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Comment from adewpearl
a compelling illustration
good assonance in hope floats on the throes
effective use of questions to draw the reader in
strong verb choices add to the poem's intensity
a thoughtful closing with strong spiritual undertones
Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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a compelling illustration
good assonance in hope floats on the throes
effective use of questions to draw the reader in
strong verb choices add to the poem's intensity
a thoughtful closing with strong spiritual undertones
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Thank you Brooke for an outstanding review.
Comment from 9999pool
Hanging on by just the fingernails is a very powerful description of the creeping and incessant pain which one suffers daily. There is no reprieve or escape. When the pain comes in an excruciating and terrible way, even faith will stand aside in shame for nothing will take that pain away. There is only one thing to do - wait for the whole dramatic suffering of physical pain, to subside and to ask faith why she was hiding when the pain starts.
At times like this, we have to learn how to accept the pain and to bear with it. Prayers and faith can ease somewhat our apprehension, but it cannot take away the pain.
A great dramatic writing about suffering from physical pain of the extreme type.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Hanging on by just the fingernails is a very powerful description of the creeping and incessant pain which one suffers daily. There is no reprieve or escape. When the pain comes in an excruciating and terrible way, even faith will stand aside in shame for nothing will take that pain away. There is only one thing to do - wait for the whole dramatic suffering of physical pain, to subside and to ask faith why she was hiding when the pain starts.
At times like this, we have to learn how to accept the pain and to bear with it. Prayers and faith can ease somewhat our apprehension, but it cannot take away the pain.
A great dramatic writing about suffering from physical pain of the extreme type.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Thank you Ritchie for an excellent review and commentary.
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I am sending my prayers daily to Kathy and please tell her that life is always a painful process for anyone. We shall, soon get use to them eventually, but we must never be defeated. There is still a life ahead to pursue once the pain subsides.
It is nt easy but we willl manage whatever life throws at us, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs and love to the you both, Ritchie.
Comment from zanya
Yes well portrayed the dilemma we all face , on one form or another throughout our earthly existence whether to hang on in there or simply give up -
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Yes well portrayed the dilemma we all face , on one form or another throughout our earthly existence whether to hang on in there or simply give up -
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you Zanya.
Comment from Dawny53
Your poem was very well written and it carried with it a meaningful message for me. I have been reading so many well written poems this afternoon, yours one of them. Thank you for writing it, because it gave me hope.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Your poem was very well written and it carried with it a meaningful message for me. I have been reading so many well written poems this afternoon, yours one of them. Thank you for writing it, because it gave me hope.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you Dawny. I am very pleased that it did.
Comment from Goodauthor
This is so true. Without hope there is no life and vise verse. It does not take religion to provide that hope, for this faith in what is--is born within the heart of every man.
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This is so true. Without hope there is no life and vise verse. It does not take religion to provide that hope, for this faith in what is--is born within the heart of every man.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you Goodauthor. Yes, so true. I really am please you ranked it so highly.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"To Hang On" is excellent free verse with good visually interesting structure, good figurative language and imagery (another day to suffer of savor). It has good flow.
Preston
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"To Hang On" is excellent free verse with good visually interesting structure, good figurative language and imagery (another day to suffer of savor). It has good flow.
Preston
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thank you Preston
Comment from Angel Debbie
You speak many words of truth in this write, it is a powerful write with a strong message. When life gets you hanging by a thread you need to look for strength elsewhere and what better place than the Lord for the strength to pull you through!
Nice write Sir Treischel! Nice write.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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You speak many words of truth in this write, it is a powerful write with a strong message. When life gets you hanging by a thread you need to look for strength elsewhere and what better place than the Lord for the strength to pull you through!
Nice write Sir Treischel! Nice write.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for a great review. I love the title.
Comment from rod007
You depict the desperation well. The clinging to life with faith and God surmounting it all so you can see the beauty of His Pasture. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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You depict the desperation well. The clinging to life with faith and God surmounting it all so you can see the beauty of His Pasture. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you rod. Yes, that is the gist of it.
Comment from Eric1
Wonderful free verse for this competition, wonderful imagery, a person hanging on for dear life on the edge of a cliff, hanging on to a slither of faith, this is beautifully written with a great flow. Good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Wonderful free verse for this competition, wonderful imagery, a person hanging on for dear life on the edge of a cliff, hanging on to a slither of faith, this is beautifully written with a great flow. Good luck.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you Eric.
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You are welcome
Comment from lakeport
To hang on,indeed there comes a time in life where one tries to hang on, I can relate to that, that's a heartfelt expressed poem. Good luck at the contest, God bless you. Lakeport.
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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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To hang on,indeed there comes a time in life where one tries to hang on, I can relate to that, that's a heartfelt expressed poem. Good luck at the contest, God bless you. Lakeport.
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you Lakeport.
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your welcome.Lakeport.
