Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Could not get sweeter or lighter than this.
a lovely light hearted poem filled with loving emotions
Solid abcb rhymes
good alliteration -carnival/ kaleidoscope

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks for the encouraging review, cheers Judester

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Love is so carefree and fun when you pen it, Judester. Particularly the last stanza -- more particularly the next to the last line, "I dust off the glitter when I kiss you goodnight." That seems to sum up the entire poem.

Great job.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014

Thanks for the encouraging review. It was fun to write, cheers

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good use of abcb rhyming
effective list of things the speaker loves
good alliteration in carnival kaleidoscope
a love poem that is suitably upbeat and sweet for this contest
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thank you for the wonderful review Brooke, it was fun to write, cheers.

Comment from Pegcook

Excellent

Nice, sweet and light. Comparing love to a carnival and circus, a parade in the sunshine, kaleidoscope lights... its all there. The rhythm and rhymes are easy to navigate when this poem is read aloud. Colorful love!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review, it was fun to write.

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. Life can be like a carnival. There are a lot of wonderful rides you can. There are a lot of games with wonderful prizes you can win. Love can make life much better. Great work. Good luck with the contest

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review, it was fun to write.

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

Your poem is like a fun carnival ride with love. The rhythm is a little inconsistent, but otherwise this is a perfect sweet, light poem. Excellent contest entry. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review, cheers

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

A very uplifting love poem with beautiful rhymes and flow. How delightful - those:

Our love is a carnival
with music and lights.
I dust off the glitter
as I kiss you goodnight.

Incredible visuals, full of light, it really is a very optimistic look on love.

One meter suggestion:

A parade in the sunshine,
a birthday surprise!
Those Christmas mornings -
a pastel sunrise.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks for the wonderful review. I just changed music to kaleidoscope lights. better I think, cheers

Comment from rouskin

Excellent

Nice contest entry Love can sometimes be magic. But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion. Best of luck and be blessed

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Yeah, my life is a house of mirrors.Thanks for the review, cheers

Comment from debhuitt

Excellent

This was, for sure, a light and sweet poem. It described how you feel about love and it's splendor. I really liked the rhythm of your poem. It had a good flow to the verse. Well done piece.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014

Thanks for the review. I just changed music to kaleidoscope lights, I think it is better, cheers

reply by debhuitt on 16-Apr-2014

Kind of like kaleidoscope eyes. A phrase in an old old song. I like the word kaleidoscope. I think I'll remember that one.