The Chronos Bug
Some demons aren't Hell spawn. They're man-made....55 total reviews
Comment from Macsween
Excellent. Great start to your new novella. This is interesting, entertaining and very gruesome- I loved it. Very we'll written and I can't see anything that needs changing. I am looking forward to the next instalment.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Excellent. Great start to your new novella. This is interesting, entertaining and very gruesome- I loved it. Very we'll written and I can't see anything that needs changing. I am looking forward to the next instalment.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Well, thank you very much, McSween. The fact that you feel it needs no changes is a good thing, my friend, and I certainly appreciate your kind comments and review!
Comment from forestport12
Owe. Scares me more because there are parasites and you describe in such detail. Reading your notes on the pissing in the stream, I grabbed my crotch. Uggh! That's why I would rather try to survive in a blizzard and not the tropics! Remember when the Ebola virus was very real and flesh would bleed out from every orifice?
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Owe. Scares me more because there are parasites and you describe in such detail. Reading your notes on the pissing in the stream, I grabbed my crotch. Uggh! That's why I would rather try to survive in a blizzard and not the tropics! Remember when the Ebola virus was very real and flesh would bleed out from every orifice?
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Hah, yeah, this story will probably have a greater impact on men, simply because of that fact. But, as long as it impacts someone, and terrifies them, then I am happy so far.
Thanks, Stan, and I will be getting to your latest chapter very shortly.
Comment from Michaelk
Brilliant! I haven't been this hooked since 'The Stand'. You expertly hooked your readers, then built tension in your narrative until I am panting at the bit for the next chapter. I saw no SPAG, and have no issues with the storyline. Bring on the next chapter. :)
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Brilliant! I haven't been this hooked since 'The Stand'. You expertly hooked your readers, then built tension in your narrative until I am panting at the bit for the next chapter. I saw no SPAG, and have no issues with the storyline. Bring on the next chapter. :)
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Oh, you've made my day, Michaelk. Anytime a fellow reader makes a reference to a Stephen King novel, and my own work, I smile from ear to ear, as I am right now. To me, he is the epitome of horror in the written word, whose work I admire. I will always aspire to generate the same intense levels of character development and story telling that Mr. King achieves. And while I might fall short, or miss the mark sometimes, trying to be the best is the least i can offer my readers, where horror is concerned.
Thanks so much for your awesome review, my friend!
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I too aspire to be as intense in my writing as Mr. King. My favorite of his axioms (which I often use) is 'Kill your darlings'.
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Hah, yep, that's a good one!
Comment from Alan K Pease
I have heard of this catfish before and know the fate of those affected from descriptions of its size and activities from National Geographic. Your account strikes me in odd places on my own physique and terror it can inspire. It is a gruesome story in expertly phrased passages and notes.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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I have heard of this catfish before and know the fate of those affected from descriptions of its size and activities from National Geographic. Your account strikes me in odd places on my own physique and terror it can inspire. It is a gruesome story in expertly phrased passages and notes.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thanks very much, Alan. I truly appreciate you catching and reviewing the prologue to this one. Much obliged!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
How could we not follow along after reading the first chapter. That is the most ghoulish page I've ever read. I will have to read it all now. And, I will never, ever swim in any lake, stream or river ever again! Excellent first page, Dean. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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How could we not follow along after reading the first chapter. That is the most ghoulish page I've ever read. I will have to read it all now. And, I will never, ever swim in any lake, stream or river ever again! Excellent first page, Dean. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Ha ha, thanks, Sandra. I really appreciate your outstanding review! I'm very happy and pleased to know that you will be following along with this story.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Wow..this is a really interesting story.. I'm gonna follow this novella..and see what happens.. Amazing..I love the way you describe other-wise horrific and 'beyond-words' type of scenes and situations.. Great Job and God BLess~!
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Wow..this is a really interesting story.. I'm gonna follow this novella..and see what happens.. Amazing..I love the way you describe other-wise horrific and 'beyond-words' type of scenes and situations.. Great Job and God BLess~!
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thanks very much, Kausar. I would really appreciate you following along, and I'll do my very best not to disappoint you.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Dean, this is more than my sensitive system can take, I'm afraid. I would love to read your work, but I just can't deal with something this horrible. Please understand. I'm a total wimp when it comes to human suffering, especially kids. :(
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Dean, this is more than my sensitive system can take, I'm afraid. I would love to read your work, but I just can't deal with something this horrible. Please understand. I'm a total wimp when it comes to human suffering, especially kids. :(
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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I understand, Phyllis, and this story is so horrifying because it could be true one day. I pray to God that mankind wakes up and stops trying to play God, before it is too late. If it isn't too late already!
Thanks for at least checking in, I do appreciate it.
Comment from Gungalo
Yuckkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk. Some bug indeed Dean. I can imagine the host is very devastated in the end. Your imagination takes off like wildfire.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Yuckkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk. Some bug indeed Dean. I can imagine the host is very devastated in the end. Your imagination takes off like wildfire.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thanks, G, it is a pretty frightening topic, germ warfare I mean. It's one that bothers me deeply. This story has been "bugging" me to let it out of it's cage for quite some time. I decided to just let it out and see what happens.
Thanks for your awesome review. "Yuckkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk" is a great compliment to a horror writer, lol!
Have a super Sunday!
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Smile Dean.
Comment from Andrewajgblue
This is really good, I am never peeing in a river !!! I can't wait for the next chapter it's going to be excellent, you are such a talented writer,
Andrew
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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This is really good, I am never peeing in a river !!! I can't wait for the next chapter it's going to be excellent, you are such a talented writer,
Andrew
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thank you, Andrew, I am happy to know that you think so, at least (LOL). In all seriousness, I'm really grateful for your kind comments.
Comment from elchupakabra
Your title is missing an r. Aside from that, I didn't notice any mistakes. You had me hooked right off the bat by creating a gruesome juxtaposition with the beautiful dawn and melting three year old lol. I think you're doing a great job with this write, and I'm definitely looking forward to reading more. Great work as always, Dean, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Your title is missing an r. Aside from that, I didn't notice any mistakes. You had me hooked right off the bat by creating a gruesome juxtaposition with the beautiful dawn and melting three year old lol. I think you're doing a great job with this write, and I'm definitely looking forward to reading more. Great work as always, Dean, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Oops! Thanks for catching that for me, 'Chup! I spent so much time editing the dang story, I should have looked more closely at the title, lol. You can always rely on me to miss something. But, that's why I have good friends like yourself to point out my stupid mistakes, heh heh. Thanks again for the review, 'Chup.
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Np bud.
