Comment from Lulube

Excellent

Love the way you printed this poem. Makes me think of the plaques that are "Home Sweet Home". This is definitely a home plaque for you. You say it all so simple and sweetly, anyone who does not know you here, gets a great image of you and your family ways. Heartfelt with no gloating, plainly saying you love where and who your family is.

good luck in contest.

lulube

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

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reply by the author on 07-May-2014

Hi lulube, hope you are well :)
Thank you for your lovely review, you made my day!
Love debs x

reply by Lulube on 08-May-2014

welcome Debra

sent you some pics
lots
skunk cabbage

lulube

Comment from the blue pixel

Excellent

Hi Debra. The rispetto is one of my favourite forms. I just love it and this one from you is very sweet and the content works well with this form. I found lines 3 and 4 in your first stanza a little jerky due to a couple of your word choices. Having syllable counts perfectly correct, which yours of course, are, does not guarantee that lines will read as smoothly as they could. I hope you don't mind my critiquing your poem in a totally honest way but I don't see much point in giving you my opinion. Otherwise, it read beautifully and the form was spot on. Best of luck to you in the writing prompt. xx Carol

 Comment Written 07-May-2014

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reply by the author on 07-May-2014

Hi Carol :) Thank you for your honest critique - of course I don't mind, I really appreciate it :) Kindest regards as always, Debra :) x

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

My home-sweet-home ain't all that grand,
nor half as pretty as I'd planned,

Always a sign that you live in a home. . .not a house :-)
I've always thought those "magazine perfect" houses were either cold and lonely, or fantasy visions - impossible to actually live in :-)

Very nice submission :-)

 Comment Written 05-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

I totally agree Lorraine! I stopped buying those magazines because they're just not realistic (to the likes of me, anyway!) just had our house extended so we're in the middle of decorating the whole lot. It's slow going and with 3 kids I'm going for practical over beautiful! It's home though :) thanks for your feedback, debs x

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your chosen words and images allow the reader to see and feel what home is to you
it is what you have and what you make with what you have filled with love that counts to you
me too

cheers Smoothiecool

have a blessed day

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

Hi SC, thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. Much appreciated as always, kind regards, Debra :)

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Debra - Thanks for sponsoring this great contest - and for not making it "blind" LOL! Nicely written quatrains. I enjoyed how you switched from the abab rhyme scheme in the first quatrain to the ccdd rhyme in the second. You've got some excellent entries. Congrats, and good luck! Sue

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

Hi sue, thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Glad you enjoyed the prompt and think it's nice to be able to notify your fans of any new work, wether it's for a contest or not! :) kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Debra, I like your changing format from the first verse to the second verse it shows that sheer versatility is very resourceful. And I truly love your excellent piece of poetry writing on your home and what it means to you especially. The picture is self describing and really promotes and complements your poem very much. Good luck in the contest or prompt. Thank you for sharing and posting this for others and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

Hi Alex :) thank you for your great feedback and good luck wishes, I appreciate both. Kindest regards as always, Debra :)

reply by krys123 on 05-May-2014

You are so sincerely welcome Debra.

reply by krys123 on 05-May-2014

You are so sincerely welcome Debra.

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Very simple and loving sentiments of your home and family, Debs.

What else could anyone possibly want?

Good luck and best wishes, Ted.

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

Thanks for your comments and good luck wishes ted, I appreciate it! Debs x

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Debra, Your poem is sweet and shows appreciation for life with your family, which obviously comes first. Your author notes are an excellent example of your talents. Carole

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

Thank you Carole for your lovely feedback, kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very sweet poem and your words are so moving, but home is where my family all live together happily, no matter what even living simple can bring happiness well done

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

Thank you for your lovely feedback, kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from Imogen JH

Excellent

I like this style of poem. I like your subject as well. It has a homely feel throughout. I particularly love the second verse. That really does have a contented feel.

 Comment Written 04-May-2014

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reply by the author on 05-May-2014

Thanks Imogen :) glad you liked it! Debs