Geoffrey's Musings.
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Comment from Norbanus
These nicely constructed
and smooth flowing poem
Can tell us your stories
even if we don't know 'em
We watch in your struggle
to dot all the i's
but see things go wrong
after all of those tries
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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These nicely constructed
and smooth flowing poem
Can tell us your stories
even if we don't know 'em
We watch in your struggle
to dot all the i's
but see things go wrong
after all of those tries
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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hehe thanks for the poetic review friend as always
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Second edit a reviewer made a suggestion for single spacing the lines, and I made a couple of changes and added a note in the Author notes.
Comment from cg
A nicely written poem, with a smooth flow and effortless rhyme. I enjoyed this easy read, it brought to mind a recent trip which ended not as planned.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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A nicely written poem, with a smooth flow and effortless rhyme. I enjoyed this easy read, it brought to mind a recent trip which ended not as planned.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thanks for that always good these things stir up memories good or bad huh!
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Second edit a reviewer made a suggestion for single spacing the lines, and I made a couple of changes and added a note in the Author notes.
Comment from c_lucas
Once I turned on the lights and the roaches started scurrying.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Once I turned on the lights and the roaches started scurrying.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thanks friend much apprecitate you taking the time to come by.
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you're welcome, Sankey. Charlie
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Second edit a reviewer made a suggestion for single spacing the lines, and I made a couple of changes and added a note in the Author notes.
Comment from michaelcahill
It's the same in my field too. As caregivers we run into fellow workers that I can't imagine being in this field. Why would anyone be in a field taking care of people when they don't even like people? Well, you know the answer. It must be the biggest pain for you with disabilities. People just don't think. If you are in a wheel chair you can't go over a curb! If the chair is wider than the hall, how do you get down the hall? Then, their job is hospitality and they don't have any! Part of a vacation is being treated special for a little while, right? Just a week, pretty please. Maybe hello, how are ya. Ha! You're on the money here friend. Great piece. mikey
I forgot what it looked like before!! It looks sharp as a tack now. Perfect quatrains. Beautiful. I was up in arms over the content before. Hahaha. mikey
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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It's the same in my field too. As caregivers we run into fellow workers that I can't imagine being in this field. Why would anyone be in a field taking care of people when they don't even like people? Well, you know the answer. It must be the biggest pain for you with disabilities. People just don't think. If you are in a wheel chair you can't go over a curb! If the chair is wider than the hall, how do you get down the hall? Then, their job is hospitality and they don't have any! Part of a vacation is being treated special for a little while, right? Just a week, pretty please. Maybe hello, how are ya. Ha! You're on the money here friend. Great piece. mikey
I forgot what it looked like before!! It looks sharp as a tack now. Perfect quatrains. Beautiful. I was up in arms over the content before. Hahaha. mikey
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thanks mate you are always there for us. Hope we get to meet some day.
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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I'm sure these inconsistencies and hardships of travel are
Extremely difficult in your situation.
You have shown just how true this is.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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I'm sure these inconsistencies and hardships of travel are
Extremely difficult in your situation.
You have shown just how true this is.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thanks friend. I need to get onto the airlines too hhe. If we were still flying, we could only get assistance on full priced airlines. Thanks again.
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Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem from the author. For some strange reason I kept thinking of the song, "Hotel California." The words, "You can check out any time, but you can never leave," are foremost in my mind. Just remember no matter how bad a hotel is if you can at least leave you are lucky.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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This is an interesting poem from the author. For some strange reason I kept thinking of the song, "Hotel California." The words, "You can check out any time, but you can never leave," are foremost in my mind. Just remember no matter how bad a hotel is if you can at least leave you are lucky.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thanks maate. Only problem is most of them want you to pay in full up front on entry now.
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That is bad.
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Seems a lot of guests want to take off without paying hence the need to charge on entry.
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I can understand that. They take your credit card details in this part of the world.
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Second edit a reviewer made a suggestion for single spacing the lines, and I made a couple of changes and added a note in the Author notes.
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Yes, that is even better
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
good use of enjambment to keep the story flowing from line to line
good alliteration in driving till dropping
good satiric humor in commenting on some of life's more unsavory moments and the less than gracious people we can encounter, even in the "hospitality" industry
Brooke
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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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solid use of abcb rhyming
good use of enjambment to keep the story flowing from line to line
good alliteration in driving till dropping
good satiric humor in commenting on some of life's more unsavory moments and the less than gracious people we can encounter, even in the "hospitality" industry
Brooke
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thanks friend for your kind review. Did wonder if I sould have enteres it for a competition or something.
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Comment from akulkumol
You are right but, the writing looks like a complain rather than a poem..your sentiments and feelings can be felt through out your writings...it would have been better to read as a short script with some more elaboration ....thanks for sharing..
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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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You are right but, the writing looks like a complain rather than a poem..your sentiments and feelings can be felt through out your writings...it would have been better to read as a short script with some more elaboration ....thanks for sharing..
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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hi you make a good point. I had in mind at least 3 properties where we had particular problems.
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Second edit a reviewer made a suggestion for single spacing the lines, and I made a couple of changes and added a note in the Author notes.
