Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. Some parents know before they want to admit. Society does not leave much choice for the parents. Keep the id out of trouble until he gets of age. Then leave him out on his own. Great work.

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks. Yes, it is a tragic reality, especially when peer pressure gets to kids and the parents aren't there to supervise.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hello mystery writer,

You've managed to tell a sobering tale in a mere one hundred words.

I'm impressed!

Best wishes for the contest. Have a great rest of the week!

Sonali



fed him two Tylenols (no apostrophe required)

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks so much.

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is well written and interesting. Unfortunately it happens too often to teenagers in todays world. You took a creative approach to the prompt.

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks so much.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Good 100 Word Story. That's a terrible subject. I hope it is not a true story. Drug stories are that way... aren't they? You managed to work all the required words in too. Creative story. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

I sincerely tha you for the read.

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

Tells an interesting story within the required word count and using all the words, not an easy thing to do. Well written and should do well in the contest! Good luck!

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

thanks for reading.

Comment from Rosalyne

Excellent

Hi,
This is a great story and well-written. Sadly, this is the case with some, and nothing a parent can do to change. You used the prompts well. Best of luck in the contest.
Bye
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks very much for reading.

Comment from AnncFl

Good

Clever story, dear author., A nice surprise ending and it follows all the contents requirements. Good job, and press on with your writing

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks.

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

This is a sad and poignant flash with a really sad connection to life for so many families in modern society. You've included the key words very skilfully and I must admit I never saw the ending coming although it was only 100 words or so away.

 Comment Written 08-May-2014

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reply by the author on 08-May-2014

Thanks so much.

Comment from Pegcook

Excellent

A well-written story with a tragic end. Even though it is fiction, it probably touches the truth of many lives. All of the required words were in the story. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

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reply by the author on 07-May-2014

Thank, I appreciate the read.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This is a solid story that introduces a concept "You'll grow up to be a bum." and pops it back in at the end to make this a nicely written short tale.

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

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reply by the author on 07-May-2014

Thanks very much.