Bedtime stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The photo"Many bedtime stories for children.
21 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
It's a good story Ine one that I'm not sure I would want to read to a child just before bed, the picture might induce nightmares for the child but a good learning story.
teresa
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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It's a good story Ine one that I'm not sure I would want to read to a child just before bed, the picture might induce nightmares for the child but a good learning story.
teresa
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine. Some might maybe.
Comment from Treischel
A delightful little story about birth and sonograms. The curiosity of children about babies, and the wonders of modern science are blended very well here. An enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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A delightful little story about birth and sonograms. The curiosity of children about babies, and the wonders of modern science are blended very well here. An enjoyable read.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Cute! I chuckled at Doug's reaction!
A few wee things to look at:
No problem for the baby". - the period should be before the quotation like so: No problem for the baby." . I see you've done this in a few dialogue sentences, so maybe you can go through and take a look. :)
"Oh, what is it going to be then, Mum"? - Mum?" - question mark should be before the quote.
"That I don't know; aunt Ena only wants to know after it is born(). ()More exciting that way". - you don't need the quotes if the dialogue isn't finished.
Otherwise, well done, Ine. I enjoyed reading this.
Av
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Cute! I chuckled at Doug's reaction!
A few wee things to look at:
No problem for the baby". - the period should be before the quotation like so: No problem for the baby." . I see you've done this in a few dialogue sentences, so maybe you can go through and take a look. :)
"Oh, what is it going to be then, Mum"? - Mum?" - question mark should be before the quote.
"That I don't know; aunt Ena only wants to know after it is born(). ()More exciting that way". - you don't need the quotes if the dialogue isn't finished.
Otherwise, well done, Ine. I enjoyed reading this.
Av
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine. Thanks for the tips, I'll check.
Comment from amada
Very nice story and well related for children's overview. It's always exciting to see a growing in mother's stomach. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Very nice story and well related for children's overview. It's always exciting to see a growing in mother's stomach. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine
Comment from Sonaleeka
Art work is lovely..You started the story very nicely..Hope to get more chapters soon.Great work.I am glad i read it.
God bless!Have a nice day...
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Art work is lovely..You started the story very nicely..Hope to get more chapters soon.Great work.I am glad i read it.
God bless!Have a nice day...
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine
Comment from Bryana
Interesting dialogue about a baby to be
born. Difficult to explain to a child
about babies and birth, but I thin Mum
had the right thing to say.
You writing placed a smile on my face.
Have a nice week.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Interesting dialogue about a baby to be
born. Difficult to explain to a child
about babies and birth, but I thin Mum
had the right thing to say.
You writing placed a smile on my face.
Have a nice week.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine
Comment from adewpearl
Good dialogue - this sounds realistically like a parent/small child conversation would sound with the child inquisitive and the patient mother trying to answer questions in a way the child will understand - also, good humor in the child's response to the "ugliness" Of the baby at this stage of development :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Good dialogue - this sounds realistically like a parent/small child conversation would sound with the child inquisitive and the patient mother trying to answer questions in a way the child will understand - also, good humor in the child's response to the "ugliness" Of the baby at this stage of development :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine
Comment from misscookie
I love this one very much.
Boy has time change, we were told about the birth bring the babies to our home. LOL
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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I love this one very much.
Boy has time change, we were told about the birth bring the babies to our home. LOL
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine. Thanks for the gorgeous six, my dear friend.
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You're very welcome. Have a safe and nice 4th.
until next time.
Cookie
Comment from mkflood
very cool and interesting chapter. i wanted to personally thank u for selecting my "life is sacred". it works well and i am honored to have my work included with urs. great job and look forward to rest of the chapters. in the future if ur looking for something and cant find it..holler at me and just give me the basics and ill see what i can whip for ya..oh yeah i wont take long..wink. thanks again...mkflood
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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very cool and interesting chapter. i wanted to personally thank u for selecting my "life is sacred". it works well and i am honored to have my work included with urs. great job and look forward to rest of the chapters. in the future if ur looking for something and cant find it..holler at me and just give me the basics and ill see what i can whip for ya..oh yeah i wont take long..wink. thanks again...mkflood
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine
Comment from krys123
Ine, A very humorous and quite interesting story of two people that are taken by the echography and the way it looks the baby looks very ugly to them.
I found your story syntax to be spot on and very well done and also I found your story to be very interesting and most pleasing to read as it seemed to flow really easily throughout the story.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Ine, A very humorous and quite interesting story of two people that are taken by the echography and the way it looks the baby looks very ugly to them.
I found your story syntax to be spot on and very well done and also I found your story to be very interesting and most pleasing to read as it seemed to flow really easily throughout the story.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read may all your endeavors be good ones.
Alex
Comment Written 29-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine