Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your word count spot on

good alliteration in
choreographed, clouds
sounds, seasons
unfettered, utterings
candid, comments
look, listen, learn

great message

cheers..Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014

Thank you for your detailed, encouraging review.

reply by Smoothiecool on 09-Jun-2014

welcome..SC

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hi persevere, thank you for entering the contest. I enjoyed your Katie21 poem.
Excellent use of alliteration throughout, adherence to word count and a great message delivered very well! Good luck in the voting booth, kindest regards, Debra :)

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thank you, Debra, for a great review and your good wishes.

Comment from linsbm

Excellent

Short poem in the brevity of words and language yet
delivers good visualization and interesting thoughts worth reading. Very good use of alliterations in 'c', 's', 'u', & 'l'. Perfect in syllable count. Excellent. Thanks for sharing.} Lin

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014

Thank you, Lin, for your detailed, positive revue.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The early school years are the most important ones. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014

Learning in those early years is certainly important but the learning never stops for those who are receptive. Thank you so much for your positive revue.

reply by c_lucas on 07-Jun-2014

You're welcome, P. Charlie