Bible Stories in Rhyme
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Daniel"Poetry and Stories from the Bible
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, Carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this couplet poem that encapsulates the story of Daniel surviving the lion's den. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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this is very well written, Carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this couplet poem that encapsulates the story of Daniel surviving the lion's den. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 26-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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I am glad you enjoyed the story of Daniel. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
Again, I am familiar with the image of Daniel in the lion's den, but had forgotten the circumstances that led up to it. I didn't know their mouths were shut tight. This is a delightful way to remember those stories.
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Again, I am familiar with the image of Daniel in the lion's den, but had forgotten the circumstances that led up to it. I didn't know their mouths were shut tight. This is a delightful way to remember those stories.
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thanks Shari for your continued interest, I appreciate the encouragement. More to come, :-) Carolyn
Comment from GracieAnn
Carolyn, what magnificent predators! It only makes the story of Daniel more miraculous. It is such a great testament to God's protection and provision. The couplets are rhymed solidly with a flowing meter. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Carolyn, what magnificent predators! It only makes the story of Daniel more miraculous. It is such a great testament to God's protection and provision. The couplets are rhymed solidly with a flowing meter. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thanks GracieAnn for this wonderful review and generous rating. It is good to hear that you think the poem is properly written, I value your input. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very beautiful rendition of the book of Daniel that the author has created with this piece of writing. Daniel was a very lucky and religious man and this served him well in this story.
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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This is a very beautiful rendition of the book of Daniel that the author has created with this piece of writing. Daniel was a very lucky and religious man and this served him well in this story.
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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He is certainly a courageous man to follow. God must have been so very proud of him. Thank you Tom, :-) Carolyn
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My pleasure
Comment from misscookie
This is an awesome read. Those words are so true with God at your side no way will you lose.
I can relate where God kept me from harm and death.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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This is an awesome read. Those words are so true with God at your side no way will you lose.
I can relate where God kept me from harm and death.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thank you misscookie, from the bottom of my heart. Your comments are wonderful and I appreciate the awesome stars as well. :-) Carolyn
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You're very welcome , have fun safe day.
Cookie
Comment from krys123
Carolyn, and marvelous and very creative and inventive piece of poetry that is simply inspirational, enlightening and illuminative. Your rhyming and Lyndon was done excellently and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained while your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your Palm which made it easy for me to read your poem so clearly. Your story of the old parable of Daniel and the lion's den was written so well that the imagery seemed to dance in the my minds eye as I was impressed by how you handled the way you have written this story so well. Thank you for sharing of posting this for everyone and may you have a happy Memorial Day.
Alex
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Carolyn, and marvelous and very creative and inventive piece of poetry that is simply inspirational, enlightening and illuminative. Your rhyming and Lyndon was done excellently and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained while your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your Palm which made it easy for me to read your poem so clearly. Your story of the old parable of Daniel and the lion's den was written so well that the imagery seemed to dance in the my minds eye as I was impressed by how you handled the way you have written this story so well. Thank you for sharing of posting this for everyone and may you have a happy Memorial Day.
Alex
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Dear Alex, I am so happy you enjoyed the story poem of Daniel. He was certainly a courageous example. Love, Carolyn
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You are so sincerely welcome
Comment from JB Lynn
I really liked this one. The story of Daniel and the lions has always been one of my favorites (and my youngest brother is named after Daniel!). I thought the use of dialogue when Daniel speaks of the angel really added life into your poem.
One tiny suggestion, you might want to take a look at the word "great" in the final line. For me, the rhythm feels smoother without it, but that could just be the way I'm reading it.
Thanks for sharing - I still love this idea for a collection of poems.
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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I really liked this one. The story of Daniel and the lions has always been one of my favorites (and my youngest brother is named after Daniel!). I thought the use of dialogue when Daniel speaks of the angel really added life into your poem.
One tiny suggestion, you might want to take a look at the word "great" in the final line. For me, the rhythm feels smoother without it, but that could just be the way I'm reading it.
Thanks for sharing - I still love this idea for a collection of poems.
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thanks JB, I will look at the last line, with appreciation for the suggestion. Glad you are liking the series. BTW, I should have around 20 to 30 in the series when completed.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from l.raven
Hi Carolyn, this is a wonderful write on the story of Daniel in the bible....you really did a great job describing Daniels faith...so very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Hi Carolyn, this is a wonderful write on the story of Daniel in the bible....you really did a great job describing Daniels faith...so very well written you...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Hi there Linda, I am glad you are enjoying this series and the wonderful review you have given. Love, Carolyn
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It is a wonderful series...so much to learn...big hugs you...luff ya Linda xxoo
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
do God's will - add apostrophe for possessive
lion's den - add apostrophe
good alliteration in down to the den
you've taken a familiar Bible story and breathed new life into it by telling it in rhyme while still retaining the highlights of the plot and the message it delivers :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets
do God's will - add apostrophe for possessive
lion's den - add apostrophe
good alliteration in down to the den
you've taken a familiar Bible story and breathed new life into it by telling it in rhyme while still retaining the highlights of the plot and the message it delivers :-) Brooke
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thanks Brooke, I appreciate your comments and edits. :-) Carolyn
Comment from JavaJunkie
Fantastic...I love this bible story, but you have captured it nicely in rhyme. Your meter is fantastic making for a smooth rhythm
I look forward to more from you.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Fantastic...I love this bible story, but you have captured it nicely in rhyme. Your meter is fantastic making for a smooth rhythm
I look forward to more from you.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thanks JavaJunkie, I am happy you liked Daniel. :-) Carolyn