Nature's Poetic Voice.
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Summer Fury."A sensory appreciation of nature.
9 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
An excellent picture of some nasty clouds lead you into this well written poem of 5 quatrains with aabb rhyming on tetrameter lines. A portrait of the strom poetically painted with aplomb. Nice alliteration in: swirling sky, smothered summer sun, tickle tease, soon shake, whilst wind within wake, and this the time that. Tha pours/ pause rhyme could be better,. The line with the W allit is outstanding.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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An excellent picture of some nasty clouds lead you into this well written poem of 5 quatrains with aabb rhyming on tetrameter lines. A portrait of the strom poetically painted with aplomb. Nice alliteration in: swirling sky, smothered summer sun, tickle tease, soon shake, whilst wind within wake, and this the time that. Tha pours/ pause rhyme could be better,. The line with the W allit is outstanding.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and generous review and stars.
I took note of the pause/ pours rhyme and changed it.
:-) Shirley
Comment from l.raven
Hi Shirley. It looks like it was a good one...your poem described it perfect...myself I love storms...a great poem and a picture...Luff Linda xoox
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Hi Shirley. It looks like it was a good one...your poem described it perfect...myself I love storms...a great poem and a picture...Luff Linda xoox
Comment Written 20-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2014
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Thank you Linda.
I appreciate your review and stars.
I don't enjoy storms but I am fascinated by the energy and power
Of the sound and light shows created.
I am also terribly aware of the destructive forces at work and the need for
Care.
Comment from Selina Stambi
The leaves on trees dance in the breeze,
Wind begins to tickle and tease,.. love these lines. They are playful, yet convey the import of what's about to take place
Blue sky approaches from the west,
This is the time that I like best .. huge sigh of relief - this is my fave part too!
Fabulous photo, Shirley.
Happy Easter.
Love,
Sonali :) xxx
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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The leaves on trees dance in the breeze,
Wind begins to tickle and tease,.. love these lines. They are playful, yet convey the import of what's about to take place
Blue sky approaches from the west,
This is the time that I like best .. huge sigh of relief - this is my fave part too!
Fabulous photo, Shirley.
Happy Easter.
Love,
Sonali :) xxx
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much Sonali.
Your generous review and comments are much appreciated.
Happy Eafter to you also.
:-) Shirley
Comment from adewpearl
lightening flashes - lightning
good use of strong verbs to add dramatic effect
solid use of rhyming couplets
nice pairing of summer sun
good alliteration in tickle and tease
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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lightening flashes - lightning
good use of strong verbs to add dramatic effect
solid use of rhyming couplets
nice pairing of summer sun
good alliteration in tickle and tease
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal
Brooke
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you Brooke.
I appreciate your time and generous review.
Thanks for finding the typo.
The Tab 2 I am using auto corrects but also inserts all sorts of things.
Happy Easter.
:-) Shirley.
Comment from krys123
Shirley, I found your poem to be very excellently written and robust and read ruminative as an inspiration goes. I found your rhymes to be neither forced, labored or strained in your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem which made it easy for me to read your poem correctly. The inventiveness of your poem is very stimulating. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Shirley, I found your poem to be very excellently written and robust and read ruminative as an inspiration goes. I found your rhymes to be neither forced, labored or strained in your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem which made it easy for me to read your poem correctly. The inventiveness of your poem is very stimulating. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thank you Alex.
Your time and constant support are much appreciated.
Your kind comments are quite encouraging.
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You are so sincerely welcome.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting poem from the author in this piece of writing. I hope that there aren't too many summer storms to be endured. They say that we will have a hot summer and I hope they are right.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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This is yet another interesting poem from the author in this piece of writing. I hope that there aren't too many summer storms to be endured. They say that we will have a hot summer and I hope they are right.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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This storm came through in our southern summer which has just ended
And we have now entered autumn-another of my favourite seasons.
Thank you for reviewing.
I appreciate your comments.
I hope your northern summer is much better than your winter was.
:-)Shirley
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I hope so too.
Comment from 9999pool
A hailstorm with hail stonres which can be very dangerous if it hits us on th ehead.
The terifying winds and the thunder roar can make us feel threstened even in our own homes.
The dropping of the hail stones can send shivers in our spine.
Soon the harsh weather blows over and the blue sky start to appear.
Calm after the storm is the message from nature.
Great write and well expressed.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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A hailstorm with hail stonres which can be very dangerous if it hits us on th ehead.
The terifying winds and the thunder roar can make us feel threstened even in our own homes.
The dropping of the hail stones can send shivers in our spine.
Soon the harsh weather blows over and the blue sky start to appear.
Calm after the storm is the message from nature.
Great write and well expressed.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you.
I appreciate your review and continued support.
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My pleasure as always. Thank you for your support too, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Sankey
Great poem. Enjoyable reading and very real like I am there.
Thanks very much and the choice of your own picture with it is great as well.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Great poem. Enjoyable reading and very real like I am there.
Thanks very much and the choice of your own picture with it is great as well.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you.
Your support generous review are aappreciated.
Comment from rjuselius
i love, love the imagery! it is breath-taking and yet light-hearted! very well written and well-done!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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i love, love the imagery! it is breath-taking and yet light-hearted! very well written and well-done!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thank you for a lovely review and kind comments.
I appreciate your time.