regrets
a senryu .. regret10 total reviews
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. I like the examples. Don't put all you eggs in one basket, then cry when all of them broke. Nero played the fiddle when his city burned. Think of a better way. Don't cry over spilled milk, just be more careful the next time. Great work.
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I like the examples. Don't put all you eggs in one basket, then cry when all of them broke. Nero played the fiddle when his city burned. Think of a better way. Don't cry over spilled milk, just be more careful the next time. Great work.
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thanks for the review nelliesellie, it was fun to write.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a senryu that approaches the idea of regret from the perspective of the classic cautionary tale of placing all your hopes and dreams into one venture. 'my tears of spilled milk, is both open to interpretation and visually thought-provoking.
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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This is a senryu that approaches the idea of regret from the perspective of the classic cautionary tale of placing all your hopes and dreams into one venture. 'my tears of spilled milk, is both open to interpretation and visually thought-provoking.
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Thanks for the great review Bill, I appreciate your thoughts, cheers
Comment from TAB_that's me
Such a true little poem. It is written in perfect senryu form with correct syllable count. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Such a true little poem. It is written in perfect senryu form with correct syllable count. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thanks for the great review, sigh J
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very cool, Mystery poet, and I loved your accompanying photo art. Astounding!
Yes, we must keep all of our available options open, mustn't we? Never put the cart before the horse, that is a good way to get run over and trampled upon.
Nicely done senryu. I really enjoyed the dark ambiance...
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Very cool, Mystery poet, and I loved your accompanying photo art. Astounding!
Yes, we must keep all of our available options open, mustn't we? Never put the cart before the horse, that is a good way to get run over and trampled upon.
Nicely done senryu. I really enjoyed the dark ambiance...
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thanks for the encouraging review Dean, I appreciate your reaction, cheers
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You're very welcome.
Comment from yolieday
Really nice piece. This poem says so much and how most of our tears are over "spilled milk". Love the flow. A lot said in such a short piece. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Really nice piece. This poem says so much and how most of our tears are over "spilled milk". Love the flow. A lot said in such a short piece. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thanks for the great review sigh
Comment from chicken scratch love
Ohhh nooooo...I do believe that there needs to be one more word (syllable). Aren't there supposed to be 17 syllables in a Senryu? That is my only hangup with this write. If I need to be corrected on my understanding of the guidelines of a Senryu, please let me know! Because, otherwise, I found this poem to be pretty worthy of 5 stars...but if I'm RIGHT, it's just too harsh of a shortcoming to overlook : /
**I just checked this out again...please tell me you edited, because now I AM counting 17 syllables o_O
...either way, I changed the rating because I DO like this poem ; )
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Ohhh nooooo...I do believe that there needs to be one more word (syllable). Aren't there supposed to be 17 syllables in a Senryu? That is my only hangup with this write. If I need to be corrected on my understanding of the guidelines of a Senryu, please let me know! Because, otherwise, I found this poem to be pretty worthy of 5 stars...but if I'm RIGHT, it's just too harsh of a shortcoming to overlook : /
**I just checked this out again...please tell me you edited, because now I AM counting 17 syllables o_O
...either way, I changed the rating because I DO like this poem ; )
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thanks for the review and I will check that out, cheers
Comment from Dianemae
A poem of a few cliché. I never put all my eggs in one basket, or cry over split milk. The flame are a big draw for little hands, but you always get burned. Good thought provoking poem.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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A poem of a few cliché. I never put all my eggs in one basket, or cry over split milk. The flame are a big draw for little hands, but you always get burned. Good thought provoking poem.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thanks for the great review and one of your own, cheers
Comment from zanya
Regrets with its many facets metaphorically captured here in this Senyru - regrets are part of our human landscape - and an interesting pic
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Regrets with its many facets metaphorically captured here in this Senyru - regrets are part of our human landscape - and an interesting pic
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thanks for the review zanya, you have to examine those regrets and make lessons, cheers
Comment from lancellot
Very nice. I like how you popular words of wisdom and reversed them to show reason why we have regrets. If only we had followed even two out of three, just think how our lives would be. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Very nice. I like how you popular words of wisdom and reversed them to show reason why we have regrets. If only we had followed even two out of three, just think how our lives would be. Well done.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thanks or the review, yes we have to examine regrets and make them into lessons learned, cheers
Comment from rjuselius
"eggs in one basket
nero playing in the flames
my tears of spilled milk"
never put eggs in one basket because you may lose the ones together. is nero referring to Nero, the roman leader?
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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"eggs in one basket
nero playing in the flames
my tears of spilled milk"
never put eggs in one basket because you may lose the ones together. is nero referring to Nero, the roman leader?
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Yes, Nero the emperor, high on the hill playing the fiddle while Rome burns, cheers