Puppeteer
Lune19 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Santha,
The final line is clever, thoughtful and has deep symbolic overtones.
I admire the adventurous writers who take a leap in experimenting with new forms. I haven't been so venturesome .. thus far!
This is a nice little piece with a definite 'Far Eastern' exotic flavor to it. Hope you win, dear.
Hugs and love,
xxx
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hello Santha,
The final line is clever, thoughtful and has deep symbolic overtones.
I admire the adventurous writers who take a leap in experimenting with new forms. I haven't been so venturesome .. thus far!
This is a nice little piece with a definite 'Far Eastern' exotic flavor to it. Hope you win, dear.
Hugs and love,
xxx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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I don't think this is adventurous on my part .It is easier for me to write and type it into a computer! Thank you very much for your generous words .Love.
Comment from adewpearl
Compelling illustration for your poem, which is in excellent 5/3/5 syllable count for your Lune
good alliteration in your first two lines
effective use of puppet/puppeteer imagery to deliver your message
Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Compelling illustration for your poem, which is in excellent 5/3/5 syllable count for your Lune
good alliteration in your first two lines
effective use of puppet/puppeteer imagery to deliver your message
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much,Brooke.
Comment from MagKing
Puppeteer pulls string the dolls dance tied to their Karma.
I really do not understand this piece.
Mind explaining please?
MagKing
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Puppeteer pulls string the dolls dance tied to their Karma.
I really do not understand this piece.
Mind explaining please?
MagKing
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you for writing and asking. Puppeteer is symbolic of someone who manipulates. It can be God as our standard traditional saying goes(Man proposes,God disposes,etc etc)then we say it is our karma-(destiny-we act according to our destiny).or if anyone is so inclined it can be a human manipulator .then again it is our fate that we are the victims of their manipulations.
Comment from amada
This Lune is very well written. I find a double meaning because some persons know how to manipulate others so well; karma is a good thing.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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This Lune is very well written. I find a double meaning because some persons know how to manipulate others so well; karma is a good thing.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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yes and i am glad you got it.Thank you.
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Sanku
Another excellent Lune. Such a pleasure to read them all. Congratulations on your second placement.
I have enjoyed the alliteration in "Puppeteer/pulls", "dolls/dance", consonance of 't' in "Puppeteer/strings/tied". Your carefully selected words are an excellent complement to your superb image. Great work. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Hi Sanku
Another excellent Lune. Such a pleasure to read them all. Congratulations on your second placement.
I have enjoyed the alliteration in "Puppeteer/pulls", "dolls/dance", consonance of 't' in "Puppeteer/strings/tied". Your carefully selected words are an excellent complement to your superb image. Great work. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and enjoying my lune. Hugs.
Comment from victor 66
My experience with poetry is minimal. But, I am developing a taste for it. And a Lune Poem is interesting. To me, a 'Lune' has to do with contemplation. I certainly liked yours. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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My experience with poetry is minimal. But, I am developing a taste for it. And a Lune Poem is interesting. To me, a 'Lune' has to do with contemplation. I certainly liked yours. Best wishes.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you .yes Lune and similar shorter forms are supposed to convey an idea in condensed form.
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You are welcome.
Comment from paulah60
Interesting subtext here. I read this little lune as a comment on what ultimately awaits those who try and manipulate others to serve their self-interests. You've very cleverly conveyed this, with 'strings' being the operative word. It's quite an art to say so much in so few words.
Well done!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Interesting subtext here. I read this little lune as a comment on what ultimately awaits those who try and manipulate others to serve their self-interests. You've very cleverly conveyed this, with 'strings' being the operative word. It's quite an art to say so much in so few words.
Well done!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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thank you very much. strings are used to pull and the puller also has to pay in one way or another.
Comment from NicciFaye
Wow...I wish I had a six for this poem. The message alone in just few short words is just powerful. "Tied to their karma"....very thought resonating. Definitely worthy of a win. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Wow...I wish I had a six for this poem. The message alone in just few short words is just powerful. "Tied to their karma"....very thought resonating. Definitely worthy of a win. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the wish .your review has made my day.
Comment from Karen B.
A cute lune and I love the metaphor. A strong message you've portrayed in just a few words. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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A cute lune and I love the metaphor. A strong message you've portrayed in just a few words. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from barleygirl
I can't decide whether to think of the puppeteer as God or as we humans, pushing each other's buttons. If God, then it's interesting the use of "Karma" which contrasts (for me) the idea of God. Either way, it is a good depiction of life & provokes the reader to ponder further than the very few words on the page. Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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I can't decide whether to think of the puppeteer as God or as we humans, pushing each other's buttons. If God, then it's interesting the use of "Karma" which contrasts (for me) the idea of God. Either way, it is a good depiction of life & provokes the reader to ponder further than the very few words on the page. Thanks for sharing & good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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You can take it either way .Traditionally it is God that we blame (man proposes and God dispose)But our actions too are responsible for the way God pulls their string.Thank you very much for reading.