Comment from MagKing

Excellent

That's a very great fine write without doubt.But I think it will make more effort or meaning when you recite it to a royal one.
Congratulation on your winning!

MagKing

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

A excellent poem - very well written - good rhyming couplets and a worthy winner. I enjoyed your author notes and like you wondered about the motivational demand in the prompt. I thought it meant something like 'getting them to eat their porridge' or 'take their medicine'. I like your idea about the book. Well done! Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Dorothy, thanks for the kind words - the voters obviously didn't care too much about the 'motivational' aspect.

Steve

Comment from Lovinia

Exceptional

Hi Steve

What a magical land of Gobbledegooks!. Forget the kiddies ... you roped me in. lol

Full of maxing creatures and folks .... like living in a grande parade all day. I imagine children will love this and what a great book it would make. The colourful pages and plenty of "spot the ..." and I love the little blue mirror at the back. Go on ... do it ... I have half a dozen young children who would love a story like this. My sons' are a bit old now ... though this is the kind of book that would attract me as a mum to buy. Witty, fun, colourful, imaginative and so much going on. In fact I would probably purchase it for me to read pretending it was for the kids. LOL I did that with a number of their childhood stories. Heheh. Loads of poetic technique and wonderfully expressed imagery. Terrific presentation. A worthy winner as per usual ....... :))) Great work and congratulations. Yes the prompt didn't define itself very well. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Lovi, thanks for the kind words and the six stars - so glad you liked this piece.

I used it yesterday with a special needs class I was supervising - asked them to recall all the 'characters' after I'd read it to them and yes, they seemed to enjoy.

I have 'get published' as one of my goals for this year so maybe this would be a good one to start with.

Steve

reply by Lovinia on 21-Mar-2014

Hi Steve

You do excel in the poetry for the children ... though adults can enjoy your work as well which to me is the right first step towards publishing. i can imagine some weird and wonderful creatures and characters. I would just love to see ... published ... for you. You do have exceptional talent. Gobbledegooks is such a fab title. Hugs - Lovi xoxox

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

Excellent poem for kids. And it appeals to me too! I love stories and poems about fairies, princesses, knights, and witches.

Oz-unreal!

Good luck in the contest!

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Thanks, Donald.

Steve

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This is a consistently rhymed with a happy-skippy meter, the sort children live to hear read. It would make a wonderful children's picture book and easier for children to comprehend if the lines are accompanied by colorful pictures.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

This is a great children's poem. Has all
the elements needed to entertain and hold
their attention.
Fun words, great images(good for illustrations)
terrific rhyme and meter - the fast pace always a plus.
Good luck in the contest. Nancy

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Nancy, thanks for the thoughtful review.

Contest won!

Steve

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

This kid liked it. Placed me on an elephant feeling like a king and the I had to get off and let some other person ride. Well done poet. Many blessings.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Maharajah for a day, huh?

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

Bravo! This is outstanding in its charm and appeal and rhyme and creativity and fun and humor and ...everything. I can't wait to find out who wrote this masterpiece! :)

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Just ask the penguins - they're bound to know!

Thanks for the extravagant praise and the six stars.

Comment from Angel Blessings

Exceptional

What a spectacular poem. Very well done, great presentation, and imagery. You do yourself proud! Great children's poem! Can not wait to tell it to my grandchildren!Angel Blessings

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014

Thanks so much for the kind words and six lovely stars - enjoy reading it to your grandchildren.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A brilliant kiddies poem, it rollicked and romped from beginning to end, the rhyming and rhythm were near perfect! It was so easy to read out loud! You should do well in this poetry contest! Blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014

Thanks, Roy.

It was fun to write and now it's won a prize as well.

Steve

reply by royowen on 19-Mar-2014

Well done, thanks for letting me know. Roy