We all need love
a story about the lack of love.7 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
Now I am really disappointed why this wonderful and tender story did not get a six star as yet (no offense intended to other reviewers).
Every word spoken was from the author's heart. As I read I felt a tear in my eyes. I sincerely do not think this is fiction and even if it is, the story carried itself very well about children missing out on the hugs that all wanted so badly or even a simple praise (children yearn to be praised besides adults).
What she lacked from her Mom, she more than gave it all to her children. If this had been a Mother's day poem for all mothers, we would have felt very happy for the author who is a Mom herself now.
Two six stars for this write. Don't worry, I still have a lot of Virtual Sixers although my quota of Sixers have been exhausted, smiles. :))
A more than excellent, heartfelt write.
Cheerio, hugs and more hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Now I am really disappointed why this wonderful and tender story did not get a six star as yet (no offense intended to other reviewers).
Every word spoken was from the author's heart. As I read I felt a tear in my eyes. I sincerely do not think this is fiction and even if it is, the story carried itself very well about children missing out on the hugs that all wanted so badly or even a simple praise (children yearn to be praised besides adults).
What she lacked from her Mom, she more than gave it all to her children. If this had been a Mother's day poem for all mothers, we would have felt very happy for the author who is a Mom herself now.
Two six stars for this write. Don't worry, I still have a lot of Virtual Sixers although my quota of Sixers have been exhausted, smiles. :))
A more than excellent, heartfelt write.
Cheerio, hugs and more hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thanks Richie, for the virtual Six, It is not fiction, and I do not think the prompt asked for that. I appreciate you sincere review. Mary
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I knew this to be a true story. Sometimes we can more than make up for the things we lack in our younger days to appreciate the present that we have, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Bill Schott
Hugs can do a lot for some people. My dad wasn't a hugger and was pretty much unsocial when sober. My mom loved hugging to a fault. I fall in the middle and hug my kids and relatives on sight.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Hugs can do a lot for some people. My dad wasn't a hugger and was pretty much unsocial when sober. My mom loved hugging to a fault. I fall in the middle and hug my kids and relatives on sight.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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You were luck you had a Mother who loved to hug, I believe it makes a big difference. Thanks for the review.
Comment from NurseBarb
Wow, I can so relate to this story. My mother didn't tell me she loved me until I was in my 40's and even then it sounded forced. I think it works the opposite for us, because I too hugged my children and never miss a day telling them I love them. Great entry and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Wow, I can so relate to this story. My mother didn't tell me she loved me until I was in my 40's and even then it sounded forced. I think it works the opposite for us, because I too hugged my children and never miss a day telling them I love them. Great entry and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from l.raven
your story is very well told...and you are right...you have to get that love to give that love...I am so sorry your mother was that way...but glad you hug your kids everyday...and have forgiven your mother...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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your story is very well told...and you are right...you have to get that love to give that love...I am so sorry your mother was that way...but glad you hug your kids everyday...and have forgiven your mother...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the excellent review.
Comment from freepass
This was good and reminded me of my mom.
Keep up the good work.
Even though it's fiction could also be true.
and good enough for 5 stars*****
keep it up...
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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This was good and reminded me of my mom.
Keep up the good work.
Even though it's fiction could also be true.
and good enough for 5 stars*****
keep it up...
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
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your welcome your welcome to see my poems and chapter too...Boss at Christmas, what a messy house, Phobias, the Arrival
Comment from Nosha17
You have captured the essence of the story in those 100 words very well. I had a Mother, brought up similarly and although she wasn't quite so harsh, I resolved not to let history repeat itself! My mother even called me a mother hen, I would love my kids so much! Good use of language and most enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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You have captured the essence of the story in those 100 words very well. I had a Mother, brought up similarly and although she wasn't quite so harsh, I resolved not to let history repeat itself! My mother even called me a mother hen, I would love my kids so much! Good use of language and most enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thanks Faye, for the exceptional review.
Comment from The Death
Hi, mystery writer.
A nice account of your personal experience where you have highlighted how you missed out on receiving love from your mother. Upbringing surely leaves a deep impact on one's personality, and so was the case with your mother.
There is lack of punctuation in your write and some parts can be tweaked.
Notes:
# I remember when I was about two years old, my Mother hugging me, the last one I remember getting from her.
The above sentence sounds grammatically awkward, especially 'my mother hugging me', which is incorrectly placed in terms of grammar and will read much better as:
I remember my mother hugging me when I was about two years old--the last one I can recall getting from her.
Avoid using 'remember' twice in such a short write. It adds to redundancy. Note that I have used an extra word 'can' here which will get compensated in this line:
My Mother could not show love as we grew older.
Use the contracted form "couldn't".
# All my life(,) I wanted to hear her say "(W)ell done(,) Mary"(.)
# I've three wonderful children who I hug every day.
It should be 'whom', not 'who'.
You have successfully managed to share your story. One can relate to your thoughts and your will to break that cycle. Living happily with family is a blessing. One just can't afford yo miss it--it's priceless!
You have nicely sketched her character here, along with the emotional side. Very nicely done!
Good luck! :)
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Hi, mystery writer.
A nice account of your personal experience where you have highlighted how you missed out on receiving love from your mother. Upbringing surely leaves a deep impact on one's personality, and so was the case with your mother.
There is lack of punctuation in your write and some parts can be tweaked.
Notes:
# I remember when I was about two years old, my Mother hugging me, the last one I remember getting from her.
The above sentence sounds grammatically awkward, especially 'my mother hugging me', which is incorrectly placed in terms of grammar and will read much better as:
I remember my mother hugging me when I was about two years old--the last one I can recall getting from her.
Avoid using 'remember' twice in such a short write. It adds to redundancy. Note that I have used an extra word 'can' here which will get compensated in this line:
My Mother could not show love as we grew older.
Use the contracted form "couldn't".
# All my life(,) I wanted to hear her say "(W)ell done(,) Mary"(.)
# I've three wonderful children who I hug every day.
It should be 'whom', not 'who'.
You have successfully managed to share your story. One can relate to your thoughts and your will to break that cycle. Living happily with family is a blessing. One just can't afford yo miss it--it's priceless!
You have nicely sketched her character here, along with the emotional side. Very nicely done!
Good luck! :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thanks Anupam, for the time and the advice you have given me, I am grateful and have rectifies it. I do appreciate it.