Open Eyes
Something cannot trip you unless your not looking.26 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Hah! I happen to enjoy the Lune form...and this one was reaching out for one more review to reach ATB!
Better late than never, right!?
Inner vision must come first!
Nice...
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Hah! I happen to enjoy the Lune form...and this one was reaching out for one more review to reach ATB!
Better late than never, right!?
Inner vision must come first!
Nice...
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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How nice you are for utilizing YOUR time to include this part of me! Seriously, much appreciated! This was a fun poem to write without a doubt! I must have been in real, Thinker-Mode" for this one! LOL! Thank you, again!
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My pleasure! It's great to get to know another member!
Comment from Eric1
Can you really see with your eyes closed? of course you can! that is how wonderful stories and poems are created, it's when you open those eyes to the real world, that your problems begin, as you have suggested in your wonderful Lune, a valuable lesson on how to get your message across in twelve wonderful words, good luck my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Can you really see with your eyes closed? of course you can! that is how wonderful stories and poems are created, it's when you open those eyes to the real world, that your problems begin, as you have suggested in your wonderful Lune, a valuable lesson on how to get your message across in twelve wonderful words, good luck my friend.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you can see this as I do! Lol!
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I did Sue, and you are most welcome.
Comment from michaelcahill
I love this. You have my brain thinking. Is that what it is designed for. A strange feeling... This is a great Lune. Anytime you can get someone pondering with this few words, you are doing well. Good one. mikey
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I love this. You have my brain thinking. Is that what it is designed for. A strange feeling... This is a great Lune. Anytime you can get someone pondering with this few words, you are doing well. Good one. mikey
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks and I'm glad you like it. My mind is always thinking odd ball things like this. Glad I have a chance to share with similar minds. Lol!
Comment from Muffins
Funny, put not to the guy in the photo!
Today, with Ipods and texting ,people are doing more than tripping and breaking their nose. People have stepped in front of trains, down manholes, in front of on coming traffic, it's crazy. I see these people and think to myself, "do they think their superhuman and noting will happen to them just because their texting or head bobbing to music? Your poem, although funny, tells the honest raw truth. People, "See great when eyes close.
Open eyes.
Trip and break your nose
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Funny, put not to the guy in the photo!
Today, with Ipods and texting ,people are doing more than tripping and breaking their nose. People have stepped in front of trains, down manholes, in front of on coming traffic, it's crazy. I see these people and think to myself, "do they think their superhuman and noting will happen to them just because their texting or head bobbing to music? Your poem, although funny, tells the honest raw truth. People, "See great when eyes close.
Open eyes.
Trip and break your nose
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from Rubylou
LOL I enjoyed this 5-3-5 Lune. I have to say I can relate to your words. Sometimes things seem so clear in our mind's eye and plans but when it comes to being lived out ...
The picture adds to your work. Nice job. Rubylou
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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LOL I enjoyed this 5-3-5 Lune. I have to say I can relate to your words. Sometimes things seem so clear in our mind's eye and plans but when it comes to being lived out ...
The picture adds to your work. Nice job. Rubylou
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed this!
Comment from kiwisteveh
I love the use of irony as a humorous device and your little lune poem has it in spades.
The rhyme adds extra interest as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I love the use of irony as a humorous device and your little lune poem has it in spades.
The rhyme adds extra interest as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks! Glad you like it.
Comment from Zue65
The photo says it all, it complemented well your point and amplified the message intended for the readers. I enjoyed this Lune poem about not seeing what's ahead. Well done. God bless.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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The photo says it all, it complemented well your point and amplified the message intended for the readers. I enjoyed this Lune poem about not seeing what's ahead. Well done. God bless.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you. Glad you like it.
Comment from ArtGal
I know this sounds crazy, even after reading author notes, but the first thing I thought about was that when we're sleeping, even though our eyes are opened in our dreams, we can't get hurt then. Only when awake do accidents happen. But I sure do understand your notes, and they make perfect sense! Our thoughts go haywire at times because we aren't thinking clearly. That's when we can get hurt. You make more sense than I do, lol. I really enjoyed reading this. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I know this sounds crazy, even after reading author notes, but the first thing I thought about was that when we're sleeping, even though our eyes are opened in our dreams, we can't get hurt then. Only when awake do accidents happen. But I sure do understand your notes, and they make perfect sense! Our thoughts go haywire at times because we aren't thinking clearly. That's when we can get hurt. You make more sense than I do, lol. I really enjoyed reading this. . .Sharon
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you like this. Enjoy your night.
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You're so very welcome.
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Had to hurt. Looks like he has a rhinoplasmy. it hurts when they hit you with as hammer! I had a septoplamy once. Meets the parameters of a Lune. I'm crazy as a Loon. nice poem, wackydo, do loco
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Had to hurt. Looks like he has a rhinoplasmy. it hurts when they hit you with as hammer! I had a septoplamy once. Meets the parameters of a Lune. I'm crazy as a Loon. nice poem, wackydo, do loco
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you. Happy you like it. Enjoy your night.
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Thanks ... shalom: Hebrew word for peace
Comment from c_lucas
It is hard trying to avoid falling by catching your self with your nose. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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It is hard trying to avoid falling by catching your self with your nose. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thanks. Glad you like this!
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You're welcome, Sue. Charlie
