TV Parents
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Comment from michaelcahill
As funny as this is, I think you are making a valid point that is not all that exaggerated. A great way to put the message in peoples minds. It sticks like this with a great witty image that will be remembered much easier than a dry speech. mikey
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As funny as this is, I think you are making a valid point that is not all that exaggerated. A great way to put the message in peoples minds. It sticks like this with a great witty image that will be remembered much easier than a dry speech. mikey
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from Imogen JH
Well written, No SPAG's.
You have chosen a topical subject and moulded it into something thought provoking. I like that. Your picture gives your story great support.
Best of luck in the competition.
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Well written, No SPAG's.
You have chosen a topical subject and moulded it into something thought provoking. I like that. Your picture gives your story great support.
Best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Oh, no! They changed Sesame Street?!
Let's take this as social comment - we all know that everything on TV is good for us - just like everything on the internet is reliable and true!
Good luck.
Steve
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Oh, no! They changed Sesame Street?!
Let's take this as social comment - we all know that everything on TV is good for us - just like everything on the internet is reliable and true!
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from --Turtle.
An interesting satire, set in conversation, exaggerating an idea to highlight a point, while participating in a contest. Effective in communicating one side of a debate concerning the behavior of kids and the boob-tube.
Would suggest for tempo of the following sentence a stronger pause:
"Relax, Susan, how does little ....
becoming
"Relax, Susan. How does little ....
Because really, commas that set off a name don't really have a certain pause. But in conversation... anytime someone says relax... they tend to pause for a bit to emphasize the relaxing.
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An interesting satire, set in conversation, exaggerating an idea to highlight a point, while participating in a contest. Effective in communicating one side of a debate concerning the behavior of kids and the boob-tube.
Would suggest for tempo of the following sentence a stronger pause:
"Relax, Susan, how does little ....
becoming
"Relax, Susan. How does little ....
Because really, commas that set off a name don't really have a certain pause. But in conversation... anytime someone says relax... they tend to pause for a bit to emphasize the relaxing.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from Sean A. Chai
Great writing. The scariest thing about it is that it's absolutely true. My oldest saw ONE episode of "The Backyardigans" and stared quoting "I know what I want; I know what I don't want. I get what I want." Coming out of the mouth of my (then) four year old stopped her from ever watching that cartoon again. We limit her television viewing but monitor what she and her siblings watch when we can. Although, it's hard to explain the restriction to everyone. Unfortunately, I have some "Susan's" in my family too.
I have one observation of the format. Consider separating the following into two sentences: "Relax, Susan, how does little Timmy act at home?" Independent clauses have a subject and verb as well as form a complete thought. The command verb would be "relax." The subject would be "Susan." The next sentence would be the question.
Good job and I hope you did well on the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Great writing. The scariest thing about it is that it's absolutely true. My oldest saw ONE episode of "The Backyardigans" and stared quoting "I know what I want; I know what I don't want. I get what I want." Coming out of the mouth of my (then) four year old stopped her from ever watching that cartoon again. We limit her television viewing but monitor what she and her siblings watch when we can. Although, it's hard to explain the restriction to everyone. Unfortunately, I have some "Susan's" in my family too.
I have one observation of the format. Consider separating the following into two sentences: "Relax, Susan, how does little Timmy act at home?" Independent clauses have a subject and verb as well as form a complete thought. The command verb would be "relax." The subject would be "Susan." The next sentence would be the question.
Good job and I hope you did well on the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Spitfire
Do TV shows affect the way kids behave? I would say yes. The disrespectful remarks children make to their parents seems funny to the audience, but try handling it in real life. I'll bet the writers are on their fifth marriage and guess who gets custody of the rug rats.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Do TV shows affect the way kids behave? I would say yes. The disrespectful remarks children make to their parents seems funny to the audience, but try handling it in real life. I'll bet the writers are on their fifth marriage and guess who gets custody of the rug rats.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent
History tells us that many lessons in life were told in oral story form, and eventually written. Most were in metaphors, the educational level was not for academics but for people to vicariously receive and retain the message based on their personal experiences.
Mark Twain and others wrote stories that we could relate to and even emotionally envelope. Many lessons of life were read and understood.
Now with television, CDs, DVDs, and tablets, children can enlarge their group of friends, heroes, and villains, real or imagined.
The images and messages are so realistic that they are blueprints, game plans, social behavior indicators, and all without consequences. They imprint the brain with conduct that is negative but such that it will advance them in their school, playgrounds, or at home.
Since many parents have abdicated the role of friends and mentors, the negative influences of mankind's most feared acts, are showered on the young, without challenge or a moral gyroscope.
The Anti-Christ has his own technological path to the brain waves of children [the Internet], and non-caring or ignorant parents have praised the Internet as the dispenser of truth and wisdom.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Excellent
History tells us that many lessons in life were told in oral story form, and eventually written. Most were in metaphors, the educational level was not for academics but for people to vicariously receive and retain the message based on their personal experiences.
Mark Twain and others wrote stories that we could relate to and even emotionally envelope. Many lessons of life were read and understood.
Now with television, CDs, DVDs, and tablets, children can enlarge their group of friends, heroes, and villains, real or imagined.
The images and messages are so realistic that they are blueprints, game plans, social behavior indicators, and all without consequences. They imprint the brain with conduct that is negative but such that it will advance them in their school, playgrounds, or at home.
Since many parents have abdicated the role of friends and mentors, the negative influences of mankind's most feared acts, are showered on the young, without challenge or a moral gyroscope.
The Anti-Christ has his own technological path to the brain waves of children [the Internet], and non-caring or ignorant parents have praised the Internet as the dispenser of truth and wisdom.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from ShirleyT
This is proof that it only takes a few words to get a BIG message across. You have written such truth about such a neglected subject sometimes. Great points.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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This is proof that it only takes a few words to get a BIG message across. You have written such truth about such a neglected subject sometimes. Great points.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from A Matter Of Words
Oh, how true. This is a great little story that reads like a thousand. When did we become so complacent as parents and let TV and electronics take over our children's minds? Excellent story....Stephanie
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Oh, how true. This is a great little story that reads like a thousand. When did we become so complacent as parents and let TV and electronics take over our children's minds? Excellent story....Stephanie
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much.
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Thank you for giving me something to think about.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! No, you needn't say more. There is no limit to waht can be seen on TV now, and no morality judgment, which is sorely needed. All the wrong character traits are being shown as hip and cool and make kids want to be like the scum of the earth... sad times we live in.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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LOL! No, you needn't say more. There is no limit to waht can be seen on TV now, and no morality judgment, which is sorely needed. All the wrong character traits are being shown as hip and cool and make kids want to be like the scum of the earth... sad times we live in.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much.