Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "Written In The Stars"The clue is in the title!
23 total reviews
Comment from missjosi
Lovely short Rhyme... well done... best of luck in the competition....................... Warmest wishes and kind regards :)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Lovely short Rhyme... well done... best of luck in the competition....................... Warmest wishes and kind regards :)
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Hi missjosi :) Thank you so much for your nice comments and good luck wishes. Kind regards, Debra
Comment from Karen B.
Debra, Well written entry for this difficult contest prompt. You made it look easy, with tumbling words that flow naturally. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Debra, Well written entry for this difficult contest prompt. You made it look easy, with tumbling words that flow naturally. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Hi Karen, thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both... This was a tough contest! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from michaelcahill
Whew. This was tough enough without the added challenges you placed on yourself. This flows beautifully with perfect meter and flow. It also makes sense and the meaning and emotion come through beautifully. One of the few that isn't hindered by the challenge. Well done! mikey
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Whew. This was tough enough without the added challenges you placed on yourself. This flows beautifully with perfect meter and flow. It also makes sense and the meaning and emotion come through beautifully. One of the few that isn't hindered by the challenge. Well done! mikey
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Hi Mikey :) Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging feedback. I appreciate it.... it sure was a tough contest! Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment from Idamarty
This was really great! I loved the way your words flowed and you adhered to the rules beautifully. Thanks so much for sharing...blessings.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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This was really great! I loved the way your words flowed and you adhered to the rules beautifully. Thanks so much for sharing...blessings.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2014
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Hi Idamarty :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from closetpoetjester
Sounds like the author's in it for the long haul as opposed to him LOL...I liked the pentameter beat as you spelled out that his heart is straying, but hers is firmly entrenched in adoration no matter what. Sometimes it's just too hard to leave when you've invested all that time and effort and feel that person inspite of everything, IS the right one...it certainly feels like it's written in some type of concrete evidence somewhere don't it? LOL Starting afresh is way harder for some who would rather persist and iron out the permanent crinkles. Thoughtfully written Debs and it's clear where HER heart belongs.
Cheers P
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Sounds like the author's in it for the long haul as opposed to him LOL...I liked the pentameter beat as you spelled out that his heart is straying, but hers is firmly entrenched in adoration no matter what. Sometimes it's just too hard to leave when you've invested all that time and effort and feel that person inspite of everything, IS the right one...it certainly feels like it's written in some type of concrete evidence somewhere don't it? LOL Starting afresh is way harder for some who would rather persist and iron out the permanent crinkles. Thoughtfully written Debs and it's clear where HER heart belongs.
Cheers P
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Hi P :) Thanks for your great feedback. Thankfully the poem isn't biographical, I don't quite know where it came from though! Glad you enjoyed it anyway and I hope you are well :) Debs x
Comment from Oz Harte
An incredibly sad and heart-wrenching poem. I hope this emotional pain was not inflicted upon you. Irregardless, you have captured that gnawing feeling that accompanies lost love; and all within the parameters of the Tumbling Words criteria. Although splitting the infinitive is rarely considered in modern writing, good style requires us to be mindful of it where possible. The line "we'd vow it would be always you and me" reads better as "we'd vow it would always be you and me." A small matter I know and advice you can choose to ignore, especially as I am not a grammarian. Overall, an excellent entry.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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An incredibly sad and heart-wrenching poem. I hope this emotional pain was not inflicted upon you. Irregardless, you have captured that gnawing feeling that accompanies lost love; and all within the parameters of the Tumbling Words criteria. Although splitting the infinitive is rarely considered in modern writing, good style requires us to be mindful of it where possible. The line "we'd vow it would be always you and me" reads better as "we'd vow it would always be you and me." A small matter I know and advice you can choose to ignore, especially as I am not a grammarian. Overall, an excellent entry.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Thank you Oz for your great feedback and constructive advice. I do appreciate it :) I wrote the line you referred to that particular way round because of the stresses in the meter if that makes sense? I'm not all that great at explaining technical things! The poem isn't biographical thankfully :)
Again, thank you for sponsoring such a challenging and fun prompt. Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from Connie C
Congratulations, Debra, for taking on the challenge of this contest. You've written a beautifully rhyming love poem that managed to meet the requirements outlined. My best to you in the contest.
Connie xxx
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Congratulations, Debra, for taking on the challenge of this contest. You've written a beautifully rhyming love poem that managed to meet the requirements outlined. My best to you in the contest.
Connie xxx
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Hi Connie :) Thank you for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! I need the good luck - there's some great contenders in the booth! Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x
Comment from sunnilicious
Love has so many feelings. Every woman wants a faithful lover/spouse. Relationship work themselves out for the best. Well thought out. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend :)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Love has so many feelings. Every woman wants a faithful lover/spouse. Relationship work themselves out for the best. Well thought out. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend :)
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2014
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Hi sunnilicious :) Thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment from DragonSkulls
This is a great little sonnet for this complicated contest, Debra. Not an easy task to do. Beautiful love poem. I wish you the best of luck in the booths, D. Have a great day.
Ron
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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This is a great little sonnet for this complicated contest, Debra. Not an easy task to do. Beautiful love poem. I wish you the best of luck in the booths, D. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Hi Ron :) Thank you for your great review and good luck wishes. I truly appreciate both :) Cheers, Debra
Comment from RYME4U
very nice and well rhymed. The contest rules have been followed and the rhythm is well done. The requited love feelings come through well.
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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very nice and well rhymed. The contest rules have been followed and the rhythm is well done. The requited love feelings come through well.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 31-May-2014
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Thank you Ryme4u for your great feedback. Kindest regards, Debra :)