The Cardinal
Bright and colorful......10 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
Vibrant Cardinal
Bold brightness, engaged by flight
Motivation soars
:-) One can't help but realign:
Vibrant Cardinal -Bold brightness,
engaged by flight -Motivation
soars.
which I find many a great haiku/senryu/5-7-5 encourages :-)
Nicely done!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Vibrant Cardinal
Bold brightness, engaged by flight
Motivation soars
:-) One can't help but realign:
Vibrant Cardinal -Bold brightness,
engaged by flight -Motivation
soars.
which I find many a great haiku/senryu/5-7-5 encourages :-)
Nicely done!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the exceptional comments. Have great weekend!
Comment from juliaSjames
I like the words you use to describe this gorgeous bird. Without a color reference, you nonetheless express the essence of scarlet.
Excellent final line. It's true that I feel a burst of exhilaration when a cardinal flutters into view.
The artwork and the bold font underscore the message of your write.
Best of luck in this enjoyable contest.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I like the words you use to describe this gorgeous bird. Without a color reference, you nonetheless express the essence of scarlet.
Excellent final line. It's true that I feel a burst of exhilaration when a cardinal flutters into view.
The artwork and the bold font underscore the message of your write.
Best of luck in this enjoyable contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the exceptional comments. So glad you enjoyed the poem. Have a great weekend!
Comment from RYME4U
This is well written, Cardinals a beautiful birds. You have captured the essence of this bird with your words. This is a job well done.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This is well written, Cardinals a beautiful birds. You have captured the essence of this bird with your words. This is a job well done.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the great comments. Have a great weekend!
Comment from ennahanid
Such a colorful choice for your contest entry and that little birdie sure does complement your words so very well. I wish you luck and enjoyed popping in on your page this morning - Dinah
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Such a colorful choice for your contest entry and that little birdie sure does complement your words so very well. I wish you luck and enjoyed popping in on your page this morning - Dinah
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the great comments. Have a great weekend!
Comment from l.raven
They truly are a beautiful bird...could watch one all day...very well written...and I love the picture...beautiful when flying
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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They truly are a beautiful bird...could watch one all day...very well written...and I love the picture...beautiful when flying
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the great comments. Have a great weekend!
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you are so very welcome...xxoo
Comment from in777wr#
This was a wonderful poem. Your poem reads well, and the message is clear. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. Cardinals are beautiful birds. Your last line is very good. Nice job.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This was a wonderful poem. Your poem reads well, and the message is clear. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is in good order. Cardinals are beautiful birds. Your last line is very good. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the great comments. Have a great weekend!
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You're welcome, and the same to you.
Comment from bard owl
The cardinal is one of my favorite birds. Luckily we live in an area where they are a common sight. The syllable count is perfect and the picture you have chosen enhances your words. Excellent contest entry. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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The cardinal is one of my favorite birds. Luckily we live in an area where they are a common sight. The syllable count is perfect and the picture you have chosen enhances your words. Excellent contest entry. Best of luck.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the great comments. Have a great weekend!
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a great bird 5-7-5 poem for the prompt written with the perfect syllable count. Good luck to you in the contest:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This is a great bird 5-7-5 poem for the prompt written with the perfect syllable count. Good luck to you in the contest:)
Teresa
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and the great comments. Have a great weekend!
Comment from standingbear
A cardinal is a vibrant bird whose color is enhanced by flight. Even without the picture I would have seen his beauty in my minds eye. Well done
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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A cardinal is a vibrant bird whose color is enhanced by flight. Even without the picture I would have seen his beauty in my minds eye. Well done
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and your exceptional comments. So glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from RodG
'Vibrant' is the perfect word to describe the male cardinal as it matches his color and his personality.
I like the alliteration of "bold brightness" to also emphasize that color.
Your last line is provocative as it makes us think of the cardinal as the Speaker does, a metaphor for "getting started" and "moving" and "motivation."
Cardinals are our state bird and we pronounce their name with THREE syllables, not two. Please examine the syllable count in line 1 as you appear to have 6 not 5.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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'Vibrant' is the perfect word to describe the male cardinal as it matches his color and his personality.
I like the alliteration of "bold brightness" to also emphasize that color.
Your last line is provocative as it makes us think of the cardinal as the Speaker does, a metaphor for "getting started" and "moving" and "motivation."
Cardinals are our state bird and we pronounce their name with THREE syllables, not two. Please examine the syllable count in line 1 as you appear to have 6 not 5.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this excellent review and your exceptional comments. Thanks for noticing the syllable error! I changed it.
I am so glad you actually understood what I was trying to convey.
Thank you....Have a great weekend!