Her Absurd Laughter
Senryu7 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
Nice showing in the contest. This was my pick. As far as I'm concerned this was hands down the best entry. Awesome choice of words and great depth seldom seen in one of these. This also answered the intent of the prompt perfectly. And finally, take the pictures away, this one still packs the same impact. True poetry. Well done, mikey
reply by the author on 17-May-2014
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Nice showing in the contest. This was my pick. As far as I'm concerned this was hands down the best entry. Awesome choice of words and great depth seldom seen in one of these. This also answered the intent of the prompt perfectly. And finally, take the pictures away, this one still packs the same impact. True poetry. Well done, mikey
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 17-May-2014
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Thank you so much Michael, for giving me such encouragement to keep writing. Your comments are cherished.. Thank you!!
Comment from RYME4U
I like how you have implied that the letter is a note of rejection and she laughs to cover her tears. Very well done and presentation is great.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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I like how you have implied that the letter is a note of rejection and she laughs to cover her tears. Very well done and presentation is great.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thank you RYME4U, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your line and syllable count is spot on for the contest
your chosen few words allow the reader to see and feel the laughter is a front for the pain the letter is going to cause
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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good luck in the contest
your line and syllable count is spot on for the contest
your chosen few words allow the reader to see and feel the laughter is a front for the pain the letter is going to cause
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging review!
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most welcome..SC
Comment from LoannaLois
This senryu is particularly good, because it conveys a feeling within the message. It was sad and I could picture her nervous laughter as she could not cope with the news or message she received.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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This senryu is particularly good, because it conveys a feeling within the message. It was sad and I could picture her nervous laughter as she could not cope with the news or message she received.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you so much for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from A Matter Of Words
A beautiful expression of emotion in this work. The reader gets imagines bad news or a break-up being delivered in a letter. The absurd laughter is disbelief and the tears are the pain and hurt. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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A beautiful expression of emotion in this work. The reader gets imagines bad news or a break-up being delivered in a letter. The absurd laughter is disbelief and the tears are the pain and hurt. Nicely written.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you so much for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very creative. You took advantage of this limited poetry type. I like how you use a capital "A" only once with the word "absurd". It emphasizes that word. Very creative and well written.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Very creative. You took advantage of this limited poetry type. I like how you use a capital "A" only once with the word "absurd". It emphasizes that word. Very creative and well written.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you Michael, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a good example of senryu, with the irony of tears and inappropriate laughter at the same time. It meets the criteria of this contest as to form and syllable count. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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This is a good example of senryu, with the irony of tears and inappropriate laughter at the same time. It meets the criteria of this contest as to form and syllable count. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you Jeanie, for this kind and generous review!