senryu (old pin pricks of doubt)
Self doubt is the forerunner of fear.7 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count for the senryu contest
good alliteration in pin pricks and fear floods and doubt/dig/dyke/decisions
excellent use of metaphor in making your point :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-May-2014
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count for the senryu contest
good alliteration in pin pricks and fear floods and doubt/dig/dyke/decisions
excellent use of metaphor in making your point :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 17-May-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from RYME4U
Well done. I like the metaphor od pinpricks in a dyke.Eventually a flood will appear. This is nicely done and well illustrated. Good job!
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Well done. I like the metaphor od pinpricks in a dyke.Eventually a flood will appear. This is nicely done and well illustrated. Good job!
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from LoannaLois
This is a deep and emotional senryu whose message is one of insecurity and the constant doubt.Humaness is obvious and this illustration is beautiful.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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This is a deep and emotional senryu whose message is one of insecurity and the constant doubt.Humaness is obvious and this illustration is beautiful.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from A Matter Of Words
Senryu requirements met. I appreciated the wisdom set forth in this piece. Doubt has got to be one of the most destructive forces in the human mind. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Senryu requirements met. I appreciated the wisdom set forth in this piece. Doubt has got to be one of the most destructive forces in the human mind. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thanks for the kind review.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your few words allow the reader to see and feel that old thoughts of doubt bring forth fear
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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good luck in the contest
your few words allow the reader to see and feel that old thoughts of doubt bring forth fear
flows well
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
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most welcome..SC
Comment from donette1914
old pin pricks of doubt dig tiny holes in the dyke fear floods decisions, very interesting words that catch our attention and the artwork was amazing well done
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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old pin pricks of doubt dig tiny holes in the dyke fear floods decisions, very interesting words that catch our attention and the artwork was amazing well done
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Val Crisson
Interesting senyru, and I really feel the alliteration works in this little piece. Your last line "fear floods decisions" is perfect. Good luck in the contest, as this should do well.
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Interesting senyru, and I really feel the alliteration works in this little piece. Your last line "fear floods decisions" is perfect. Good luck in the contest, as this should do well.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thanks for reviewing. Glad you liked it.