Shadow of Action
Being an ingrate is deadly to one's existence and success65 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think this is an interesting poem. I didn't understand the first line at first. But thought about it. I think you mean polluting? If that's the case the last line must mean that it will crush us? Acid rain? I'm a little confused but enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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I think this is an interesting poem. I didn't understand the first line at first. But thought about it. I think you mean polluting? If that's the case the last line must mean that it will crush us? Acid rain? I'm a little confused but enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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You are right. Polluting our environment is detrimental to our living in the same environment. Thanks for the review
Comment from CR Delport
We as humans tend to take a lot of things for granted. Very seldom to we stop, appreciate, and be grateful for everything around us. This is well written. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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We as humans tend to take a lot of things for granted. Very seldom to we stop, appreciate, and be grateful for everything around us. This is well written. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you for the review
Comment from fafa
Short poem that foreshadows the likely end of mankind if he forgets God Supreme, impressedthat in such a short text s e deployment as well an idea, greetings
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Short poem that foreshadows the likely end of mankind if he forgets God Supreme, impressedthat in such a short text s e deployment as well an idea, greetings
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thank you for the review
Comment from Ben Colder
But society does not care , poet. You did well with this 5-7-5. The syllable count seems to be there , the wording is good. Best to you . Shalom.
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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But society does not care , poet. You did well with this 5-7-5. The syllable count seems to be there , the wording is good. Best to you . Shalom.
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thank You for the review
Comment from Lena Borghi
Profound thoughts expressed in this short write.
Some might find fault with your preposition-verb inversion in the last line, but I find it creative.
Nice work.
Lena
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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Profound thoughts expressed in this short write.
Some might find fault with your preposition-verb inversion in the last line, but I find it creative.
Nice work.
Lena
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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Thank you so much for the review
Comment from Alan K Pease
It seems hard to find a legitimate 5-7-5 poem Haiku or Senryu with the new (or older) formats that have to be considered. Fortunately there are those like you who hold to the 5-7-5 definition and do it well.
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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It seems hard to find a legitimate 5-7-5 poem Haiku or Senryu with the new (or older) formats that have to be considered. Fortunately there are those like you who hold to the 5-7-5 definition and do it well.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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Thank you so much for the review. I appreciate it
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your few words allow the reader to see and feel if we don't stop polluting our earth it is doom to collapse
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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good luck in the contest
your few words allow the reader to see and feel if we don't stop polluting our earth it is doom to collapse
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thanks a million for the review
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most welcome...SC
Comment from bertodi
deeply thought out and well said- are we not all screeching this message and no one listens- no one listens. They say, it is for the next century, what are we leaving for the next century? They will sort it out then I was told time and again! Your effort at some sort of rhyme, however deep the message does you credit..
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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deeply thought out and well said- are we not all screeching this message and no one listens- no one listens. They say, it is for the next century, what are we leaving for the next century? They will sort it out then I was told time and again! Your effort at some sort of rhyme, however deep the message does you credit..
Comment Written 30-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you. I pray a change is effected asap
Comment from c_lucas
One should not forget that Earth and its elements are our home. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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One should not forget that Earth and its elements are our home. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much
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You're welcome.
Comment from words
I appreciate you environmental protest poem.
I do agree.
Our action in the environment do have consequences.
Sometimes, I think we are the most oblivious and self-destructive of creatures. Money really does seem to be our god.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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I appreciate you environmental protest poem.
I do agree.
Our action in the environment do have consequences.
Sometimes, I think we are the most oblivious and self-destructive of creatures. Money really does seem to be our god.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the constructive review