A Time To Die
An Act of kindness by an enemy contest entry26 total reviews
Comment from Muffins
I'm always left breathless and amazed with your stories and your awesome talent.
A thrilling roller coaster ride of conflicting emotions: the disgusting unfairness the rich have in the justice system ,and battle scarred hero trying to figure out which is the right thing to do. The stakes for the Detective is high and the ending still has him torn. A realistic finish.
There's only one hiccup in this fantastic piece. In the beginning you introduce the main character as Detective Marcus. However, just before he kicks the door down his name changed to Detective Simmons. It only happened once, so I'm sure it's a slip.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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I'm always left breathless and amazed with your stories and your awesome talent.
A thrilling roller coaster ride of conflicting emotions: the disgusting unfairness the rich have in the justice system ,and battle scarred hero trying to figure out which is the right thing to do. The stakes for the Detective is high and the ending still has him torn. A realistic finish.
There's only one hiccup in this fantastic piece. In the beginning you introduce the main character as Detective Marcus. However, just before he kicks the door down his name changed to Detective Simmons. It only happened once, so I'm sure it's a slip.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much. I forgot the last name in that line. It's Marcus Simmons
Comment from kiwisteveh
Yes, it's a fairly dark tale and the act of kindness is actually a killing, so not your usual definition.... but that may give you an edge in the contest.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Yes, it's a fairly dark tale and the act of kindness is actually a killing, so not your usual definition.... but that may give you an edge in the contest.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 02-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is the kind of story that stirs emotions. One that creates anger bordering rage for your readers, and although there is no chance of true justice, there is hope to end the spree. Thanks for another of your outstanding stories. :-)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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This is the kind of story that stirs emotions. One that creates anger bordering rage for your readers, and although there is no chance of true justice, there is hope to end the spree. Thanks for another of your outstanding stories. :-)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from A Matter Of Words
Given all that is happening in the news today, I get a sad sense of satisfaction from this. Nicely written, lancellot. I like the twist to the act of kindness.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Given all that is happening in the news today, I get a sad sense of satisfaction from this. Nicely written, lancellot. I like the twist to the act of kindness.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much
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You're welcome
Comment from c_lucas
A sick or injured animal would be shown the kindness of a bullet. A human would not. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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A sick or injured animal would be shown the kindness of a bullet. A human would not. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Judy Couch
Wow! This is well written and is a rather creative take off on an act of kindness. Most perverts don't really want to die though. They just want to keep doing what they're doing.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Wow! This is well written and is a rather creative take off on an act of kindness. Most perverts don't really want to die though. They just want to keep doing what they're doing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from pafaust
This was a great story. The descriptive writing was very tense and vivid. The criminal did deserve to spend the rest of his life in prison, but the detective's "act of kindness" probably guarantee the surest justice. Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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This was a great story. The descriptive writing was very tense and vivid. The criminal did deserve to spend the rest of his life in prison, but the detective's "act of kindness" probably guarantee the surest justice. Good luck!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I think you should have posted this in horror. I did like the moral dilemma Marcus had to go through. He did what the perp wanted and maybe got some satisfaction out of it, but in reality we all want the bad guys to go before his peers and face justice. I liked this.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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I think you should have posted this in horror. I did like the moral dilemma Marcus had to go through. He did what the perp wanted and maybe got some satisfaction out of it, but in reality we all want the bad guys to go before his peers and face justice. I liked this.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Mystery and Crime Fiction meeting the desired parameters and beautifully depicting its theme/ Simple as well as impressive wording/ Smooth and captivating flow, particularly towards the end, with lively imagery.
The core of the theme lies in these lines:
"Enough talk...............................Dear Lord.."
Excellent and Good Luck!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Hello Friend,
Nice piece of Mystery and Crime Fiction meeting the desired parameters and beautifully depicting its theme/ Simple as well as impressive wording/ Smooth and captivating flow, particularly towards the end, with lively imagery.
The core of the theme lies in these lines:
"Enough talk...............................Dear Lord.."
Excellent and Good Luck!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from MIKECON
What a storyline full of intrigue and surspence.Well written and a joy to read.Most of us I think would have pulled the trigger.Well done and the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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What a storyline full of intrigue and surspence.Well written and a joy to read.Most of us I think would have pulled the trigger.Well done and the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 30-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014
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Thank you very much.