Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. I like the rhyme scheme that you used in your poem. I like how you describe your other half. Great job.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014

Thank you for your lovely feedback :)

reply by rrabinow on 21-Jul-2014

You are welcome.

Comment from Erik McGinley

Excellent

Actually a really nice poem even though an easy, light read.

I like the way the first and last stanzas balance out your perspective and the humourous view you have taken. :)

PS: I also like your new picture, thats a beautiful bright looking room in the background.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014

Cheers Erik :) thanks for your nice comments. I like to provide a light read :)
The photo was taken in a little Thai restaurant in Wakefield. It was a really lovely place, good food and good service. The company wasn't bad either... We went for our wedding anniversary in June!

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the poem. My husband and I had teased each other, I had seven older brothers so I knew how to deal with men. I had a snappy comeback for every way he could tease me. There were a lot of times that we show each other how much we cared. It seems to balance out. Great work.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014

Thank you Ellie for your lovely feedback :) Kindest regards as always, Debra x

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Nice and complimentary to hubby - a wonderful touch. Enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014

Thank you Jax for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both... I need more than good luck now though, there's one runaway winner in the booth (and it ain't me!!) kindest regards as always...:)

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is good. I like its rhyme and rhythm. I liked the part about him living in a care free dream. This seems to be true of a lot of men.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014

Thank you judy for your great feedback. Kindest regards...:)

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

I know the feeling, my friend. You did a good job with this work, it's a perfect entry. I wish you the best of luck, and you're so right.. it's all about give and take.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014

Thank you Dawny for your great comments and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from abbasjoy

Excellent

This is quite humorous, and sounds like some husbands I know.
I think the message is very clear in the last 2 lines, and that is the source of a happy marriage.

"We give and take and live and love
together, happily"
The rhyming and rhythm are well done and the poem flows nicely.
Good job.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014

Thank you so much for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...

Comment from DanielEkine

Excellent

A beautiful expression and description of a love story. A partner in crime when it comes to relationship. They put up with each other, and they cancel each other's faults. A brilliant work. The entirety of this work is presentable and I find no fault during my read.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014

Thank you so much Daniel for your lovely feedback! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from sswartz

Excellent

Very nice. The poem flows well and doesn't derail from the theme you selected. The picture you chose fits wonderfully with the poem. Enjoyable read!

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014

Thank you so much for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

Great rhyme, great meter and a quintessential example of duality and an intrinsic message that man is a quintessential example of chaos theory in action. Excellent and no change needed or suggestion of same offered.

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 Comment Written 17-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014

Thank you so much for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...