.
Comment from adewpearl
I like the way your stanzas rhyme with each other
good grouping of soft S words in your opening
good assonance in recently dream
good alliteration in went where/winds
an interesting form that you do justice to :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I like the way your stanzas rhyme with each other
good grouping of soft S words in your opening
good assonance in recently dream
good alliteration in went where/winds
an interesting form that you do justice to :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you Brooke. It is a n expressive format.
Comment from sunnilicious
The transportation industry is amazing. I am more amazed by trains than planes, but to park and watch planes fly and land is fun for everyone. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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The transportation industry is amazing. I am more amazed by trains than planes, but to park and watch planes fly and land is fun for everyone. Nice poem.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you Alicia. Yes, that is a fun thing to do. I am most pkease you fave such high acclaim.
