Comment from A Jesterstear

Exceptional

Great poem Cally... You won the competition and no six!!!
Congratulations. You would have had my vote for this poem... definitely the best... but I have been in Ireland the last couple of weeks so I am playing catch-up. Keep up the good work. AJ.

 Comment Written 19-May-2014

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reply by the author on 28-May-2014

Hi again AJ,
and again, thanks for your support and encouragement. I am touched :)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This is a stunning tribute to a parted loved one. This poem keeps the subject positive while alluding to the trials that people face together. Nicely displayed and presented.

 Comment Written 10-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thank you so much for your kind review, Bill Schott. I appreciate it :)
To be honest though, I feel like a bit of a fraud! This poem is not about a real lost love, it was written as a response to the contest brief. (Hence the great rhyming of "peace" and "Mellise!")
FS makes fakes of us all! LOL
...but also improves our creativity! :)
Thanks again ~ Cally

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem, and a great entry for the contest, mystery writer! Had I a sixer left to give, it would have your name on it for this lovely write! I loved it!

"and paints my world in swathes of colour
to cover the dark, the dank, and the duller ... brilliant!

Best wishes for the contest. This one should fare very well!

Connie

 Comment Written 10-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Hi Connie,
and thank you so much for such an enthusiastic review! (And for the wish for a six!) (And for your kind luck wishes!) You really cheered me up!
...and it did come joint top, so that was an added bonus!
Thanks again ~ Cally :)))

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

You paint a lovely picture of a lost love that though may be gone you mesmerize over the things that brought you's together
with much happiness.
Some areas of alliteration: deepest doubt, blossom, and bloom
dark, the dank, and the duller
Charlene

 Comment Written 09-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Hi Charlene,
and THANK YOU so much for your encouraging review!
To be honest, I feel like a bit of a fraud now... this poem was not about a real lost love, it was written as a response to the contest brief. (Hence the great rhyming of "peace" and "Mellise!") FS makes fakes of us all! LOL
But also improves our creativity :)
Thanks again ~ Cally

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

OMG what a touching poem this is...every word speaks of your love for Mellise...so very well written and the picture is beautiful...a wonderful tribute to your love...

 Comment Written 09-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Oh dear! I feel like a bit of a fraud now... this poem is not about a real lost love, it was written as a response to the contest brief. (Hence the great rhyming of "peace" and "Mellise!")
Thank you so much for your very encouraging review, and I hope the "great reveal" doesn't take anything away from the poem for you! LOL
Thanks again ~ Cally :)

reply by l.raven on 15-May-2014

Hi Cally no it doesn't...still loved it...luff

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Wow! So much impact with this as it evolves and realize she's buried in where he placed the heart of flowers, which is perfect for this piece.

Grrrrr, wish I had a six, but I've used them all!

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 09-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Hi Jax,
and thank you so much for such an enthusiastic review, and for the wish-for-a-six! I greatly appreciate it, and I'm glad you liked it :)
Cally

Comment from DDLacy

Excellent

Beautifully written! A descriptive sentiment of love of a departed loved one. Reflective and beautiful reveries of what once was and now "She" dwells in her resting place. Best wishes with your "love poem"!

 Comment Written 09-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thank you so much for your wonderfully encouraging review, and for the luck wishes too :)
Greatly appreciated ~ Cally :)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This is beautiful.......good answer to the prompt to write a love poem with no love words...you use mackerel and stat and still wrote a love poem...
I love the seeds sown.........beautiful
God bless

 Comment Written 09-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

...Yes, I think you are right about the "mackerel and sprat!" Ha ha! Hadn't realised that! LOL
Thank you for your kind review ~ Cally :)

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

she, indeed that's a very beautiful expressed story poem, very nice rhyming and flow. I enjoyed reading it,good luck at the contest.God bless you. Lakeport.

 Comment Written 09-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Thank you for your encouraging and supportive review, Lakeport.
Much appreciated ~ Cally :)

reply by lakeport on 15-May-2014

your welcome.lakeport,

Comment from JavaJunkie

Excellent

Very nicely done and I didn't see any no-no words:) I really enjoyed reading this and I like your metaphors. I think the lines flow smoothly and I love the line:where fashions are in, just before they are out
and coldest

 Comment Written 09-May-2014

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reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Hi Javajunkie,
...and what a cool moniker, btw! (Is it to do with computer lingo, or something else?)
Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate it.
...And that is my fave line too! It was one of those ones that just jumped into my head, and I was quite shocked when it came out! LOL
Thanks again ~ Cally :)

reply by JavaJunkie on 15-May-2014

Funny...I never thought about Java script....it's a reference to my coffee habit:)

reply by the author on 15-May-2014

Ahh!
...or rather, Ooh!
:)