Commentary and Philosophy
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Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Trischel,
"Uplifted" is an excellent poem meeting the syllabaic pattern required by the Whitney with the addition of good rhyme and rhyme scheme. The poem is a good statement of your aspiration to advance in life as compared to others'.
Preston
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Hi, Trischel,
"Uplifted" is an excellent poem meeting the syllabaic pattern required by the Whitney with the addition of good rhyme and rhyme scheme. The poem is a good statement of your aspiration to advance in life as compared to others'.
Preston
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Great Whitney.
Picture Is so neat You captured the picture perfect with the words you chose.
Great job on both the writing and the pairing of the picture.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Great Whitney.
Picture Is so neat You captured the picture perfect with the words you chose.
Great job on both the writing and the pairing of the picture.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you Angel Debbie. It was a cool statue.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You were successful in capturing the personalities and the temperament of these characters, but also people in general. Some do look forward, some follow and some are hesitant to see what happens. Great job of writing and understanding people.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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You were successful in capturing the personalities and the temperament of these characters, but also people in general. Some do look forward, some follow and some are hesitant to see what happens. Great job of writing and understanding people.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you Barbara. I am pleased you saw so much within it.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent attention to the Whitney format and beautifully done. You have used rhyme to advantage, too, and this flows well. Your words are inspirational as is the statue in the artwork. Focus on moving upward is a good motto to live by. Excellent ending about each advancing on their own time. That is a good point. judi
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Excellent attention to the Whitney format and beautifully done. You have used rhyme to advantage, too, and this flows well. Your words are inspirational as is the statue in the artwork. Focus on moving upward is a good motto to live by. Excellent ending about each advancing on their own time. That is a good point. judi
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you Judi for a wonderful review
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You're very welcome, and have a great Sunday. judi
Comment from rod007
A very simple poetic format with the limited syllable count but very effective in portraying the forward and onward climb. You did it well as I felt the upward ascent and the hesitancy of the last dog (a Boxer, I believe, they're temperamental dogs at times!) . Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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A very simple poetic format with the limited syllable count but very effective in portraying the forward and onward climb. You did it well as I felt the upward ascent and the hesitancy of the last dog (a Boxer, I believe, they're temperamental dogs at times!) . Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you rod, glad you felt the intended essence.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
What an amazing statue and clever image use.
As always, the chosen style-a Whitney poem - complements the image well.
You have successfully shown the bravado of the child and first dog,
and the hesitany and insecurity of the second dog. Truly there will always be leaders, followers and fence sitters.
Clevef and thoughtful.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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What an amazing statue and clever image use.
As always, the chosen style-a Whitney poem - complements the image well.
You have successfully shown the bravado of the child and first dog,
and the hesitany and insecurity of the second dog. Truly there will always be leaders, followers and fence sitters.
Clevef and thoughtful.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Shirley. Thats a great review. Wonderful high ranking too.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
I enjoyed this Whitney poem, Tom. You do justice to this lovely sculpture with your pen. Again, I always love the combo of your writing and photography. The two go hand-in-hand.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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I enjoyed this Whitney poem, Tom. You do justice to this lovely sculpture with your pen. Again, I always love the combo of your writing and photography. The two go hand-in-hand.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you Marietta.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoy the Whitney form--it gives a little more room than the traditional Japanese verse. Thank you for sharing and capturing your inspiration and adding the photograph to reinforce the vivid, tangible scene. I admired your addition of rhyme to your philosophical reflections. Well done! I wish I had another six, but the site mandates it's too soon. -Joan
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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I enjoy the Whitney form--it gives a little more room than the traditional Japanese verse. Thank you for sharing and capturing your inspiration and adding the photograph to reinforce the vivid, tangible scene. I admired your addition of rhyme to your philosophical reflections. Well done! I wish I had another six, but the site mandates it's too soon. -Joan
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks Joan. I have the same delema.
Comment from adewpearl
I love your photo :-)
good syllable count for the Whitney until you're one syllable over in the final line
each/ad/vanc/es/in/their/own/time
good use of enjambment
I like the inspiration message
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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I love your photo :-)
good syllable count for the Whitney until you're one syllable over in the final line
each/ad/vanc/es/in/their/own/time
good use of enjambment
I like the inspiration message
Brooke
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you Brooke. Oh yes, I'll remove the plural
Comment from Lastamen
One of the great things that I love and appreciate about FanStory is that affords the participants the blessed opportunity to forge relationships and establish comradely with other gifted and talented writers from all over. I love this photo and knowing that it is a real place that the author has visited in Minnesota makes the poem all the more intriguing and engaging. Well conceived, portrayed and presented.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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One of the great things that I love and appreciate about FanStory is that affords the participants the blessed opportunity to forge relationships and establish comradely with other gifted and talented writers from all over. I love this photo and knowing that it is a real place that the author has visited in Minnesota makes the poem all the more intriguing and engaging. Well conceived, portrayed and presented.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you last amen. I am glad you liked it.
