The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Our Retirement and some more trips."Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from CR Delport
It is one thing to read fiction, but a story like this about the lives of real people, can also make for interesting reading. Sometimes real life can also seem like fiction :)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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It is one thing to read fiction, but a story like this about the lives of real people, can also make for interesting reading. Sometimes real life can also seem like fiction :)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2014
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Hi friend thanks for your comments. I am also trying to do some fiction but as another writer/reviewer said , better to get one thing finished at a time. I guess I only diverted to do the odd poem/ song some times hehe. Thanks again for a great review.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good chapter my friend, I truly enjoyed the read. sounds like you and your wife have really been around. A lot has happened in your life. God bless you my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Good chapter my friend, I truly enjoyed the read. sounds like you and your wife have really been around. A lot has happened in your life. God bless you my friend.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks bro appreciate ur review
Comment from Tomes Johnston
You are lucky to live in such a wonderful country. I was there in 1998 and it was one of the best holidays of ny life. The country is so big and there is so much to see and do.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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You are lucky to live in such a wonderful country. I was there in 1998 and it was one of the best holidays of ny life. The country is so big and there is so much to see and do.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Hi bro but there is a great big bit in the middle where there are hardly any occupants hehe! We wish immigrants would habitate more of the space in ur country but they all wanna live on the coast. At least we are 30 miles West of the coast hehe. I made a boo boo about the tea to9wel map as I brought some travels over from the other chapter seeing I set up thisa new post 'retarrment' one ha! Thanks again.
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I don't blame people for wanting to live on the coast. It is beautiful.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have no clue why people needs to play with the clocks. It totally frustrates me. I enjoyed reading your post and didn't see any SPAGS.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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I have no clue why people needs to play with the clocks. It totally frustrates me. I enjoyed reading your post and didn't see any SPAGS.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Hi yeah we hate Daylight saving I messed up talking about the Tea towel map I had brought over some of the old trips chapter that was relevant to our retirement but I forgot about the reference to the tea towel map which is on the previous trip chapter duh. Thanks for the lovely review.
Comment from c_lucas
When members of my family went to see our paternal grandparent's grave, they found the cemetery had been washed away in a flood. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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When members of my family went to see our paternal grandparent's grave, they found the cemetery had been washed away in a flood. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks friend. We took a photo of the green verge where her Gr5t Grt Grandfather and his 2 young children whom had also died had lain.
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You're welcome, Geoff. Charlie
Comment from Gladness
Good for you that you made many trips in spite of disabilities and didn't let them get you down.
Here are a couple of places you might want to do something with:
no cost, whatsoever some of (no cost whatsoever,)
See the Tea towel map in the picture above.
(No map, It's a log hut.)
we missed out on a lot of the wildlife, that comes there, when the lake Floods, every 7-10 years or so
(no need for commas)
to Louise's Dad, when we got home, as well, was the rough William Creek Rd portion, in the Mitsubishi Sedan he was going to buy from us so we could purchase the Station Wagon we still have, now. (to Louise's Dad when we got home, was the)
Thanks for sharing your story,
Anita
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Good for you that you made many trips in spite of disabilities and didn't let them get you down.
Here are a couple of places you might want to do something with:
no cost, whatsoever some of (no cost whatsoever,)
See the Tea towel map in the picture above.
(No map, It's a log hut.)
we missed out on a lot of the wildlife, that comes there, when the lake Floods, every 7-10 years or so
(no need for commas)
to Louise's Dad, when we got home, as well, was the rough William Creek Rd portion, in the Mitsubishi Sedan he was going to buy from us so we could purchase the Station Wagon we still have, now. (to Louise's Dad when we got home, was the)
Thanks for sharing your story,
Anita
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks Anita this portion was transferred from the other Trips chapter that is why I stuffed up about the picture hehe. Will fix if you look at the other trips chapter (Prior to our retirement or as the Rednecks say 'retarrment' haha you will see said tea towel map haha! Will fix appreciate the great review.
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Hi Sis thanks for your help have done your suggested changes and more. Broke up some paragraphs as well. In case you wana look again and thanks.
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Hey did you see Tootsie55 account is open again trying to do reviews over there to build up some funny money. Cost me a lot in Aus$ to get the account up for an other year over there.
Comment from Cin
I love travelling and I've done the trip across the bottom end of Australia a few times now - I'm New South Welshman born and bred - now living in Western Australia - Writing an Autobiography is going to keep you pretty busy and out of trouble I should think :-)
Editing suggestions - but you are under no obligation to use them - writer's prerogative :-)
My wife has always been treated badly (not abusively but well) by her family, our church and her work. It was the same in her section in Penrith ATO. - Contradictory [badly/not abusively/but well] - wasn't quite sure what you meant - might come across better if it is re-worded.
