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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You really deserved to win this contest, not only was is amazing, your thoughts on the soul make so much sense. The night nefore my first husband died, (he was very young) I believe someone/thing came for him, but he wasn't ready to go. He was visibly upset and pointing and waving his finger in the air. By then, we couldn't understand what he was saying. He slept peacefully that night, and the following day. That evening, he slipped peacefully away with me and our young sons at his side. I will never forget those two nights. I believe he wanted one more day to prepare himself.
Sorry, I've gone off in one of my novella reviews again! Your short story brought it back to me, in a nice way. This happened nearly 40 years ago. I'm so pleased you won the contest. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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You really deserved to win this contest, not only was is amazing, your thoughts on the soul make so much sense. The night nefore my first husband died, (he was very young) I believe someone/thing came for him, but he wasn't ready to go. He was visibly upset and pointing and waving his finger in the air. By then, we couldn't understand what he was saying. He slept peacefully that night, and the following day. That evening, he slipped peacefully away with me and our young sons at his side. I will never forget those two nights. I believe he wanted one more day to prepare himself.
Sorry, I've gone off in one of my novella reviews again! Your short story brought it back to me, in a nice way. This happened nearly 40 years ago. I'm so pleased you won the contest. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. I am pleased you could share something that was evoked from this piece. I did three soul responses along the way.
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I'll have to look for those. Are they with these short stories? I'm up to 68 now, and really enjoying them. I'd already reviewed a few, but read them again.
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You read one, Pebble, and this one. The other is in here somewhere.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a very good write, Bill, and obviously everyone else thought so too since it won the contest. Good job on using drama (exclaiming..Oh, My soul..) to make your point. Congratulations on your win.
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018
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This is a very good write, Bill, and obviously everyone else thought so too since it won the contest. Good job on using drama (exclaiming..Oh, My soul..) to make your point. Congratulations on your win.
Melissa
Comment Written 22-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018
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Thanks again, Melissa.
Comment from country ranch writer
Nicely done for this and we all look for our soul in one way or another. The soul is a curious one it can drift on the wind till it slowly makes its way back to us when the time comes to say goodbye.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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Nicely done for this and we all look for our soul in one way or another. The soul is a curious one it can drift on the wind till it slowly makes its way back to us when the time comes to say goodbye.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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Thanks, CRW
Comment from Earl Corp
If I had a six star rating this story would have earned it. It's very moving and for 150 words it does the job of telling the story and invoking reader emotion. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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If I had a six star rating this story would have earned it. It's very moving and for 150 words it does the job of telling the story and invoking reader emotion. Very nice job.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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Thsnk you, Earl. I called up a couple of previoud posts from the past.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautiful and very reflective write, Bill -- like the way you chose to present a 'story' first and then your viewpoint. Almost like a parable....thanx for sharing and CONGRATULATIONS! :) :) Yvette
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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A beautiful and very reflective write, Bill -- like the way you chose to present a 'story' first and then your viewpoint. Almost like a parable....thanx for sharing and CONGRATULATIONS! :) :) Yvette
Comment Written 21-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Yvette
Comment from trimple
What a wonder short story that tell of what a soul may be.
A deserved win Bill.
Love the line
'In her hospice bed she seemed lost in a sea of sheets.'
stunning description, and deserved winning entry
kind regards
tracey trimpel:)
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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What a wonder short story that tell of what a soul may be.
A deserved win Bill.
Love the line
'In her hospice bed she seemed lost in a sea of sheets.'
stunning description, and deserved winning entry
kind regards
tracey trimpel:)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Tracey, for the very kind review. Bill
Comment from EMB
Loved the mention of the "sea of sheets." It's so visual and telling at the same time. This has a sad tone, but you do end it with a twinge of hope. Nice job. :)
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Loved the mention of the "sea of sheets." It's so visual and telling at the same time. This has a sad tone, but you do end it with a twinge of hope. Nice job. :)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Edward, for giving this a look, and for the positive comments. Bill
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, bill, you did an excellent job writing this poetic tale of the soul and how it finds its way home in death. congratulations on your win...
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, bill, you did an excellent job writing this poetic tale of the soul and how it finds its way home in death. congratulations on your win...
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from MagKing
That's a great concept you've got there
What a lovely piece...
I can see that you're the contest winner.
Congratulations on your winning!
MagKing
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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That's a great concept you've got there
What a lovely piece...
I can see that you're the contest winner.
Congratulations on your winning!
MagKing
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from rouskin
Perfect write with excellent artwork and clear message:When one day it reunites, we become the lesser, and the 'whoul' returns to its home.It really deserves to be a winner Congratulations !
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Perfect write with excellent artwork and clear message:When one day it reunites, we become the lesser, and the 'whoul' returns to its home.It really deserves to be a winner Congratulations !
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the excellent review and the kind words. Bill