Tiny Terrors
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "So Sorry I Missed You, Dear..."A collection of short horror fiction
42 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
This is hysterical and I just love it. I can see why it won the contest too. What do you mean "you never win"? You seem to be doing quite well, as far as I can tell. Great work with this one, as always and a terrific entry for the book too.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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This is hysterical and I just love it. I can see why it won the contest too. What do you mean "you never win"? You seem to be doing quite well, as far as I can tell. Great work with this one, as always and a terrific entry for the book too.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Well, it seems that way sometimes, especially during those three, four month long dry spells, LOL. This was one of my earlier posts I think, Sasha, when I first arrived here at FS.Seems like eons ago.
Thanks so much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed this one! :) ~Dean
Comment from livelylinda
Dean: nice touch, that gunshot at the very beginning. Scared my inefficient heart and made it miss at least three beats! Original, clever use of the words "missed you". I chuckled through half of it. Another good one. Linda
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Dean: nice touch, that gunshot at the very beginning. Scared my inefficient heart and made it miss at least three beats! Original, clever use of the words "missed you". I chuckled through half of it. Another good one. Linda
Comment Written 26-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Hey, thanks, Linda. More of an irony piece than horror, I suppose. Still, it's pretty horrifying to think someone took a shot at you and missed without you even knowing it, right?
Sorry about the gunshot thing. It did get your heart pumping though...right? Heh-heh-heh...<'i> ~Dean
Comment from Mike Battaglia
Sir... You are a machine. I went to your portfolio to see how much I've missed, and dear lord... I am way behind! I feel like a kid on Christmas with all kinds of presents under the tree...
A brilliant piece of flash fiction, sir. You've managed to encapsulate both horror and humor in this short flash fiction piece, and honestly, I expect nothing less from you now. We sometimes take for granted how difficult it is to write an entire story in 100 words or less, let alone giving the reader everything they want within those 100 words. But you do it as if you were born to do it, sir. I am only giving you five because I have limited six stars, and I have much more to read still, but you can rest assured that this deserves a six. I love a 100 word challenge as much as you do, sir, and it give me great pleasure to see you relish in it so...
Loved it, Mr. Kuch sir
--Mike
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Sir... You are a machine. I went to your portfolio to see how much I've missed, and dear lord... I am way behind! I feel like a kid on Christmas with all kinds of presents under the tree...
A brilliant piece of flash fiction, sir. You've managed to encapsulate both horror and humor in this short flash fiction piece, and honestly, I expect nothing less from you now. We sometimes take for granted how difficult it is to write an entire story in 100 words or less, let alone giving the reader everything they want within those 100 words. But you do it as if you were born to do it, sir. I am only giving you five because I have limited six stars, and I have much more to read still, but you can rest assured that this deserves a six. I love a 100 word challenge as much as you do, sir, and it give me great pleasure to see you relish in it so...
Loved it, Mr. Kuch sir
--Mike
Comment Written 13-May-2014
Comment from Hatch1515
I couldn't help back chuckle the entire time. I truly could see this entire, ongoing story of a man who had known about his wife's affair. Finally, he had enough and decided to take matters into his own hands. I'm feel bad for Harold, both in the affair and not executing in his mission. Well done, my friend. It was a great joy of mine. Thank you.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I couldn't help back chuckle the entire time. I truly could see this entire, ongoing story of a man who had known about his wife's affair. Finally, he had enough and decided to take matters into his own hands. I'm feel bad for Harold, both in the affair and not executing in his mission. Well done, my friend. It was a great joy of mine. Thank you.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Hah ha, thank a bunch, Hatch. I'm really glad you liked this crazy short story. I certainly appreciate your feedback and most generous rating, my friend!
Comment from wordsmatter2me
Amazing your story reminds me of lately what is reported on the News about passions of crime from a cheating spouse and the time spent in jail. I like that you write about this real life issue of divorce. Absolutely a story I will remember.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Amazing your story reminds me of lately what is reported on the News about passions of crime from a cheating spouse and the time spent in jail. I like that you write about this real life issue of divorce. Absolutely a story I will remember.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thanks, wordsmatter2me, I really appreciate it!
Comment from ArtGal
I'm reviewing as much as I can, and just came across this. My my, lol, you sure do like the unexpected with a definite twist, actually a bit scary, lol. I was on your home page to leave a message, but forgot how to do it because I've been gone too long! So will say it here. I just saw the beginning of the tv series called Resurrection, I believe. It's where a man comes back to life after 15 yrs. I thought of you right away because of how you write. You might want to see a few of these to give you some ideas. Just another possibility, but, please keep reading the Bible because you never know when satan wants to snatch you to stay in the horror of this life of ours, lol. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I'm reviewing as much as I can, and just came across this. My my, lol, you sure do like the unexpected with a definite twist, actually a bit scary, lol. I was on your home page to leave a message, but forgot how to do it because I've been gone too long! So will say it here. I just saw the beginning of the tv series called Resurrection, I believe. It's where a man comes back to life after 15 yrs. I thought of you right away because of how you write. You might want to see a few of these to give you some ideas. Just another possibility, but, please keep reading the Bible because you never know when satan wants to snatch you to stay in the horror of this life of ours, lol. . .Sharon
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Sharon, I'm happy to know you dropped in on me!
I do read my Bible, every day without fail. Today, I am in the Book of Job.
I also watch resurrection. It's a pretty good show.
Comment from brentman99
A nice effort. You must have come up with this around the same time as the witty obituary. How fitting. Well done and thanks for sharing, Brent.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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A nice effort. You must have come up with this around the same time as the witty obituary. How fitting. Well done and thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Brent, I'm glad you liked it.
Actually, I didn't know anything about the witty epitaph when I wrote this, although, I wish I had, I really have fun with those!
Thanks again, my friend.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, that is such a brilliant story of 100 words. I can see why you won. I will have to fan you, (become a fan, not fan you, as in with a fan... :) Sorry. LOL. I don't want to miss any more. Love this one. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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LOL, that is such a brilliant story of 100 words. I can see why you won. I will have to fan you, (become a fan, not fan you, as in with a fan... :) Sorry. LOL. I don't want to miss any more. Love this one. xsx sandra
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Hah ha, thank you, Sandra, I'm really glad you liked it, and caught the dark humor in it. I think some might have felt I took this a bit too seriously, lol. But, it was all done in the spirit of fun.
I'd be honored to have you as a fan. I'm a big fan of your work as well!
Thanks again.
Comment from mfowler
Well done Dean. Amazing what you can do with a hundred words. You set up a relationship of sorts, explore an assassination attempt, show the aftermath, plus we get an insight into the wife's hobbies. Clever idea, well executed. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Well done Dean. Amazing what you can do with a hundred words. You set up a relationship of sorts, explore an assassination attempt, show the aftermath, plus we get an insight into the wife's hobbies. Clever idea, well executed. Congratulations.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Mark. It's a lot harder than it sounds, right? Setting, conflict, resolution and conclusion...in one-hundred words or less? I'm just happy I was able to pull it off, lol!
Thanks again for the excellent review.
Comment from RodG
Ah, Dean, this swiftie most deservedly won the prize!
I really like how you're able to tell the story in two quick scenes.
A great double-meaning concluding sentence!
A fun read! Rod
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Ah, Dean, this swiftie most deservedly won the prize!
I really like how you're able to tell the story in two quick scenes.
A great double-meaning concluding sentence!
A fun read! Rod
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Rod. I'm really glad you liked it. I appreciate your kind comments, my friend!