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Comment from risktaker
I agree, be still, pray, and do nothing until your mind is clear. Confusion is not of God. I have learned to do this through experience. I like the choice of words, the flow and the message. thanks
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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I agree, be still, pray, and do nothing until your mind is clear. Confusion is not of God. I have learned to do this through experience. I like the choice of words, the flow and the message. thanks
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thank you, risktaker.
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is a very good answer, Tom, that takes care of so many woes, and gets it nicely off your chest. I love the structure of this poem, quatrains with same ending rhyme, it makes the words bounce along nicely. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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That is a very good answer, Tom, that takes care of so many woes, and gets it nicely off your chest. I love the structure of this poem, quatrains with same ending rhyme, it makes the words bounce along nicely. :) Sandra
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"What Do You Do?" is structured as six quatrain poem. Each stanza is introduced by a four beat line but I do not see a pattern for the other lines. It is not free verse because the structure is controlled by a rhyme pattern of aaaa which is visually pleasing. The rhyme is good and catchy but sort of boring as it is the same through all lines. I consider the advice in the end line which is a good conclusion to be sound although I would say meditate.
Preston
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"What Do You Do?" is structured as six quatrain poem. Each stanza is introduced by a four beat line but I do not see a pattern for the other lines. It is not free verse because the structure is controlled by a rhyme pattern of aaaa which is visually pleasing. The rhyme is good and catchy but sort of boring as it is the same through all lines. I consider the advice in the end line which is a good conclusion to be sound although I would say meditate.
Preston
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I love it.
I feel that way myself quite often.
An engaging and realistic poem which is enhanced by the choice of formatting and image.
I lkve that when the ship is sinking we tend to turn to God in prayer.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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I love it.
I feel that way myself quite often.
An engaging and realistic poem which is enhanced by the choice of formatting and image.
I lkve that when the ship is sinking we tend to turn to God in prayer.
Comment Written 11-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you Shirley.
Comment from 9999pool
This poem sounded like a fun read although the content is pretty grim.
However at the end, it was an encouragement for us to start praying and hope for the best, smiles.
Prayers have a way of soothing our pains when on the brink and everything stinks as we start to sink within a short blink. Well I got the gist of this story in a sentence, how's that?
Smiles, cheerio, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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This poem sounded like a fun read although the content is pretty grim.
However at the end, it was an encouragement for us to start praying and hope for the best, smiles.
Prayers have a way of soothing our pains when on the brink and everything stinks as we start to sink within a short blink. Well I got the gist of this story in a sentence, how's that?
Smiles, cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you Ritchie. Yes, you certainly got the gist.
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Hi Tom,
Happy Mother's Day to your wife and I do hope there is a family get together of sorts to celebrate. Smiles.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Comment from sunnilicious
Working 9 to 5... what a way to make a living. I love that photograph. Well, the Internet is a good resource. Oh but she's clueless. Prayer is a great answer. I didn't even think it coming. I would have thought happy meal at McDonald's. Fabulous poem.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Working 9 to 5... what a way to make a living. I love that photograph. Well, the Internet is a good resource. Oh but she's clueless. Prayer is a great answer. I didn't even think it coming. I would have thought happy meal at McDonald's. Fabulous poem.
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you Alicia.
Comment from Angel Debbie
As disturbing as life is sometimes praying is the only remedy. Nice write I like the way you showed frazzement with the lines being uneven. That is a very creative call. Thank You for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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As disturbing as life is sometimes praying is the only remedy. Nice write I like the way you showed frazzement with the lines being uneven. That is a very creative call. Thank You for sharing.
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 11-May-2014
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Thank you Angel. Glad you liked the arrangement.
Comment from Dianemae
Been in many of those situations and don't even know what to pray for. Good poem to let others know we all have the same problems. The solution is the same pray.
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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Been in many of those situations and don't even know what to pray for. Good poem to let others know we all have the same problems. The solution is the same pray.
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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Thanks Dianemae.
