The harvest
flash fiction 100 words7 total reviews
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the story. My mother grew up with a hobo symbol in the yard. It was very unpopular to fee to hobos. A lot of people were afraid of them. But the hobos did very little crime. There were only women in my mother's house. The women hired the men to work for a couple of days. They fed the men and let them sleep in the barn. The hobos tried to return favors whenever they could. Great work.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I love the picture. I love the story. My mother grew up with a hobo symbol in the yard. It was very unpopular to fee to hobos. A lot of people were afraid of them. But the hobos did very little crime. There were only women in my mother's house. The women hired the men to work for a couple of days. They fed the men and let them sleep in the barn. The hobos tried to return favors whenever they could. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the great review, so I guess that you really 'got' this one, cheers J
Comment from Pegcook
Tender, that's the word I use to describe this 100 word story. Everything is present in it that is needed to create a story. Nice Work!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Tender, that's the word I use to describe this 100 word story. Everything is present in it that is needed to create a story. Nice Work!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the nice review Pegcook
Comment from Bill Schott
This is an upbeat story that smacks of reality and the times our families lived through. You have a couple of problem verbs that suffer from tense shift:
...a group of men come through.
They began to harvest.
Happy days!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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This is an upbeat story that smacks of reality and the times our families lived through. You have a couple of problem verbs that suffer from tense shift:
...a group of men come through.
They began to harvest.
Happy days!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the review, I'm fixing that now, cheers
Comment from Leineco
What a wonderful tale of cause and effect :-)
In the required 100 words, you have told a story
of biblical proportion. . ."Do unto others
as you would have them do unto you"
Great approach to the flash fiction prompt :-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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What a wonderful tale of cause and effect :-)
In the required 100 words, you have told a story
of biblical proportion. . ."Do unto others
as you would have them do unto you"
Great approach to the flash fiction prompt :-)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful review, J
Comment from JBCaine
Author X-
Nicely done. Great story, start to finish.
There is a tense change here- "Suddenly, she heard the gate and watched a group of men came through. They begin to harvest." I would use "began"...-
Good story.
Best to you in the contest.
JBCaine
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Author X-
Nicely done. Great story, start to finish.
There is a tense change here- "Suddenly, she heard the gate and watched a group of men came through. They begin to harvest." I would use "began"...-
Good story.
Best to you in the contest.
JBCaine
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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You are right, thanks for the review, J
Comment from Cajungirl
You managed to write a complete story in only 100 words. Your story contained a main character,Jenny; the setting a pumpkin patch; the conflict was no money for harvest; the hobos help was the resolution.
A very touching story. Good luck in the contest. Great picture.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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You managed to write a complete story in only 100 words. Your story contained a main character,Jenny; the setting a pumpkin patch; the conflict was no money for harvest; the hobos help was the resolution.
A very touching story. Good luck in the contest. Great picture.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful review, cajungirl
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I really enjoyed this story because both Jenny and the hobos showed their appreciation for one another. Jenny, by allowing the hobos to help with the harvest in exchange for a good meal. And the hobos, by carving a welcome sign to shoe their gratitude for her caring kindness.
A wonderfully uplifting tale.
Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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I really enjoyed this story because both Jenny and the hobos showed their appreciation for one another. Jenny, by allowing the hobos to help with the harvest in exchange for a good meal. And the hobos, by carving a welcome sign to shoe their gratitude for her caring kindness.
A wonderfully uplifting tale.
Well done!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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The carved hobo sign had been there for years and thats how they knew they could alwayscome for food from Jenny's mom.They heard through the 'hobo grapevine' that this farm needed help with harvest. Thanks for the wonderful review
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You're very welcome, it was a great story.