Hidden Gift
The child within5 total reviews
Comment from Pegcook
Hurrah for this novel concept of an inner child! I love the "grant me juvenile delinquency So that I can raise the roof" "mischievous face" and "Frolicking you run and hide."
The rhymes work well and the rhythm makes for fun, especially when read out loud.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Hurrah for this novel concept of an inner child! I love the "grant me juvenile delinquency So that I can raise the roof" "mischievous face" and "Frolicking you run and hide."
The rhymes work well and the rhythm makes for fun, especially when read out loud.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the nice review
Comment from nelliesellie
The inner child still believes. The adult knows much better, but some times you have to let the inner child do their thing. It may be something a little naughty. You just have to let the child out to play once in a while. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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The inner child still believes. The adult knows much better, but some times you have to let the inner child do their thing. It may be something a little naughty. You just have to let the child out to play once in a while. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2014
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thanks for the kind review
Comment from bard owl
My inner child is playful, too. "Your mischievous face is smiling, I see you there within." May your inner child never die. Excellent tribute. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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My inner child is playful, too. "Your mischievous face is smiling, I see you there within." May your inner child never die. Excellent tribute. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks. I enjoyed your poem as well
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Innocent infant Alliteration empowers intro
Filling a void of dreams use 'a' instead of 'the'
Whisper your childhood secrets
THAT TRANSFORMS ME INTO SOMETHING NEW
Bestow your infancy upon me Great Line!
Unlock the treasures of youth
Grant me juvenile delinquency Funnny!!
Before MY adult WITHIN awakes
Your mischievous face is smiling
I see you there within
Frolicking you run and hide
For it's playtime once again Lovely conclusion
Suggestions only. No disrespect intended. A complex piece that delighted me.
Regards:
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Innocent infant Alliteration empowers intro
Filling a void of dreams use 'a' instead of 'the'
Whisper your childhood secrets
THAT TRANSFORMS ME INTO SOMETHING NEW
Bestow your infancy upon me Great Line!
Unlock the treasures of youth
Grant me juvenile delinquency Funnny!!
Before MY adult WITHIN awakes
Your mischievous face is smiling
I see you there within
Frolicking you run and hide
For it's playtime once again Lovely conclusion
Suggestions only. No disrespect intended. A complex piece that delighted me.
Regards:
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the suggestions, won't say I'll use any, but I'll consider them. Not offended, I'll take a close look and decide.
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Dear Yvon: No problem. Just posted another poem.
Cheers Steve
Comment from kiwijenny
So cute. My son frolics ie runs like a mad thing or skips round the yard, with my 2 year old grandson.....so I guess his inner child is intact. :o)
I would sincerely love to be that child again....maybe in heaven.
God bless...good job
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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So cute. My son frolics ie runs like a mad thing or skips round the yard, with my 2 year old grandson.....so I guess his inner child is intact. :o)
I would sincerely love to be that child again....maybe in heaven.
God bless...good job
Comment Written 12-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thanks, just to imagine that child inside playing can bring back youth. Smile we are all ageless!
