Comment from the blue pixel

Excellent

I love a limerick and so many people don't really get them right, especially with the site insisting on an exact syllable count. Still, having said that, you have shown that the count can indeed work. This limerick of yours is cheeky and cute and as one of four sisters, (even if I am long in the tooth rather than missing one as in your pic), I really get the sibling rivalry thing between sisters. Love the alliteration in "truth-twisters", "there's threat" and "reproval resistors". I think this is a winner for sure though sadly, merit isn't necessarily the criteria for coming out on top in contests but I wish you the best of luck. x Pix

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Hi Pix :) Thank you for your great feedback! I love limericks....well, well written ones anyway lol! I love the challenge of getting the rhyme and flow just right - I stuck to the syllable count requested by the sponsor with this one, although other limericks I've written have used different counts.
Thanks for the good luck wishes too, I came 3rd in this booth... not too bad!
Loved your comments about being long in the tooth (unlike my daughter with her happy grin!) The girls are really called Rebecca and Katie, although I altered the names in the limerick for the S alliteration in the first line and so as not to reveal myself (blind contest) as I write about the kids a lot.
Thanks again for your lovely review. Debs x

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

I used to write limericks to my girlfriend in high school. One actually made her laugh so loud, she got detention. I wonder where that girl is now? I think limericks are an art form and their fun. Good luck.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you Victor 66 for your comments and good luck wishes :) Kindest regards...

reply by victor 66 on 21-Apr-2014

You are very welcome.

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

you have perfect line and syllable count in each line

your image portrays the message well of the sister's blaming each other and staying strong about it

good rhyme

cheers smoothiecool

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you Smoothiecool for your feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

reply by Smoothiecool on 22-Apr-2014

most welcome..SC

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Hahahaha! Okay, there's an understanding parent if ever there was one. Those two are going to have a hard time trying to put ANYthing over on THIS mom.

What a great limerick - such strong language! I loved it. :)

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you Dawn for your great feedback :) Kindest regards as always...

reply by Dawn Munro on 21-Apr-2014

My pleasure!

Comment from Willowsong

Excellent

Cute little ditty about the mischievous play between two siblings. Meets the contest criteria nicely with an added adorable photo to compliment.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014

Thank you for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...

reply by Willowsong on 21-Apr-2014

You're welcome :-)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Terrific photo, over the top cute :-)
excellent use of alliteration
strong rhyming
I still tease Miranda about what a little liar she was as a child LOL
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Hi Brooke :) Thank you for your great feedback... of course the little liars in the picture aren't named Suzanne and Samantha, but I have to hide my identity! Glad you enjoyed the limerick.... I think all children lie - hope they grow out of it soon! Kindest regards as always...:)

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very well done and cleverly written. The presentation with the great photo is well done, I love your rhymes. This is a perfect entry for the Limerick contest.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Thank you so much Rhyme4U for your wonderful feedback and also for sponsoring the prompt :) Kindest regards...:)

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

I enjoyed your limerick very much! Brings back memories of my childhood and my boys' childhooda. All so true. I loved your rhyming words, in particular "sisters" and "truth-twisters." I am new to FanStory and have written only 3 poems so far. I look forward to trying a limerick. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Hi :) Welcome to Fanstory and thank you so much for reviewing my limerick! I appreciate your feedback :) Kindest regards...

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

I can see the truth jumping out with these cleverly crafted words.
I really like the clever word choices and the amazing way they tell a truth that all parents know-if caught out blame someone else.
A lovely presentation and cheeks image choice.
The syllable count is correct and it certainly is funny.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

He seken58 :) Thank you so much for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from crystal brandon

Excellent

Hi my name is crystal Brandon
i enjoyed reading your poem about sisters it made me think andd realize that I'm lucky too have an halfoldersister in my life.sisters are importanyt role models too each other.i may not lookup too my sister but i still love her .

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 Comment Written 20-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014

Thank you Crystal for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...