National Poetry Month
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Why not Peace?"Thirty poems in Thirty Days
16 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Debbie, this is a strong commentary on the state of our democracy. I cannot wrap my mind around just how fast things are degrading to just plain evil. Good rhyme and meter with a strong social commentary. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Debbie, this is a strong commentary on the state of our democracy. I cannot wrap my mind around just how fast things are degrading to just plain evil. Good rhyme and meter with a strong social commentary. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Sad, isn't it. Thank you for your thoughtful review, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Debbie, you are certainly on the right track in this write and you have done it so beautifully. I have been thinking and proclaiming for years that the only evil in this world is what people do to other people. You have expressed this theme so thoughtfully and beautifully written. This to me is a Masterpiece. Thanks for sharing with your friend. Bob
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Debbie, you are certainly on the right track in this write and you have done it so beautifully. I have been thinking and proclaiming for years that the only evil in this world is what people do to other people. You have expressed this theme so thoughtfully and beautifully written. This to me is a Masterpiece. Thanks for sharing with your friend. Bob
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you again my friend. Sad what we do to each other isn't it. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Dear Debbie, this is a powerful write for your NPM book. I couldn't agree more. If more people and governments would look to their own affairs, instead of the affairs of others, there would not be so many wars.
Well done, only a few poems left. Love, Carolyn
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Dear Debbie, this is a powerful write for your NPM book. I couldn't agree more. If more people and governments would look to their own affairs, instead of the affairs of others, there would not be so many wars.
Well done, only a few poems left. Love, Carolyn
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from adewpearl
48 children in one weekend?? How horrific
solid rhyming couplets
good use of enjambment
good alliteration in damage discrimination
and in strengthening society
effective use of question in your closing to draw the reader in to this poem of compelling social commentary
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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48 children in one weekend?? How horrific
solid rhyming couplets
good use of enjambment
good alliteration in damage discrimination
and in strengthening society
effective use of question in your closing to draw the reader in to this poem of compelling social commentary
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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I was absolutely horrified when I heard that, so sad and senseless. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from mumsyone
If we spent as much time strengthening society
And making the care of others our priority
As we do in building up our military
We could inhabit a world of solidarity
So true, Debbie. If people spent half as much time being constructive rather than destructive, the world would be a much better place.
Good poem, with good rhyme and meter and an excellent message.
Hug,
Lois
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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If we spent as much time strengthening society
And making the care of others our priority
As we do in building up our military
We could inhabit a world of solidarity
So true, Debbie. If people spent half as much time being constructive rather than destructive, the world would be a much better place.
Good poem, with good rhyme and meter and an excellent message.
Hug,
Lois
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you, my friend. Hugs~Debbie
Comment from krys123
Debbie, I found your philosophical commentary to be very provocative, powerful and stimulating and it showed your resourcefulness and your creativeness and inventiveness.
You handled your topic very well and created a venue of understanding how and why we should give up this violence amongst ourselves and our countries. I found your rhyming to be neither forced, labored or strained in your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Debbie, I found your philosophical commentary to be very provocative, powerful and stimulating and it showed your resourcefulness and your creativeness and inventiveness.
You handled your topic very well and created a venue of understanding how and why we should give up this violence amongst ourselves and our countries. I found your rhyming to be neither forced, labored or strained in your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you. Have a blessed day, my friend~Debbie
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You are so sincerely welcome Debbie
Comment from royowen
A brilliantly penned poem, Debbie! 3rd line 1st stanza,'get' should be there! You are dead right, considering others before oneself would be a start! I loved this well written work as a standard that needs to be adopted. The flow, rhyme and and rhythm were great! Well written, well done. Blessings, my friend, Roy.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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A brilliantly penned poem, Debbie! 3rd line 1st stanza,'get' should be there! You are dead right, considering others before oneself would be a start! I loved this well written work as a standard that needs to be adopted. The flow, rhyme and and rhythm were great! Well written, well done. Blessings, my friend, Roy.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Petriesan
Life is odd..the first person the. Ops look at when solving a murder is the victim's loved ones....and religious belief often leads to depravity. Good work
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Life is odd..the first person the. Ops look at when solving a murder is the victim's loved ones....and religious belief often leads to depravity. Good work
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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So very true. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Michaelkent
A ryming message of hopefull peace. It does what a poem should do. Your words should bring needed introspection to many. Well penned, the only bump in the read was "To consider how if we cared and tried to along" Poetic license nothwithstanding and I know it had to rhyme with strong but--- it does make a bump in what for the rest is a great little poem.
Michael Kent
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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A ryming message of hopefull peace. It does what a poem should do. Your words should bring needed introspection to many. Well penned, the only bump in the read was "To consider how if we cared and tried to along" Poetic license nothwithstanding and I know it had to rhyme with strong but--- it does make a bump in what for the rest is a great little poem.
Michael Kent
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Oops, I just left out the word "get" before along. It has been fixed. I appreciating you noticing that~Debbie
Comment from Nosha17
How is that possible, people destroying each other like a civil war-how terrible. Your poem conveys a strong message which I totally agree with. Your rhymes and choice of words were great and it was a smooth flow. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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How is that possible, people destroying each other like a civil war-how terrible. Your poem conveys a strong message which I totally agree with. Your rhymes and choice of words were great and it was a smooth flow. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you, my friend. ~Debbie