Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Lost at Sea"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
7 total reviews
Comment from joysong
Really enjoy the analogy here. It's at once creating a great image of peace and rest. You stayed true to the rules of six,seven and eight; forward and back again. You used a good image here as I consider the last line of your work;
"and so go my burdens." Thanks for a nice read.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Really enjoy the analogy here. It's at once creating a great image of peace and rest. You stayed true to the rules of six,seven and eight; forward and back again. You used a good image here as I consider the last line of your work;
"and so go my burdens." Thanks for a nice read.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much joysong, for your kind words and generous rating! I'm really glad you enjoyed reading!!
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. I love sitting on the warm sand and watching the waves come to shore. It is a beautiful song. I love smelling the salty breeze. I love watching the sun kiss the water. It smooth's the soul. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I love sitting on the warm sand and watching the waves come to shore. It is a beautiful song. I love smelling the salty breeze. I love watching the sun kiss the water. It smooth's the soul. Great work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much nelliesellie, for your kind words and generous rating!!
Comment from Cin
Very nicely put - The ocean, sun, sand and breeze has a rhythmic way of enveloping us - absorbing woes - leaving peace - to just 'be' . Lovely.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Very nicely put - The ocean, sun, sand and breeze has a rhythmic way of enveloping us - absorbing woes - leaving peace - to just 'be' . Lovely.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thank you Cin, for your kind and encouraging review!!
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your line and syllable count spot on
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the mesmerizing of the ocean allow one to free themselves of daily burdens
good visual
good enjambment in sentences to allow flow
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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good luck in the contest
your line and syllable count spot on
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the mesmerizing of the ocean allow one to free themselves of daily burdens
good visual
good enjambment in sentences to allow flow
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you Smoothiecool, for your kind and encouraging review!
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most welcome..SC
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
awesome poem, fits the context and contest The artwork is exquisite and simply awesome.
I, upon the warm sand
salty breeze caressing me
Mesmerized by sparkling ripples
as the sun kisses the waters
with the rhythmic song of waves
and so go my burdens[ loved it]
K
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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awesome poem, fits the context and contest The artwork is exquisite and simply awesome.
I, upon the warm sand
salty breeze caressing me
Mesmerized by sparkling ripples
as the sun kisses the waters
with the rhythmic song of waves
and so go my burdens[ loved it]
K
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you K, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from James Dooney
You have given us such lovely imagery here with this. I really like what you have done here. Keep up the good work indeed.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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You have given us such lovely imagery here with this. I really like what you have done here. Keep up the good work indeed.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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thank you so much James, for your kind and encouraging review!
Comment from tfawcus
This brings out the mesmerising and cleansing effect of a day by the sea. It seems to wash away all one's worries. Your poem is perfectly balanced and beautifully presented. The form is an interesting one and well suited to the content.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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This brings out the mesmerising and cleansing effect of a day by the sea. It seems to wash away all one's worries. Your poem is perfectly balanced and beautifully presented. The form is an interesting one and well suited to the content.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2014
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Thank you tfawcus, for this kind and encouraging review!