Apocryphal Apparition
I gazed into my darkened reflection, it stared back at me...46 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem aboutt the imaage that the mirror reflected back. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem aboutt the imaage that the mirror reflected back. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thank you for your kind comments and well wishes.
Comment from Chuck23
It has been a long time since I read Poe. You portrayed his style well. I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it to be very perfect for the contest you've entered it into.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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It has been a long time since I read Poe. You portrayed his style well. I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it to be very perfect for the contest you've entered it into.
Good luck!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thanks very much, Chuck. I hope lots of voters share your opinion, LOL. Seriously, I'm very grateful for your insights and outstanding review.
Comment from califdot
Nice poem and it is nicely written. I enjoyed reading your poem as it has a good flow to it. When it is read out loud the cadence is strong. The abab rhyme pattern works well in this poem. My favorite lines are: "glass crashed when--like waves on yon distant shore--/remnants of what once was succumbed to madness, as fate foretold." You write well and have done a great job overall.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Nice poem and it is nicely written. I enjoyed reading your poem as it has a good flow to it. When it is read out loud the cadence is strong. The abab rhyme pattern works well in this poem. My favorite lines are: "glass crashed when--like waves on yon distant shore--/remnants of what once was succumbed to madness, as fate foretold." You write well and have done a great job overall.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thanks for your thoughtful comments and for reading my work, califdot. I am very grateful.
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You are welcome!
Comment from mfowler
I think you've mimicked Poe really well. The archaic language goes so well with this dark, foreboding glimpse of madness. Your rhyme and meter are spot on, and I found the language challenging, but manageable. You've made excellent use of dialogue, alliteration, the presentation of dark space with white letters, and changing fonts (normal/italics)to complement your narrative intent. You look into that mirror and a monstrous apparition of yourself going mad, only to see the mirror broken and yourself imprisoned in that madness. Oh, yes, you must have an extremely bad day, or a lot of fun writing this. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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I think you've mimicked Poe really well. The archaic language goes so well with this dark, foreboding glimpse of madness. Your rhyme and meter are spot on, and I found the language challenging, but manageable. You've made excellent use of dialogue, alliteration, the presentation of dark space with white letters, and changing fonts (normal/italics)to complement your narrative intent. You look into that mirror and a monstrous apparition of yourself going mad, only to see the mirror broken and yourself imprisoned in that madness. Oh, yes, you must have an extremely bad day, or a lot of fun writing this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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You nailed it, Mark, and very well, no less. You have encapsulated perfectly, even with the archaic vernacular, my meaning. Very impressive, my friend. You were so spot on, it's as if you were inside my head as I wrote it. However, I wouldn't recommend that, LOL.
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we've had this conversation before methinks edgar
Comment from lkdunny
What a wonderful read, strong imaging with your words. Captivating and spell bounding. Unique style, not often seen, but worth the read. Very well done. Your choice of art work was excellent. Awesome work. thank you for sharing your talent..
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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What a wonderful read, strong imaging with your words. Captivating and spell bounding. Unique style, not often seen, but worth the read. Very well done. Your choice of art work was excellent. Awesome work. thank you for sharing your talent..
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thank you for allowing me to share it with you by reading it, Ikdunny. I am truly grateful.
Comment from Leineco
Not that I think you need the affirmation
but long before I read your author's notes
it was quite evident that Poe
was lurking in inspiration's shadowed corner :-)
As to the vision described in the poem
all I can say is
hopefully, I will never be confronted so!
shiver inducing write!
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Not that I think you need the affirmation
but long before I read your author's notes
it was quite evident that Poe
was lurking in inspiration's shadowed corner :-)
As to the vision described in the poem
all I can say is
hopefully, I will never be confronted so!
shiver inducing write!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Leineco, I really appreciate that. What I saw there shook me up as well LOL! Perhaps someone (or something) is trying to tell me something?
