Condemn Us Not
When rituals hurt......a free verse69 total reviews
Comment from Nomar Chagrin
Ahh, the beginning of this poem was just cryptic enough to not be obscure, which I think is how a poem should be. Then the last line brought it all together. I've heard of this barbaric practice and can only hope it will be eliminated forever. Great poem, Nassus.
~ Jack
reply by the author on 28-May-2014
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Ahh, the beginning of this poem was just cryptic enough to not be obscure, which I think is how a poem should be. Then the last line brought it all together. I've heard of this barbaric practice and can only hope it will be eliminated forever. Great poem, Nassus.
~ Jack
Comment Written 27-May-2014
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Thanks a lot Captain jack for considering this a great poem. God bless, I appreciate so much the six stars. I am deeply humbled.
Comment from GWinterwin
This poem makes me terribly angry. To think they are people who will do such thing to women, they should be hung by their testicles until dead. Sorry I don't mean to sound so cruel, but this is the most cruel thing that could happen to a human.
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This poem makes me terribly angry. To think they are people who will do such thing to women, they should be hung by their testicles until dead. Sorry I don't mean to sound so cruel, but this is the most cruel thing that could happen to a human.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks a lot GWinterwin for resonating strongly with this poem. I really appreciate the six stars, I am deeply humbled.
Comment from evilynne
What a horrible ritual. And how horrible that it cannot be refused. Your poem addresses this with eloquence and compassion; it is a well written work. I found the information in your notes interesting and the accompanying picture by MoonWillow's artwork fantastic.
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What a horrible ritual. And how horrible that it cannot be refused. Your poem addresses this with eloquence and compassion; it is a well written work. I found the information in your notes interesting and the accompanying picture by MoonWillow's artwork fantastic.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks for considering this a well written work, I do appreciate that you resonated with the message of the poem.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a poem of liberation. It's hard to conceive that such ignorant barbarity still exists in the world. It seems like half the world is on the moon and the other half is living in a cave. Interesting poem.
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This is a poem of liberation. It's hard to conceive that such ignorant barbarity still exists in the world. It seems like half the world is on the moon and the other half is living in a cave. Interesting poem.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks Bill for considering this an interesting poem.I am humbled, God bless.
Comment from jaydub99
Interesting piece. I liked the dark tone and angst that your words conveyed. I am not sure what you mean by the rhymes are incidental. They seem purposeful to me and actually give the poem a driving rhythm. Their planned inclusion in this piece gives it the tone it has. I liked the rawness of the piece and it's stripped down nature. Nice job.
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Interesting piece. I liked the dark tone and angst that your words conveyed. I am not sure what you mean by the rhymes are incidental. They seem purposeful to me and actually give the poem a driving rhythm. Their planned inclusion in this piece gives it the tone it has. I liked the rawness of the piece and it's stripped down nature. Nice job.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks for considering this an interesting piece and a nice job. I am deeply honored.
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. I don't get it but I'm sure the fault is mine so I won't penalize you for it. Good luck.
Mai Mai
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This is an interesting piece. I don't get it but I'm sure the fault is mine so I won't penalize you for it. Good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks a lot Mai Mai for reading and for the five stars too. God bless.
Comment from emrpoems
I certainly agree that this ritual should be banned. Is Ethiopia a part of the United Nations. If so the topic should be discussed and necessary recommendations made.
Great free verse with thought provoking message
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I certainly agree that this ritual should be banned. Is Ethiopia a part of the United Nations. If so the topic should be discussed and necessary recommendations made.
Great free verse with thought provoking message
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks for considering this a great free verse with thought provoking message. I am deeply honored. God bless.
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
How barbaric this tradition is. Cruel, inhuman and if I remember correctly it is performed so that the woman will not have sexual satisfaction and she will not cheat. Your poem is powerful, and thank you for bringing this subject forefront. So often these subjects are kept quiet and under the rug. Thanks again. Terrie
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How barbaric this tradition is. Cruel, inhuman and if I remember correctly it is performed so that the woman will not have sexual satisfaction and she will not cheat. Your poem is powerful, and thank you for bringing this subject forefront. So often these subjects are kept quiet and under the rug. Thanks again. Terrie
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks for considering this poem powerful. I am humbled, God bless.
Comment from michaelcahill
Awesome work. It is difficult to take such a gut churning subject and not just throw screams down on the paper. You do such a greater service here by bringing an artists insight to the table. The message comes through elevated and inspiring when there is thought behind it to go with the emotion. Wonderful. mikey
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Awesome work. It is difficult to take such a gut churning subject and not just throw screams down on the paper. You do such a greater service here by bringing an artists insight to the table. The message comes through elevated and inspiring when there is thought behind it to go with the emotion. Wonderful. mikey
Comment Written 18-May-2014
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Thanks mikey for considering this a wonderful poem, thanks too for the heartwarming, positive remarks, I appreciate it. God bless.
Comment from Ekim777
Are we not all burdened by deadly past traditions. Nowhere is it more obvious than the primitive, barbaric practice of genital mutilation. There is nothing holy about most of our inherited practices. They represent something relate to death, not life. They are buried in the dead past when all their symbolism is gone like a puff of smoke. It is all implied in those verses but I wonder are the rhymes necessary? -Ekim777
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Are we not all burdened by deadly past traditions. Nowhere is it more obvious than the primitive, barbaric practice of genital mutilation. There is nothing holy about most of our inherited practices. They represent something relate to death, not life. They are buried in the dead past when all their symbolism is gone like a puff of smoke. It is all implied in those verses but I wonder are the rhymes necessary? -Ekim777
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 28-May-2014
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Thanks ekim777 for the intelligent review, the rhymes are incidental, they are not intended for the poem is meant to be a free verse. It just so happened that the words to express my point fall in line with rhymes. Thanks for appreciating my work.
