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Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Fleeting Moments" is a neat little gem of a poem with unusual eye appealing structure and form requirements which were met with flair an precision. Good alliteration in first line and metaphor in first and second lines. I guess at our age we had better fixate on the moments we have. Not going to be all that many more.
Preston
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Fleeting Moments" is a neat little gem of a poem with unusual eye appealing structure and form requirements which were met with flair an precision. Good alliteration in first line and metaphor in first and second lines. I guess at our age we had better fixate on the moments we have. Not going to be all that many more.
Preston
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thank you Preston. Yes, our time is limited.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Maybe you should write a poem about time speeding up with age! Indeed there are many fleeting moments. The challenge is to make the most of our limited moments. Thanks for sharing your perspective on time.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Maybe you should write a poem about time speeding up with age! Indeed there are many fleeting moments. The challenge is to make the most of our limited moments. Thanks for sharing your perspective on time.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you Marrietta. Good suggestion
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Well structured verse remercient of the structures of which you write.
Yes we do seem to fixate on moments. Very enjoyable, well presented
and another great photo. Smiles on St. Patrick's Day. I'm fixing my corned beef and cabbage. Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Well structured verse remercient of the structures of which you write.
Yes we do seem to fixate on moments. Very enjoyable, well presented
and another great photo. Smiles on St. Patrick's Day. I'm fixing my corned beef and cabbage. Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thanks Robin. Yum!
Comment from rod007
Time IS fleeting. Where did the years go, one minute we are in our 20's, young, strong and energetic. Then in another moment the grey years set in. Our kids are young adults. Time sure travels fast and the cycle of life will not stop. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Time IS fleeting. Where did the years go, one minute we are in our 20's, young, strong and energetic. Then in another moment the grey years set in. Our kids are young adults. Time sure travels fast and the cycle of life will not stop. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Thank you rod. Yup, it is relentless.
Comment from RGstar
Another great delivery in your saga of structures. Good connection between image and text.
Sensible and philosophical.
Good write.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Another great delivery in your saga of structures. Good connection between image and text.
Sensible and philosophical.
Good write.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Thanks RG. It is a true journey.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
This is a fine Septolet example.
Perfect formbatting and structure.
Ccomplies with all Septolet guidelines.
A very effective complementary picture.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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This is a fine Septolet example.
Perfect formbatting and structure.
Ccomplies with all Septolet guidelines.
A very effective complementary picture.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you Shirley.
Comment from trimple
I think this poem is wonderful Tom.
We are all dictated by our own definition of man-made time.
A perfect septolet!
kind regards
trimple :)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I think this poem is wonderful Tom.
We are all dictated by our own definition of man-made time.
A perfect septolet!
kind regards
trimple :)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you Tracey. I appreciate the review and love those stars.
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:)
Comment from Gungalo
Solid structures
of time
are held high
As we
fixate
on man's
fleeting moments
So true Tom and such a great Septolet. It sure does show the subject very well.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Solid structures
of time
are held high
As we
fixate
on man's
fleeting moments
So true Tom and such a great Septolet. It sure does show the subject very well.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you Gungalo.
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Smile.
Comment from tfawcus
Your small sevens are a wry look at the way we enslave ourselves to clocks and time schedules. The seconds slip by just as fast whether we monitor them closely or not. 'Fixate' carries a nice double sense in your poem.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Your small sevens are a wry look at the way we enslave ourselves to clocks and time schedules. The seconds slip by just as fast whether we monitor them closely or not. 'Fixate' carries a nice double sense in your poem.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you tfawcus, for your very aware analysis.
