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His Father's Eyes

Dedicated to a local fallen hero.

54 total reviews 
Comment from bob cullen
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This is a superb write.

It makes one proud of the efforts of our military. It highlights the courage and skill of these young people who place their lives on the line so that we might enjoy our freedom.

As Australians we stand proudly with your country and we join in the salute to these heroes. And to the familes of the fallen soldiers.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014

Comment from seaglass
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This is a beautiful tribute to an American hero. We've lost so many. The poem is so nicely written with great use of wording and rhyme.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    Thank you, seaglass. Will was a great kid, and we all miss him.
Comment from Delahay
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We lose far too many of our fine young soldiers overseas. They bravely face danger and loneliness every day to be killed far too easily and randomly by an unseen enemy. Afterwards another family and community is devastated by the loss of one so young.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2014
    Will was a good kid, and he frequently visited our home and stayed the night over at our home. My son and Will were close friends, played on the high school baseball and basketball teams together. He wanted to work for NASA one day. Sadly, his dream will never be fulfilled.

    Thank you for honoring Wills memory with a fine review, Ward. I hate war, and everything about it. But as a former US Marine, I understand what it means to not be afraid to die for a cause you believe in. Will understood that. I know he did.
Comment from bhogg
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Very well written and such a timely post around the fourth. I hope you get through to a bunch of people, because so often, people don't realize the sacrifice our vets make. I'm a vet, brother's a vet, Several Uncles and my dad. The troops today are fabulous. Bill

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    I am an ex-marine myself, bhogg, so I know all too well the sacrifices made, my brother. I was a sniper, trained at Fort Bragg, in Georgia.

    This boy I wrote about, Will, was a close friend of my son's and a wonderful, passionate young man. It was heartbreaking to watch his father that sad day at Will's funeral. I wrote it pretty much as I experienced it.

    Thanks, bhogg, and I salute you for your service to our great nation.

    Dean the Marine


    I'm the extremely ugly Marine on the right. This photo was taken on my graduation day, from P.I. Training Depot, in 1980.

    Me & Cpl Radar O'Riley on graduation day. photo 230391_1016688750865_7683_n.jpg




Comment from Eric1
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This is a wonderful tale of a waste of a young hero's life, with the fourth of July two days away it is even more poignant, I am not going to say much about the structure of your beautiful work, it is irrelevant, but the content of your poem, It brought a tear to my eye, and I am a Brit!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    Well, ahoy across the Big Pond, my British friend. And just what, pray tell, would you change had you written it? Please, enlighten me, I can take it. Besides, have you noticed how poorly I've done in contests lately, Eric? Do you vote on them? I will take all of the (good!) helpful suggestions I can get, my friend.

    Thanks for the review.
reply by Eric1 on 02-Jul-2014
    Well her's a shock for you my American friend, and listen carefully, NOT ONE SOLITARY WORD, would I change, it is nigh on perfect and if I were you, I would promote it to the Hilt! you had my last six, but if there had been a ten it would have been yours, take no notice of contests, they are not a true measure of a poets work, just write what's in your heart, as you have here, your fame will follow!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    Thank you, Eric, and that is quite a shock. This was written from my heart, from a very deep place within my heart, to honor a fine young man and his selfless sacrifice to his sworn duty. We'll just see how it does come voting time.

    Much obliged, Eric.
reply by Eric1 on 02-Jul-2014
    You are most welcome my friend, have faith in your words.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    I have great faith in my words. it's those around me who claim to support me that I have very little faith in.

    I do appreciate your heartfelt and genuine reply. I know that young Will would too.
reply by Eric1 on 02-Jul-2014
    You have my full support and attention with writing like this, God bless.
Comment from Max Edon
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This brought tears to my eyes! This was so beautifully written. he must have been an exceptional young man to have inspired this beautiful tribute.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    Thank you, Max, and he was a fine, upstanding young man. Such a waste, truly. But, Will did firmly believe in the cause for which he was fighting. And he paid the ultimate price for those beliefs.

    Thanks for the wonderful review and most generous rating. I know Will would have been very proud.
reply by Max Edon on 02-Jul-2014
    You are welcome
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Not one day should pass without each and every American, kept free and safe by the sacrifices of these brave young men, to bow their heads and pray for the lost and serving, and their families. Thanks for your poem of remembrance and the reminder of the costs of our freedom. All the BEST!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    Thanks very much for your kind review, Ric. Will was a great kid, and we all miss him terribly.

    I truly appreciate your review and generous rating.
Comment from A Matter Of Words
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Nothing but a 6 will do. You have written a powerful and beautiful poem. My throat was tight my the end of it. This is truly a winner...Stephanie

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    Thank you very much for honoring young Will's memory with your lovely review and generous rating of six stars, Stephanie. He was really a great kid who firmly believed in his cause. We all miss him terribly.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
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HEllo there~!
I'm truly saddened to hear the devastating news of young Mr. Will. My prayers go out to him and his family. Thanks for sharing this amazing piece.
Good Luck!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    Thank you very much for honoring young Will's memory with your heartfelt review and stellar rating, Kausar_Javeria. I appreciate that very much, and I know Will would too.
Comment from Cajungirl
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My words cannot adequately express the heartfelt emotions stirred by this most beautiful and touching tribute. Simply to say Braovo is not enough. Superb contest entry. Best of luck. Mostly, thank you for sharing your thoughts on this most precious hero.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
    Thank you for acknowledging Will and honoring his memory with your genuinely heartfelt review, Cajungirl. He was such a great kid, and had so much promise. Any life lost in war is heartbreaking, but I knew the boy very well. We all dearly miss him.

    Thanks so much again.
reply by Cajungirl on 02-Jul-2014
    You are very welcome.