Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Richard,
"Happiness of the Heart" is a free verse poem that catches me with its rhythm and its message of never giving up hope even when caught up in the toils of a heroin habit. It has good figurative language and imagery (caught in Satan's sleigh).
Preston

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014

Thanks Sir. Preston for your review.
There will be 13 Heart Poems {according to degrees of pain} to come today on my first posting that will amaze all!
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Comment from jason381202

Needs Improvement

I think the author is pushing to hard. The over all effect is scatter brained and disorienting. I think he would do well to read other more well established free form poetry such as "howl" "preface to a twenty volume suicide note" or the "waste land".

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014

Well Thanks, lets return your favor Mr. J!
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reply by jason381202 on 17-Apr-2014

I'm just trying to give my honest opinion. I'm sorry that you don't appreciate my critique. I may not have anything written on this sight. Truth is I'm broke and can't afford to be a full member. Let me say this. I'm a very well read individual who enjoys literature both current and historic. I've read massive amounts of poetry from Shakespeare to Ginsburg to the spoken word poets of today like Shane Koyczan. What I said about your piece is just my opinion as a fan of poetry.

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014

No problem.
We are all go trough stages of immediate discontant but this is my family here and almost every one feels the same when reviewing.
My pain was meant for the children who write here.
Thanks,
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Comment from nicholsjen

Good

Calmly bring the reader in, then surprise them. Happiness should be happy. There are several misspelled words,but a lot
of passion will lead to exception if you work on these suggestions.Some words should not be capitalized,ex.me. Keep trying the artistry is there.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Well thanks for the tips but grammar is not me forte. It's writing abilities that count.
I'm on my 106th book this year.
Howz about you?
Keep trying!
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reply by nicholsjen on 16-Apr-2014

Just giving feedback, you'll hear my name in the news soon don't worry it is coming. It's great to hear your successful though.