Short Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "haiku (red giant's sunset)"A Collection Of Short Form Poetry
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Comment from Liandra
The information you have provided is amazing. We take so much for granted on this small planet, it's not until we expand our minds, that we see the truth of all that is in existence. I enjoy researching in the NASA & EarthSky web sites, it opens a complete new way of believing.
The artwork is stunning!
:) Liandra
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The information you have provided is amazing. We take so much for granted on this small planet, it's not until we expand our minds, that we see the truth of all that is in existence. I enjoy researching in the NASA & EarthSky web sites, it opens a complete new way of believing.
The artwork is stunning!
:) Liandra
Comment Written 23-Jun-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words and vivid image allows the reader to see as the red sun will deplete all the water from the earth leaving it barren
cheers..Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words and vivid image allows the reader to see as the red sun will deplete all the water from the earth leaving it barren
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 22-Jun-2014
Comment from royowen
I like this clever, informative sunset haiku contest entry. This is a limiting poetic form and one needs to bring something different to the table, and you've certainly done that Mikey with this one, plus the artwork hasn't done your chances any harm either! Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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I like this clever, informative sunset haiku contest entry. This is a limiting poetic form and one needs to bring something different to the table, and you've certainly done that Mikey with this one, plus the artwork hasn't done your chances any harm either! Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Glad you liked that picture. I thought it was pretty impressive too. Appreciate the encouraging words. I'm doing pretty well. So, we'll see!! mikey
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Creative response to this prompt, Mikey. Glad I won't be around in about 6 billion years or so. Well penned. I hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Creative response to this prompt, Mikey. Glad I won't be around in about 6 billion years or so. Well penned. I hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Yeah, we'll be grey winged angels by then. Hahaha. I'm doing pretty good!! Let's here it for doom!!
Comment from Val Crisson
Unique take on the sunset haiku contest. I found the verb "sizzling" very strong and descriptive in this particular message. Also, great satori line.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Unique take on the sunset haiku contest. I found the verb "sizzling" very strong and descriptive in this particular message. Also, great satori line.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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A great review. So pleased you liked this. Thank you kindly. mikey
Comment from tbacha58
Oh Wow Mike, what an amazing verse, with the picture of course, but I loved the most is how you explained everything in writing . I was so interested to read and re read your fabulous description of the future sun and earth. Bravo Mike, you are as I said before climbing your highest mountain peak in the variation of your poems, stories, and verses. Well done , good for you. You deserve it, self made man. Love Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Oh Wow Mike, what an amazing verse, with the picture of course, but I loved the most is how you explained everything in writing . I was so interested to read and re read your fabulous description of the future sun and earth. Bravo Mike, you are as I said before climbing your highest mountain peak in the variation of your poems, stories, and verses. Well done , good for you. You deserve it, self made man. Love Terry xoxo
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Hi mum. I'm so glad you liked it. I'm in a contest with the biggies. Hahaha. I wanted to do something besides a sunset by the seashore!! So glad you liked this. Something different. mikey
Comment from krys123
Mikey, pretty intense and long authors notes which was very interesting and enjoyable read. Your haiku's first two lines is very descriptive and expressive why your third line or satori summed up your haiku very well. Thank you for sharing am posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones. Good luck in this haiku prompts also.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Mikey, pretty intense and long authors notes which was very interesting and enjoyable read. Your haiku's first two lines is very descriptive and expressive why your third line or satori summed up your haiku very well. Thank you for sharing am posting this for everyone and may all your endeavors be good ones. Good luck in this haiku prompts also.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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So pleased that you liked this one. Trying to come up with something a little different. Some heavy hitters in this one!! So well see. Blessings, mikey
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You are so welcome Mikey I considered that to be an excellent haiku
Comment from SLHarper
This is a great little haiku, as far as I can tell. You juxtapose two natural phenomena (earth / red giant), and you adhere well to the rules as stipulated in the contest prompt, including not attributing human or animal qualities to nature. Best of all, to me, your take on the prompt is original and simple, yet profound. Well done, Mikey! (I was thinking of entering this contest, but then I saw your entry and that Namasta had reserved a spot, so I figured I'd let you all duke it out.) ;)
Good luck in the contest!
Stephie
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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This is a great little haiku, as far as I can tell. You juxtapose two natural phenomena (earth / red giant), and you adhere well to the rules as stipulated in the contest prompt, including not attributing human or animal qualities to nature. Best of all, to me, your take on the prompt is original and simple, yet profound. Well done, Mikey! (I was thinking of entering this contest, but then I saw your entry and that Namasta had reserved a spot, so I figured I'd let you all duke it out.) ;)
Good luck in the contest!
Stephie
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I like it when the ladies gang up on me!!! I'm so pleased you liked this. I wanted to come up with something other than a nice sunset by the shore type of thing. I guess I did that... I took care of the personification by wiping out all life... Done! Thank you so much. All the biggies are in this one, scary. mikey
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Lol! I knew you were wiping out all nature, just to be on the safe side! Quintessential Mikey!
Comment from Alan K Pease
I see that you have brought the universe to our doorstep again. Hope that man has the spirit to hope that Earth will be a liveable place long before the sun turns into a white dwarf
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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I see that you have brought the universe to our doorstep again. Hope that man has the spirit to hope that Earth will be a liveable place long before the sun turns into a white dwarf
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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We have a few billion years to come up with something!! Thank you for the galaxy of stars, most appreciated!! mikey
Comment from ragamuffin
Great piece, strong, even before I read the author's notes. Much more potent afterward. Lots of rules, looks like you packed a punch within the parameters. Love the presentation. Rather ominous... as losing our sun would be, especially with no specifics set in stone. Present tense helps support the intensity of the topic of the piece.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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Great piece, strong, even before I read the author's notes. Much more potent afterward. Lots of rules, looks like you packed a punch within the parameters. Love the presentation. Rather ominous... as losing our sun would be, especially with no specifics set in stone. Present tense helps support the intensity of the topic of the piece.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2014
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So very pleased you liked this one. I was really looking for something outside the box. I'm delighted you think I was successful. This was fun to write. Astronomy was one of the few subjects that interested me in school! mikey