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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
It's so great to see that so much of the world around you appears in your poetry.
These set metred quatrains tell a fine tale of how community money can be put to good use for all.
Well written, rhymed and preseented.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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It's so great to see that so much of the world around you appears in your poetry.
These set metred quatrains tell a fine tale of how community money can be put to good use for all.
Well written, rhymed and preseented.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you Shirley. I appreciate you comment.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the photograph of one of your local ball fields. We are fortunate in the Malibu/Santa Monica area to have excellent tax-supported parks where both youths and adults can use their "pent-up energy" or just enjoy their leisure time. I, for one, walk regularly in our municipal parks. I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains and social commitment. Cheers and happy weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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Thank you for sharing the photograph of one of your local ball fields. We are fortunate in the Malibu/Santa Monica area to have excellent tax-supported parks where both youths and adults can use their "pent-up energy" or just enjoy their leisure time. I, for one, walk regularly in our municipal parks. I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains and social commitment. Cheers and happy weekend- Joan
Comment Written 23-May-2014
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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Thank you Joan. I thought I was a good time right before a long holiday weekend. Happy hiking!
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Indeed--but I'll hide from the traffic and stay close to home. I'll expect your photos to transport me! -Joan
Comment from rod007
There is a great message in this wonderful poem that we must invest in these youths. Like you I enjoyed seeing kids play sports and loved watching my son play soccer. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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There is a great message in this wonderful poem that we must invest in these youths. Like you I enjoyed seeing kids play sports and loved watching my son play soccer. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 23-May-2014
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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Thank you so much rod.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Ball Field" is an excellent poem with good meter, rhyme and a rhyme scheme followed consistently. It has good figurative language (investment in our youth) and imagery.
Preston
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Ball Field" is an excellent poem with good meter, rhyme and a rhyme scheme followed consistently. It has good figurative language (investment in our youth) and imagery.
Preston
Comment Written 23-May-2014
reply by the author on 23-May-2014
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Thank you Preston, I thought it might strike a cord with you as it fits well into an enlightened society. I appreciate the high regard expressed in those stars.
Comment from Nottoway
Beautifully stated homage to providing activities for youth, It is amazing how fulfilled young people can be when given the opportunity. They learn so much and the reward is is that they are saved from the juvenile detention centers. I know-I have worked in a juvenile detention center of over 21 years. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Beautifully stated homage to providing activities for youth, It is amazing how fulfilled young people can be when given the opportunity. They learn so much and the reward is is that they are saved from the juvenile detention centers. I know-I have worked in a juvenile detention center of over 21 years. Well done.
Comment Written 22-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Thank you Nottiway. You perspective is invaluable on this subject.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Great poem with a good message. In this age of "screen entertainment", it is even more important to encourage kids to go outside and play. Thanks for reminding us of that, Tom.
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Great poem with a good message. In this age of "screen entertainment", it is even more important to encourage kids to go outside and play. Thanks for reminding us of that, Tom.
Comment Written 22-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Thank you, Marrietta. So true!
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A very enjoyable verse. I have spent many hours watching my children and then grandchildren playing ball on community and school fields. At least you can
see where your tax money is going, which is not always the case. I can name a few pot holes in need of attention!
Smiles to you, Robin :)
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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A very enjoyable verse. I have spent many hours watching my children and then grandchildren playing ball on community and school fields. At least you can
see where your tax money is going, which is not always the case. I can name a few pot holes in need of attention!
Smiles to you, Robin :)
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you Robin. Yes, pot holes are a plague this year.
Comment from Angel Debbie
I loved these lines, "So, watching them with pride,
on fields my taxes made,
and the community supplied,
is worth the money paid."
Many people don't realize their taxes go for such things.
Nice write and informative too
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I loved these lines, "So, watching them with pride,
on fields my taxes made,
and the community supplied,
is worth the money paid."
Many people don't realize their taxes go for such things.
Nice write and informative too
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you Angel. Yes, you are right, many don't know.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Well said and presented and since I play Senior BB, I know exactly where you're coming from. A message that should be heard but sadly the vast majority of our youth are getting fat, lazy and show a lack of empathy because of the growing social scourge of electronics. Our tax dollars will be cleaning up the psychiatric/physical mess 10 years from now if not already.
Regards:
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Well said and presented and since I play Senior BB, I know exactly where you're coming from. A message that should be heard but sadly the vast majority of our youth are getting fat, lazy and show a lack of empathy because of the growing social scourge of electronics. Our tax dollars will be cleaning up the psychiatric/physical mess 10 years from now if not already.
Regards:
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you Stephen. An interesting perspective, and most likely true.
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Dear Tom: Loved the piece and the pic you took. Just posted Part 2 of 'Fathers'. Thanks.
Steve
Comment from NicciFaye
Treischel - I really enjoyed reading this poem. For several reasons, the passion you have in writing is felt because of the embrace you've taken from this moment in the picture. you've painted the wisdom filled and essence of your thoughts of the good things in life with this poem and moment. Excellent.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Treischel - I really enjoyed reading this poem. For several reasons, the passion you have in writing is felt because of the embrace you've taken from this moment in the picture. you've painted the wisdom filled and essence of your thoughts of the good things in life with this poem and moment. Excellent.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you very much Nicci. What a wonderful review.