Recently we got a really good deal with our telephone and Internet provider company, which enabled me to call at no cost, whatsoever some of the tourist information centres of the areas we visited, in Western Australia to get, sometimes, kindly, on their part - FOR FREE -- some hatpins from the places we had visited. (See the Tea towel map in the picture above.) - Little bit confusing so I had a go a restructuring it below:
Recently we got a really good deal with our telephone and Internet provider company. This enabled me to call at no cost whatsoever, some of the tourist information centres of the areas we visited in Western Australia. Sometimes, kindly, on their part, we were given - FOR FREE -- some hatpins from the places we had visited (see the Tea towel map in the picture above).
We drove 130 k[l]m - don't need the 'l' when you are using the abbreviated form for kilometres - 'km'
I'm sure you have many other highlights that are commemorative and I look forward to reading them
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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I love travelling and I've done the trip across the bottom end of Australia a few times now - I'm New South Welshman born and bred - now living in Western Australia - Writing an Autobiography is going to keep you pretty busy and out of trouble I should think :-)
Editing suggestions - but you are under no obligation to use them - writer's prerogative :-)
My wife has always been treated badly (not abusively but well) by her family, our church and her work. It was the same in her section in Penrith ATO. - Contradictory [badly/not abusively/but well] - wasn't quite sure what you meant - might come across better if it is re-worded.
Recently we got a really good deal with our telephone and Internet provider company, which enabled me to call at no cost, whatsoever some of the tourist information centres of the areas we visited, in Western Australia to get, sometimes, kindly, on their part - FOR FREE -- some hatpins from the places we had visited. (See the Tea towel map in the picture above.) - Little bit confusing so I had a go a restructuring it below:
Recently we got a really good deal with our telephone and Internet provider company. This enabled me to call at no cost whatsoever, some of the tourist information centres of the areas we visited in Western Australia. Sometimes, kindly, on their part, we were given - FOR FREE -- some hatpins from the places we had visited (see the Tea towel map in the picture above).
We drove 130 k[l]m - don't need the 'l' when you are using the abbreviated form for kilometres - 'km'
I'm sure you have many other highlights that are commemorative and I look forward to reading them
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Hi friend lovely review3 as I said to another reviewer I stuff up on the t4ea towel pic as part of this chapter has been broght over from another trip chapter relating to before our retirement and obvi9ously I missed the ref to the picture. Might get that in here too or change I really appreciate the reviews thanks. Hope you will have a look at the rest of my story. God Bless.
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Hi friend, thanks for your help have done your suggested changes and more. Broke up some paragraphs as well. In case you wana look again and thanks.
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If you still get in here...Hey did you see Tootsie55 account is open again trying to do reviews over there to build up some funny money. Cost me a lot in Aus$ to get the account up for an other year over there.
Comment from royowen
I enjoyed your biographically generated story, I loved reading it, it was quite fascinating, I think we should all bear witness, our lives and testimonies , I enjoyed taking the those journeys with you, they were eventful, I didn't realise all the troubles you've had! Well written Geoff, I enjoyed it! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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I enjoyed your biographically generated story, I loved reading it, it was quite fascinating, I think we should all bear witness, our lives and testimonies , I enjoyed taking the those journeys with you, they were eventful, I didn't realise all the troubles you've had! Well written Geoff, I enjoyed it! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Hi Roy IM messed up on the picture hehe ther tea towel map is on the other trip chapter pre retirement. I had moved some of the post retirement portion to this new chapter duh! Lovely reviewers have picked that up for me. Will fix. Thanks Bro for coming along. Lord Bless.
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You're welcome, friend Geoff
Comment from judiverse
Interesting material in this! You portion about your travels is well presented. You have just enough detail, and your story=telling style is genial and pleasant, just like you were having a chat. In your third paragraph, I wasn't sure what you meant when you said (not abusively but well) after you said your wife had always been treated badly. You might add a sentence when you transition from your jobs and retirement to your travel. Something like having time to travel after you retired, maybe. judi I envy you all the trips you took. We did some traveling when we lived in Massachusetts, but not much since then. judi
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Interesting material in this! You portion about your travels is well presented. You have just enough detail, and your story=telling style is genial and pleasant, just like you were having a chat. In your third paragraph, I wasn't sure what you meant when you said (not abusively but well) after you said your wife had always been treated badly. You might add a sentence when you transition from your jobs and retirement to your travel. Something like having time to travel after you retired, maybe. judi I envy you all the trips you took. We did some traveling when we lived in Massachusetts, but not much since then. judi
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks Sis Appreciate the review. I messed up a bit in a few places. The tea towel I referred to is on the other trip chapter prior to retirement or as the rednecks say 'retarment' hehe. Lots to work on thanks and God Bless.
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You're welcome. judi
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Hi Sis thanks for your help have done your suggested changes and more. Broke up some paragraphs as well. In case you wana look again and thanks.
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You're welcome. Yes, I noticed that one paragraph in particular was especially long. judi
