She
Love Contest entry...17 total reviews
Comment from evilynne
A very lovely tribute to a loved one. You followed the rules well, expressing feelings of love without actually the word. Nicely written and easy to understand, emotionally touching. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
  |
A very lovely tribute to a loved one. You followed the rules well, expressing feelings of love without actually the word. Nicely written and easy to understand, emotionally touching. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
-
Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging review. I appreciate it ~ Cally :)
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Well done, the words that are to be omitted, which are normally associated with a love poem, aren't missing at all. The meaning of each of them reverberate throughout this wonderfully penned poem. Well done, :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
|
Well done, the words that are to be omitted, which are normally associated with a love poem, aren't missing at all. The meaning of each of them reverberate throughout this wonderfully penned poem. Well done, :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
-
Oh, what a lovely review... an so encouraging! Thank you ~ Cally :)
Comment from casini
Really a heart touching poem for someone you loved so much. Along with your expression of affections the beautiful description of nature added more beauty to it. My best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
|
Really a heart touching poem for someone you loved so much. Along with your expression of affections the beautiful description of nature added more beauty to it. My best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
-
Oh dear! I feel like a bit of a fraud now... this poem is not about a real lost love, it was written as a response to the contest brief. (Hence the great rhyming of "peace" and "Mellise!")
Thank you so much for your kind review ~ Cally :)
Comment from GWHARGIS
I liked the feeling that you were closer to her at her grave site and how it wasn't a graveyard to you, but a sanctuary of sorts. Great emotion and I loved the style of writing. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
|
I liked the feeling that you were closer to her at her grave site and how it wasn't a graveyard to you, but a sanctuary of sorts. Great emotion and I loved the style of writing. Nicely done.
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
-
Actually, it wasn't that at all! LOL
It is all in metaphor, and the garden/refuge/paradise, call it what you will, IS the lady. She IS his safe haven (and always will be.)
Guess that fell flat then! LOL
Thank you for your kind review.
-
I'm not the brightest bulb in the box sometimes. I've been thinking about my mother a lot lately and she passed away several years ago. Don't use me as your measuring stick. It was a beautiful poem nonetheless. Sorry about the mix up.
-
No, it is great that people can take it in more than one way, that way, more people can relate, which is great!
I am sorry if the poem brought back painful memories for you, or, perhaps they are happy memories that are needed by you at the moment?
Thanks again :)
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of SHE, The presentation is appropriate for the poem without the word LOVE. Your poetic words in this love felt tribute are clever to accomplish the prompt. I envy anyone who can express such wonderful feelings with words. Excellent. Carole
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
|
To the author of SHE, The presentation is appropriate for the poem without the word LOVE. Your poetic words in this love felt tribute are clever to accomplish the prompt. I envy anyone who can express such wonderful feelings with words. Excellent. Carole
Comment Written 09-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
-
Hi Carole,
and THANK YOU so much for such encouraging words. You quite made my day!
Cally :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author What I like about your romance you write like the poets of old with your archaic words (not easy to do and make them sound good) like you did
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
|
Hello author What I like about your romance you write like the poets of old with your archaic words (not easy to do and make them sound good) like you did
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-May-2014
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
-
It's funny you say that, because I have always wanted to do that, but found it really hard! This just spilled out... well, except for the ending, which took some tweaking!
Thank you for your very encouraging review :)
-
You are welcome
Comment from LIJ Red
In the contest I am supposed to compete with that? No fair. You cheated somehow. I have no chance. That is heartrendingly good.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
|
In the contest I am supposed to compete with that? No fair. You cheated somehow. I have no chance. That is heartrendingly good.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-May-2014
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
-
Thank you!
...I think?
...well, you did call me a cheater! LOL
So glad it touched you. I hoped it would. I was just editing a couple of lines when you reviewed. You know when you're just not happy with a certain bit!! All sorted now though, and I'm off to bed because it is 12.10am over here in Blighty. Good night and thanks again :)
