The Empty Sails
Sonnet contest entry96 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Beautiful sonnet with excellent end rhymes and iambic pentameter. I've never been on the sea, but you make is sound tantalizing. Great metaphor for your muse. Hoist anchor, or whatever the saying is, and let your muse give your more of the same. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Beautiful sonnet with excellent end rhymes and iambic pentameter. I've never been on the sea, but you make is sound tantalizing. Great metaphor for your muse. Hoist anchor, or whatever the saying is, and let your muse give your more of the same. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review and good luck wishes, WJD. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from amahra
This writing is so beautiful; the writing just flows off the page. Your rhyming comes so easily and so effortlessly. It is really professional.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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This writing is so beautiful; the writing just flows off the page. Your rhyming comes so easily and so effortlessly. It is really professional.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer, amahra. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and kind words. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
Ron
Comment from kiwijenny
The becalmed yacht...is a great metaphor for writers block
It is the risk we take when we set sail out in open water....
But when the wind fires up again we can sail home on the sheer beauty of it
God bless...well written
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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The becalmed yacht...is a great metaphor for writers block
It is the risk we take when we set sail out in open water....
But when the wind fires up again we can sail home on the sheer beauty of it
God bless...well written
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, Jenny. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Deniz22
I dream of distant shores beneath the mast
as sadly, once again, the anchor's cast.
Simply great lines...the muse cast the anchor. And what a superb picture! Terrific!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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I dream of distant shores beneath the mast
as sadly, once again, the anchor's cast.
Simply great lines...the muse cast the anchor. And what a superb picture! Terrific!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Deniz. I'm glad you liked the piece.
DS
Comment from GentleWind
This poem is awe-inspiring! What a lovely, yet picture you paint. My favorite lines are: Too often come these woes of windless days while pondering where inspiration's gone.
Loved the picture. It illuminated the page preparing us for the poem. Great work.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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This poem is awe-inspiring! What a lovely, yet picture you paint. My favorite lines are: Too often come these woes of windless days while pondering where inspiration's gone.
Loved the picture. It illuminated the page preparing us for the poem. Great work.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and the big sixer, GentleWind. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and kind words. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment from kiwisteveh
A lovely sonnet which is sure to do well in the contest, especially since it touches upon the very reason for most of us to be here.
The extended sailing metaphor is beautifully handled - I am using something similar although with different intent in my own sonnet (not posted yet. I may have to go and ratchet it up a little to compete with this!
I liked this stanza in particular:
I free the helm to drift the open seas,
to find what precious gems the muse inspires.
I long to feel her touch upon the breeze,
to fuel the every thought my ship requires.
... and the closing couplet is superb as well.
Good luck.
Steve
PS re the new display - I have my display set to a larger size for readability reasons - I could not view your lovely picture properly....
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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A lovely sonnet which is sure to do well in the contest, especially since it touches upon the very reason for most of us to be here.
The extended sailing metaphor is beautifully handled - I am using something similar although with different intent in my own sonnet (not posted yet. I may have to go and ratchet it up a little to compete with this!
I liked this stanza in particular:
I free the helm to drift the open seas,
to find what precious gems the muse inspires.
I long to feel her touch upon the breeze,
to fuel the every thought my ship requires.
... and the closing couplet is superb as well.
Good luck.
Steve
PS re the new display - I have my display set to a larger size for readability reasons - I could not view your lovely picture properly....
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Steve. Can't wait to read tour piece. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. Have a good one.
Ron
Comment from boxergirl
Breathtaking picture to accompany your well-penned sonnet. The end rhymes are flawless and the analogy of a ship being a writer was mesmerizing to me. It looks like a possible winner to me. 8-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Breathtaking picture to accompany your well-penned sonnet. The end rhymes are flawless and the analogy of a ship being a writer was mesmerizing to me. It looks like a possible winner to me. 8-)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, boxergirl. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and kind words. I'm humbled. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment from ravenblack
Well, the anchor may be cast but the figurehead must be your muse because she still inspired you to write an excellent sonnet. Sometimes we need those horse latitudes to gather our thoughts and prepare for the next voyage. And I know you know that treasure awaits. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Well, the anchor may be cast but the figurehead must be your muse because she still inspired you to write an excellent sonnet. Sometimes we need those horse latitudes to gather our thoughts and prepare for the next voyage. And I know you know that treasure awaits. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great review, RB. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
DS
Comment from tfawcus
Perhaps we need the woes of windless days to give time to distil our thoughts and crystallise them on the page. Your seafaring metaphor is written with all of the deep connection the sailor has for the element he loves.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Perhaps we need the woes of windless days to give time to distil our thoughts and crystallise them on the page. Your seafaring metaphor is written with all of the deep connection the sailor has for the element he loves.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great review, tfawcus. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from barleygirl
Your poem is brilliant, likening your muse to the wind in your sails, but not done in a predictable, already-been-done way . . . very originally stated & shown with your vivid imagery. Your language choices reflect the breeze you're referring to, your poem flows so well. Great job, good luck in the contest, & thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Your poem is brilliant, likening your muse to the wind in your sails, but not done in a predictable, already-been-done way . . . very originally stated & shown with your vivid imagery. Your language choices reflect the breeze you're referring to, your poem flows so well. Great job, good luck in the contest, & thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and good luck wishes, barleygirl. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
DS
