notes from abroad
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "life pitches"collection of poems and short stories
8 total reviews
Comment from a.w.brooks
Love how the words flow together and it is true life does throw you a curve now and then it is just testing us to strive to do better or teaching us something I am not sure but loved it thanks for writing
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Love how the words flow together and it is true life does throw you a curve now and then it is just testing us to strive to do better or teaching us something I am not sure but loved it thanks for writing
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Maybe I just knocked that curve ball atta the park eh? ha ha People assumed that it was a bad thing, the curve ball. The beauty of senryu. I might rewrite this one. I do like the idea of angels in the bleachers. Thanks for the review, cheers
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No I didn't think it was bad just something to learn from
Cheers to you
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I think it was a big vague when I could have made a distinct statement. Thanks so much for your opinion, I appreciate it, cheers
Comment from mfowler
You've connected the baseball metaphor as a strong image of life's last moments. The bleachers is where your heaven lies in wait. The mound is where you strike out in life. But, a curve ball, the unexpected (perhaps cancer) comes along and hastens the end. Good emotional, and poetic senryu.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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You've connected the baseball metaphor as a strong image of life's last moments. The bleachers is where your heaven lies in wait. The mound is where you strike out in life. But, a curve ball, the unexpected (perhaps cancer) comes along and hastens the end. Good emotional, and poetic senryu.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Maybe I just hit that curve ball right out of the park. I think that I will rewrite this and make it more positive,I do like the idea of angels in the bleachers. Thanks for the review mfowler, cheers
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu makes a homerun with its metaphorical allusions to the ninth inning and the movement player player on field to fan in the stands. Nice.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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This senryu makes a homerun with its metaphorical allusions to the ninth inning and the movement player player on field to fan in the stands. Nice.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thanks for the review, I think that I might rewrite it, so that I hit that curve ball out of the park. I do like the idea of angels in the bleachers, cheers
Comment from LoannaLois
I love this senryu for its dual meaning and its absolute humanness. The final line of "life throws me a curve" is so directly tied to the the baseball and the emotions of the message that it is tied with a bow.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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I love this senryu for its dual meaning and its absolute humanness. The final line of "life throws me a curve" is so directly tied to the the baseball and the emotions of the message that it is tied with a bow.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thanks for the review, I think that I might rewrite it so that I hit the curve ball out of the park,cheers ps I do like the idea of angels in the bleachers though
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This follows the criteria of the prompt in form and syllable count. It it interesting and rather mysterious as to whether the angels wanted life to throw you a curve or whether they were cheering for you no matter what. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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This follows the criteria of the prompt in form and syllable count. It it interesting and rather mysterious as to whether the angels wanted life to throw you a curve or whether they were cheering for you no matter what. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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The angels cheered when I hit the curve ball out of the park, thanks for the review,cheers
Comment from A Matter Of Words
I enjoyed this thought provoking senryu. We never know when life will take a turn and our time is up. We have such expectations about our lives and how long we will live, but it is not really under our control. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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I enjoyed this thought provoking senryu. We never know when life will take a turn and our time is up. We have such expectations about our lives and how long we will live, but it is not really under our control. Nicely written.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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My time is up??? I hit that ball out of the park! ha ha Thanks for the review, cheers
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Did I interpret it wrong? If so I hope you didn't take offence. Best wishes with this poem.
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I would never take offense at someone's interpretation my dear. Usually curve ball means something bad,but maybe I hit that ball out of the park. I think that I will rewrite this with a clearer message. I do like the idea of angels in the bleachers though, cheers
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That is very gracious of you. It was my literal interpretation of angels in the bleaches that took me down that path. Ooops :)
Comment from donette1914
what a interesting creative poem of how life does through us a curve when we least expect and i enjoyed this piece and i like the artwork well done
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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what a interesting creative poem of how life does through us a curve when we least expect and i enjoyed this piece and i like the artwork well done
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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It can go either way, maybe I hit that curve ball out of the park, the beauty of senryu, thanks for the review, cheers
Comment from humpwhistle
Hey, even the Mighty Casey struck out. Baseball
is a game where you're a hero if you succeed one
third of the time. I'm not sure we should expect to do
any better in life.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Hey, even the Mighty Casey struck out. Baseball
is a game where you're a hero if you succeed one
third of the time. I'm not sure we should expect to do
any better in life.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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I'm not saying I didn't hit that curve ball. ha ha, the beauty of senryu. Thanks for the review Lee,peace to you too.
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I could never hit a curve unless it hung like laundry. I guess I inferred my weakness on you. Yep, the beauty of the senryu. Keep swingin'.